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Nov 21, 2009
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Fix it. Fix it Fix it Fix it !!
Looking both
ways on that
one way street
crashing that
brand new vehicle
for selfish reasons
smoke pours from the engine
into the night
taking shape
into that dirty love triangle you call home
Mobile no more
like a used car
waiting to be sold in a used car lot
leaving you crying on the shoulder
of a mechanic that fixes everything
but still drives the same old jalopy.
ways on that
one way street
crashing that
brand new vehicle
for selfish reasons
smoke pours from the engine
into the night
taking shape
into that dirty love triangle you call home
Mobile no more
like a used car
waiting to be sold in a used car lot
leaving you crying on the shoulder
of a mechanic that fixes everything
but still drives the same old jalopy.
— G.D.K, Nov 21, 2009
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Critiques
Heading South
16 years 6 months ago
Critique
Orphani
16 years 6 months ago
I think this is a good
G.D.K
16 years 6 months ago
I read your writings,please
Kailashana
16 years 6 months ago
Really good, interesting
G.D.K
16 years 6 months ago
Thank you for taking the
Mac Iver
16 years 6 months ago
I liked it.
G.D.K
16 years 6 months ago
Me too but your comment
Bert Lamrick
16 years 6 months ago
This is
Kailashana
16 years 6 months ago
Hehehehe Rick. Reading it
G.D.K
16 years 6 months ago
Thank you Rick.