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Dalton
Nov 20, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Goddess of the Moon:

The
Sun a
Man at
The centre of
A widening vortex
The Earth clad in
Unutterable night
The Moon a woman
Transfixed by
The Sun
The Sun
Transfixed by
The Moon a woman
Unutterable night
The Earth clad in
A widening vortex
The centre of
Man
The Sun...
— Dalton, Nov 20, 2009

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Country/Region: The Celestial River

Favorite Poets: Shane MacGowan, Dylan Thomas, Qays ibn Al-Mulawwah, Wallada bint al-Mustakfi, Rumi, Khalil Gibran, Yona Wallach, Arthur Rimbaud, Paul Eluard, Brendan Behan, James Clarence Mangan, William Blake, Tom Waits, Charles Bukowski, Forough Farrokhzad, Thomas Chatterton

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G.D.K

16 years 6 months ago

I’m no pro by any means at

I'm no pro by any means at all but sometimes I think untitled work is a way of fearing the inevitable.
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

I’m not so sure G.D.K.

I'm not so sure G.D.K. Untitled sometimes means\ what more can I say? Dalton's poem speaks for itself. Although most would say he's got it bassackwards. (True enough tho; our center (male and female) is unutterable heat.) ;-) ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 6 months ago

Untitled

Dalton This describes me and another totally I am the sun and he is my man in the moon one day i would be the centre of his sun Always Blue
D

Dalton

16 years 1 month ago

it’s true the governor of woman

it's true the governor of woman is the moon. i did have it the wrong way round. i was thinking of the perfect state of femininity. and what is more glorious than the sun. but don't gaze too long or you'll go blind. i have made as i see the proper changes. i think the poem works better this way. i hope.
Seren

Seren

16 years 1 month ago

Dear Dalton

Wow I loved this one ... no crit this is just such a pleasure to read thank you love JayCee x x ("Quote:-For every beauty there is an eye somewhere to see it. For every truth there is an ear somewhere to hear it. For every love there is a heart somewhere to receive it.-Ivan Panin")