Sonnet the hedgehog

Sonnet the Hedgehog... tee hee. Sounds like a Python sketch, and just as amusing. The raw truth is, you can have all my stars. Cheers, Christina

I just love your sense of humor, LOL. Always, Cat

One of the best pieces I've ever taken the time to read! Humorous, profound, and very enjoyable! Bravo, Sir!

Just a minor point on line 13, I'm reading an extra syllable and would suggest dropping "now" so that it would read: "My muse bombards my mind with sights and scenes" For a wider audience I might replace "stars" with "praise" but that is so minor as to be worse than nitpicking. Seriously though, very well done. I read this aloud and the form and flow was utterly natural. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

But that hardly matters. It's certainly close enough. I disagree with Jonathan about the work's readability, but only slightly. It runs awkwardly over my teeth in spots, particularly at L6 (which I would change to "Say, starkly unadorned, and harshly dry?") It is a wonderful jest in poetry--but it may go unremarked. It's perhaps too hopeful of you to suppose that many readers will get the point of it, that point given in the last couplet. It's a great couplet, but without some kind of emphasis on 'All wasted,' it can easily go overlooked. This emphasis is, of course, easily supplied in an oral presentation, but maybe not, here. More: I agree wholeheartedly with the point of that last couplet. It is gross poetic error to insist that the form trumps the poetic insight. If the epiphany wears a size 12 shoe . . . .