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Pretty Pinks

Pretty Pinks

Wrapped up with pretty pinks and ivory lace
I find soft moments bruised with maroon thoughts
of want-to-bes, and wishes, and have-nots
for dreams that should have lingered with the trace
of gentle care that glowed a youthful face.
I’ve seen my end with little more than play
of budding waltzes spun in rhythmic grace
and withered voices turned to shades of grey.

Without much hope, my dreams become the blur
of softly faded dust splitting my seams,
arranging passing life before my eyes
coloring me with promised hues that were.
A breeze from softer reds to marbled creams
spread smoothly on the path of my sunrise
to tangle me in frayed and crimson knots
where sorrowed hope is all that's left in me.

And of it all, my voice with heartfelt plea,
finds beauty prone and flattened as it rots;
yet, eyes with deeper peer shall find more spots
to paint soft grace within the soul of me.
So here, I bare the essence that is me
hoping that life will flicker as it plots
finding a reason for my joy to rise
becoming more than lace and pretty pink.

As each step tones the lilt within my prance,
I stop the tempo short and then surmise
that I am just about to reach life's brink,
enlightened by the woman in the dance.



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Phrase Prompt:

~~"I wish I was beautiful So come dance the silence down through the morning...Help me believe in anything”~~

partial lyrics from the album
"August and Everything After" by the Counting Crows.


Rhyme: abbaacac defdefbg gbbggbhi jhij
Meter: iambic pentameter
Genre: double sonnet

Sonnett Reference:  http://www.rossettiarchive.org/docs/orchard003.raw.html

— Pamela A. Lamppa, Nov 17, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, Robert Louis Stevenson, William Butler Yeats, John Keats, Pablo Neruda, Algernon Charles Swinburne, T.S. Elliott, and too many more to begin to cover them all.

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themoonman

themoonman

16 years 6 months ago

Pamela...

Impressive... a double sonnet no less... enjoyed reading. Great phrase prompt... Richard
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

I love cadence poems…

I love cadence poems... it's as if your soul marches in the words. There are some changes I would make (had I the talent to write the poem HA!) throughout the poem, don't know if they'd work tho. Wrapped with pretty pinks and ivory lace soft the moments bruised with marooned thoughts of want-to-be's, and wishes best, and have-nots are but dreams that should have lingered with the trace of gentle care that glowed a youthful face. I’ve seen my end with little more than a fair play of budding waltzes spun in rhymes and rhythmic grace withered voices turned to shades of palest grey. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Pamela A. Lamppa

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 6 months ago

How I love the ideas you

How I love the ideas you have presented and if I were not required to maintain metered verse in this double sonnet, I may just take you up on them. Lovely way of relating these ideas. Thank you. ~Pamela
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Lunegirl

16 years 6 months ago

wow

This poem is amazing. I really enjoyed reading it. I think its very cleverly put together vix ; )
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Lunegirl

16 years 6 months ago

wow

This poem is amazing. I really enjoyed reading it. I think its very cleverly put together vix ; )
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

Well, 40 lashes with a wet

Well, 40 lashes with a wet noodle for Anna and wash her mouth out with soap for forgetting about the sonnet thingy. And congrats on your winning, Pamela. Let me know if you like the designer soap. I may have to buy some for future faux pas. Wink. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha