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Just a way

There are these people that write rhymes on pieces of paper,
With black pens estranged by anger,
Playing the victim as if they're the stranger,
And all these tears they cry,
In all these fears they lie,
Scared of being insecure,
Scared of being hated,
Invaded,
Thinking if they don't write they will never make it,
most of them will,
none of them kill.
I've cut a man on his wrist,
Fuck a plan i am pissed,
Blank hearted no black beard not retarded.
Not cold hearted but past it.
— bloke, Nov 16, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

G'Day Bloke :)

WOW nice rant ... I really enjoyed this one ... just one thing third line thier? their lol ... i feel this has a little different tone than your other writes ... I look forward to you exploring a little more in words ... I gave you five cause simply I feel your moving out of your comfort zone a little .. and thats not a bad thing love and hugs Jayne x x
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bloke

16 years 6 months ago

seren

Thank you seren.
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 6 months ago

Bloke...

It is good to see you here and thank you for posting this piece. On the "their" in the third line, I think it would read a bit easier if it were "they're"... I like the anger presented, a good read... loved the last line, to be past cold hearted... yes, loved that line! Richard