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Seren
Seren
Nov 16, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Dance for Me

Don't Turn around
I need you to see,
I want all around
not to fear or flee

I lit up the moon
in phases for you,
at full it blazes
my feelings true

animals dance
as I conduct the moon,
and ripples of music
encompass to spoon

A foxtrotting duck
that looks like a loon,
makes me roll
all around the room

the waltzing walrus
shakes the earth,
and with ballet slippers
mice shake my girth

now you see?
I said not to turn around,
I wanted to hear
your laughter resound

— Seren, Nov 16, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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CyberSpace

16 years 6 months ago

seren

another from the lovely mind of jayne ladies & gentlemen u gotta love this girls mind if i had a third of it maybe i could read music love it baby they just keep gettin better & better'r love snake xoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxoxo
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

CyberSpace lol

You are biased how many times I gotta tell you ... and you are too stubborn to read music lol ... glad you liked this one ... told you it was out there lol love you forever Mwah J x x x
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Bosscombat

16 years 6 months ago

:)

i was once known as the waltzing walrus but ive never worn ballet shoes. eggshellant <3 ♣
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

I am soooo going to smack

I am soooo going to smack you ... when I see you next ... but maybe not lol ... you might like it lmaooooooo :P Love you brother Jayn-knee 2bums
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 6 months ago

Dancing for you...

I LMAO, at the images of a fox-trotting duck, waltzing walrus, and mice wearing ballet shoes. Funny stuff! ~ Higgest bugs and lotta love, Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Gee

I am soooo glad you laughed lol thats what this was all about ... way too much serious stuff being writen ... needed to lighten up lol Love you huni and Snake said thanks for staying on my case about getting married lol hes been trying to get me to the alter for 9 yrs LOL Jayneeee mwah x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 6 months ago

On the altar of the Dragon...

MMMMMMMMmmmmmmmmmm.... Ketchup! My wife says I'll put it on everything except cereal, and ice cream, and if they made hamburger flavored ice cream... Look, it took me six years, and then I had to get tricky, to get her to marry me! I started a big fight, took a bunch of my stuff, and threw it in the back of my car, drove around for a while, and then when I thought she was wondering what she was going to do without me, I went back and asked her to marry me! It worked! She probably has a slightly different version, but it is pretty much the same. 20 yrs. this last Sept! Do it! ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

LMAO !!!

Geee !! thats priceless lol ... your naughty doing that to her lol poor buggar probably thought you left her ... its not that I dont want to get married lol just to me its a piece of paper but i understand him wanting to get married ... lol well see how the next few months travel lol love and biggest hugs Jayne x x
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Orphani

16 years 6 months ago

I never turn my back on

I never turn my back on ducks, waruses, or woman rolling around on the floor. what a sight. Janey's moon light zoo.You never know what to expect from you. You have a child like imagination. Brilliant except it needs a total rewrite. JUST KIDDING ! Watch out for those loony ducks thayll grab your privates with their beaks and cyber looks pretty ducky. Too cool.L.Barry......o
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest B

LOL happy you dont turn your back ... I finished a story the other day about a little girl who when everyone else wasnt looking could hear the animals talk lol it was for a friends little girl lol ... sooo then I thought dancing animals lol and here we have them ... Thanks for the heartattack lol I thought OH NOOOOOO ... but seriously this ones done no edits just as it is,a bit of fun love and big hugs J x x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

And just what were we

And just what were we imbing Missy? You should at least share it with you mum, (foxtrotting loon that she is wearing ballet slippers no less.) Methinks you went down Jayne's rabbit hole. I'd like to give this a six just because. luv, mum "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Mum

NOoooooo I wasnt drinking when I wrote this one lol I wish !! ... and I just smiled moons lol thanks for that comment made my dayyyyyyyy lol I am still giggling ... btw I got my book about half and hour ago with a lovely message from Roy ... nowwww we wait for your package lol love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 6 months ago

glad to see you on top!

of your game - the spotlight! You have carved a permanent niche there and that's where you belong! Great write Boni
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Boni

awwww thanks so much for your comment this one was just a bit of fun to lighten the mood a tad lol ... big smiles (huggles) and I appreciate the time you take always love and big hugs Jayne x x
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Jayne:

A very playful poem! Very nice! I love the way you amuse yourself with delightful words and images, the way in which you guide the reader from a focused attention to a smile. Thank you, I really enjoyed reading it. Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Hugo

LOL ... I am a bit of a joker and sometimes we all just need to lighten up lol and I thought what a perfect way to do it lol make everyone laugh ....he he he and thank you for your comment :D love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x
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Granny

16 years 6 months ago

Jane

Loved it ! Great write, Oh ya they won the game big time. Take care & God Bless
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Jill

OMG thats awesssome news ... hey they say losing is character building lol but damn its nice to have a win ... congratulate him for me... bet your just the proudest nana around lol (hugs) and love Jayne x x Oh and thanks,glad you liked this one :D
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 6 months ago

My Queen

you are the undisbuted champ. No one writes like you. this was wonderful. Love, Elizabeth
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Elizabeth

Lyz called me the Empress and now your calling me Queen lol a girl could get a big head if I didnt have kids to bring me back to earth lol haha thanks for the wonderful compliment I am so happy you liked this one, just a bit of fun lol love and hugz Jayne x x x
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lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Smiles all around

as we enjoy this pleasurable read. Just like fantasia, loved it too. This is a treat, very visual words and a job well done. Love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Awwww huni

that movie was brilliant I remember I was little when I saw it first and I was gasping at it ... no wonder I am such dreamer Walt Disney and technology encouraged my imagination ... I was a member of the mickey mouse fan club pmsl .. jesus should I say that out loud lmao love and hugs Jayne x x
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lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Hello Minnie

Long time no read! Lol. I loved disney, still do and I dont care where this one came from, it is a gem. Put a smile on my dial, which I needed, bought back memories and good ones at that, and hey nothing wrong with the Mickey Mouse club, lol. Love lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Lyz

LOL ages eh ? how are you girl I cant sleep I just dragged my sad ass out of bed decided to see what was round to read lol Hugz glad I could give you a smile .. and Mickey will always be cool lol love and big hugs Jayne x x
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lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Oh no

I am a stalker, lol. Just getting some replies in is all, I swear, lol. Take care, Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Lyz

pmsl !!! ya fucking crazy woman slow down in this heat you will have a burn out lol ... cracked me up so bad then lol love and hugs Jayne x x
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lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Let your

fingers do the walking and dance for me, I love this poem. Last call. Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

You are offically Cyclone

You are offically Cyclone Lyz hahaha damn woman you had me running all over replying tonight I been sitting here grinning like a nutter lol love you J x x
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lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Bit of news

They want to change most of the Disney classics. No more Cinderella, even to Snow White. I am shattered, I just gave away all the originals. Blah. I hate all this nonsense. I just thought this, cyclone?, lol, would let u know. Bastards. Love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Good luck with that Mr

Good luck with that Mr Disney lol I think if they tried to really implement change ... I would be the head of the line to tell them to wake up and smell the coffee ... they cant change the classics ... god I just brought Snow White again lmao hahaha I am not joking .. I am the biggest kid in the house pmsl love and hugs J x x x