Seren

Nov 15, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Evermore

After planting a seed
in fallow ground
a saint,
grew a forest
of imagination

another,
advocate of devils
shoved their foot,
through the door
of unconscious delusions,
hoping reality leaked through,
to start its seep
petals of pine,
pour,to soften
realities hard road,
tarred in primrose

a daisy
birthed
to life

freed
from the matrix
soaring to
merge,in the body corporal
complete,
a substance,
that breathes in shimmer
evermore

closing the door,
to delusions masks

on the petals
of one Daisy
memoirs
of time,
trail a wake to
eternity

and one hand
scribbles,
evermore sure

— Seren, Nov 15, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

Jayne, I Bow.~A(darling

Jayne, I Bow. ~A (darling remove a few extra commas) Love, mom "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Mom

I have tried to remove a few commas and moved a couple of words around let me know what you think ... and I bow back and hope your dreaming sweet dreams my darlin' love and hugs Jayne x x

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

Hello Lil' Sis

Pretty words here, but I sense a double meaning. could you please pm me and let me know what it means? Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Big Sis

hope my explanation made some semblance of sense lol love and hugs Jayne x x

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest One

Thank you for the explanation, now it makes perfect sense! You have really grown as a poet. Love, Always, Cat

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear One,I wasnt thinking

Dear One, I wasnt thinking when I posted this one... in light of recent events I maybe should have posted it another day but wasnt thinking of that one line when i did ... and your message made me remember ... and if anyone else thinks this poem is about anything that is going on at the site lol thank again ... it was writen weeks ago long before ... well before love and hugs Jayne x x

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Seren

A little Edgar feel. Most enjoyable read and this reads as a journey. To me anyway. I enjoyed it immensely, well done. Love lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Lyz

Edger is one of my favourite poets ... and thats the best compliment,its funny keith months ago mentioned on of my poems was poeish,LOL or maybe it was keats lol I guess thats the influence of reading too much lovend hugs Jayne x x x

yenti

16 years 6 months ago

Jayne

Now to look with childlike eyes At the scenery that They provide In love of unconditional ways There I would rather spend my Days, Your Write is great as usual am tempted to write a bit on the Harsh side but not yet there are to many lovely words to use, or string together for others. I rem Poe and a film of his writing where there was a can of Magots and that is all I remember of that film LOL. Yet other films this old memory brings words to mind, but maybe not as the script, There is one that always bugs my mind it goes;- Something about the life that I have and the love that I have, is yours, Yours Yours. It was from an old true war film in B&W about a woman spy who ended up being shot and that was her code for being known "Carve her name with Pride" I will seek it out and "E" Mail it to you as it is so lovely and maybe put it on the Neo site, that will do for now am off looking for words, Yours Ian.T

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Ian

Not sure what you mean about harsh ?? but I love poe hes such a legend dark and moody but when he wrote of beauty he wrote it sooo beautifully ... and with his own quirky style and I think he may have been quirky for his times ... thank for taking a look at this one ... its actually about ... my writing lol not about demons or saints lol just metaphors I used to express how it felt hope your both having a good day with much love Jayne x x x

Bosscombat

16 years 6 months ago