Heaven's gift is still my freedom

This voice
Wasted on the curling ear of fashion’s cardboard whore
This love
Pours forth still to the worthy and the innocent
And those delicate words that come from good and honest hearts
Noble in their action, yet -
Splashing like a child in a puddle
For the pleasure of the moment
Never blind, just void of self conscious insecurity
The paranoia of the greedy

Step away from that spider
Cobweb words contrived and twisted
I offered care and clarity to no avail
I wonder how she got so confused?
I’m sure she was beautiful once
A lost baby like all of us might be

I forgot, in the aftermath of her tantrum,
To seek the lovely stars
I miss them
Heaven used to slip them to me while the others slept
And I would pay in soft smiles that drifted to the skies
Now there is a cage to keep me here
And I pine for freedom
To dance where whim might waft me
But I will not let her stab my soul with misguided accusations
And I will not mind her attempts to win the kingdom
I wish her well instead
My heart is my domain
I visit as I wish
I miss the revelry and camaraderie
And am saddened she travels on competition and spite
It is her choice,
Though I feel compassion she would choose that awful place to dwell
I have done no deed to cause disdain
So I retain my wings
And my smile
I think heaven misses me as well
Sometimes stars float down to kiss my cheeks while I am sleeping
And lay with me til morning
Soft stardust on my pillow calls my secret smile
Sleepy eyes adorned with loves gentle diamonds
See life through sparkling joy

I meet a few good hearts still
on my cloud walks

— Cloudthings, Nov 11, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Australia, regional Victoria, AUS

Favorite Poets: So many... Rumi, Spike Milligan, Keats. Many of the Neopoet clan, past & present. A myriad of song writers, Dylan, Jackson Browne, Lior, & I must add the poetic influence of painters, sculptors & creators across the world... Life really, especially the sky.

Critiques

orgami

16 years 6 months ago

first two......

first two paragraphs are marvels because they are of course something different coming from you like bumping into someone where one is least to find want of be it marble facade or cracked projection skill and talent are scales on which others do try to tilt there will always be envy always be that kiss for the reward of silver and yet those that continue in spite continue to write regardless of the storms that lash they/these are my heros/heroinnes i was raised in idealistic times when speechwriters wrote amazing paragraphs and poetry was qouted and published in new voices and fonts we still need to hear and we still need to write

Cloudthings

16 years 6 months ago

how I have missed you & YOUR skill & brilliance... sigh!

What a bloody joy to see you here Steven, how I have missed you & YOUR skill & brilliance... sigh! Yes to all of that, you always know, I love that, you always speak it beneath the shadows of the mundane... I am, alas, reduced to very brief visits here, both my doctors fear the Electromagnetic energy from computers (especially my beloved laptop... ah how I miss a late night Neo session on my laptop) is actually reducing my chances of recovery, at this point I am willing to do anything to get back to my cherished health so I am mostly obeying... ah but I miss you very much, I long to go search you latest... perhaps you could send them on facebook where I can print & read at leasure?... just if you have time. Thank you so for you lovely visit, it has brought me such a lovely joy. xx Cheers Anni~ "When we feel love and kindness toward others, it not only makes others feel loved and cared for, but it helps us also to develop inner happiness and peace". H.H. the Dalai Lama

Orphani

16 years 6 months ago

This one looks like a

This one looks like a winner- late -tired- but want to do this one justice. See you later I'm down here........o

Orphani

16 years 6 months ago

Back!You are the Queen of

Back! You are the Queen of the original metaphor. That alone is 10 points and a poodle. I think you need to distil your beautiful concept down with brevity. Starting with the title. Would prfer- "Heavens Gift" alone . Let the reader come to some individual conclusions. Gonna kick the fat stuffin out of your beautiful but a tad pudgy little cheeks you girl of the stratisphere. Heres a nimbus at you. Becouse you can dine with grace and e'lan. Meet you a little left of the ozone. I missed you BUCKETS.Barry.And don't think it's becouse your almost as beautiful as your words either.

Cloudthings

16 years 6 months ago

I miss every one here so very much, but must limit Neo time sadl

Dearest Barry I am still chuckling... a poodle huh? Not sure what I'd do with ten points either ... but I have to say such beautiful & most flattering words from you is worth way more than poodles & points, so thank you amazing writer. God, every now & then I crave you guys so much it almost sends me batty, it is lovely to visit briefly agins & see your wonderful words. I know you are right, I have always been a wordy thing... I just love those wee things, all curly & weavy, words on paper have kept me alive more than once in different ways, I know it, & I love them mightily. Oh I am dying to go read your latest too dear Barry, you know, of course, I think your work exceptional, how lucky am I to find 2 of our most talented poets on my page tonight. Thank you dear one, I really do cherish your kindness, & Stevens, I miss every one here so very much, but must limit Neo time sadly. I do hope you are travelling well... & writing profusely (since I am as greedy for words as I am verbose... it is a 2 way thing for me, & yours are so great to feast upon. Cheers & much warmth Heheh... Queen of original mataphor huh... now that IS some compliment... lovely, I'm happy with that. Anni~ "When we feel love and kindness toward others, it not only makes others feel loved and cared for, but it helps us also to develop inner happiness and peace". H.H. the Dalai Lama

Cloudthings

16 years 6 months ago

I have no doubt you'd have no trouble joining me on a cloud walk

Oh dear Barry, with your comments in mind I hit the edit button determined to cull some of those words I love so much... & ended up adding quite a number more!!!! So wayward I am, & such advice from such great writers, I woder though, what you will think now.. I like it a little better with these additions. Ah & I did forget to tell you how much I LOVE a nimbus... & how precious our ozone (we have a significant hole in ours over Australia, just the way it floated & panned out I think), but yes, for sure, I have no doubt you'd have no trouble joining me on a cloud walk! Cheers Anni~ "When we feel love and kindness toward others, it not only makes others feel loved and cared for, but it helps us also to develop inner happiness and peace". H.H. the Dalai Lama

orgami

16 years 6 months ago

My you are an original!

Splendid Friday here am getting out more Comfortable in my bi polar new stable ways meds and twelve step groups focus on doing for myself Get a life!!!! Hurray Was just on Facebook looking at everyone here and there You are one of the first whom ever asked in recent for Poems to be sent and now knowing us better I know you will enjoy them for what they are maybe I will get a router one day despite my broken laptop screen Ive taken over (someone elses) You are so charming in looks and appeal and creative drives not since high school have I hung about women like this Im back doodling on napkins and papers again I love Gustav Klimpts and Goghs and new via internet blogs sober these days so im more productive and more focused cant be a mate or step father or fellow worker I will send YOU material Cloudthings I still thank you for Coldplay Vid link and WILD THINGS clip must get going housework to do thank you