Seren

Nov 11, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A Drop to Never Never

A red bounds to halt
ears radar,
and the Nulla Nulla
rolls to beats of thunder
and smash tribute,
in a lightning
conducted heaven

An invite of ozone
in the showered mist
heralds,
a first riff,
as black opal clouds,
open
to concert

A drop hits,
the emptiness
before the tempest,
consumed silence

— Seren, Nov 11, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Thought I had better explain

Thought I had better explain what a Nulla Nulla is lol NULLA NULLA The Nulla Nulla is one of the most deadly weapons, whether used at close quarters or thrown. The shape may vary between tribes but is usually between half to one metre in length and can be used as a club or throwing stick. The handle tapers to a sharp point near the handgrip, towards the other end the handle widens into a bulb. Like the Boomerang, a Nulla Nulla could light a fire using the same method of spinning it quickly with downward pressure in the surface crack of a dry log and a spark was made. Nulla Nulla was basically a throwing stick.

bjp

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Jayne-Chloe,

I read your poem and explanation of the Nulla Nulla to Olya this morning. We are so enamored with the determination in your pen as you tackle this place in the outback of Never Never. The experts say 19 days of new habit replaces the old. Perhaps this is true with 12 year olds. For likes of us, add a day or two. We are so proud of you, Jayne-Chloe. And you just chop down any poem of mine at your lessure and make it more Nulla Nulla. Five stars for your big heart, gumption, endurance, and being on a new path. With guggles of bugs, Brian

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Brian

I am on the path of uncertainty ... these writes were coming out and from nowhere, and I still cant tell with freestyle ... rhymers are a different matter ... thanks for your support and I am soooo chuffed at your comment ? thats like finding a black diamond rare and precious ... I thought to write some of my memories and this is one .. Never never in the outback is massively inspiring ... My Partners brother owns a Sapphire mine(near a place called Emerald lol) and two Opal mines at lightning ridge soooo the black opal is a nod to him, a little wish for him you could say .. Ian(snakes brother) took my daughter up mining for sapphires one year and well she wont ever be in want for stones for rings etc and its my birth stone lol ... I had a Nulla Nulla,... they are lethal,I threw it one day LOL they go further than what you would expect hahaha and I didnt expect it to smash through the fence ... :| I have been lucky to know some kooris who have talked about their culture and shared with me ... So I am trying to weave a little of traditional Australia through my poetry without disrespecting their ways ... and they are a very proud people ... love and higgliest bugs Jayne x x love and

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest One

Just beautiful. How about, "A Single Drop" for a title suggestion? My favorite lines: A drop hits, the emptiness before the tempest, consumed silence Love it and you! Cat

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Big Sis

Glad you liked this one ... and thanks for the suggestion ... hope you like the one we allll just picked family decision he he love ya sis ;) love and higgliest bugs Jayne x x

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

Nulla Nulla...

Sounds like something that would null and void your life if it hit you! Trying respect someone else's culture while writing about it, is sometimes a tricky business. You never know when they might take offense at something, if their culture is quite different than yours. I remember being facinated with one of those cultures in your country, where the British were quite perplexed at the bushpeople who would come and say "Boss, me go walkabout" which meant they needed a vacation, and when asked when they were coming back, could only say "When I be done Boss". LOL ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Gee

Definately Null and void you ... I have heard tales from some Kooris ... these had to be lethal they brought down foe and food alike ... and made fire ... guess it was a bit like a swiss knife of the bronze age ? lol I respect them and their culture ... just borrowing some of the tools for arts sake ... and honouring them in the process I am careful of watching what I write so as not too ... thanks for having a read of this one Gee I knew it wouldnt be everyones cup of tea but I am glad my friends liked it (huggles) love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Well done

This is really well written Empress, I am glad you explained because other wise you would get writers cramp, lol. I will comment more tomorrow, an electric storm is making things go on and off, like me, Lol. Luv ya.

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Thanks Nana lol

We got that same storm coming at us as well looks like we are in for a wild night from what the weathermans saying ... I hope so nothing like writing in a storm lol and I havent even got to my poem yet lol I have had a house full allllll day except for your daughter I been waiting for her to come in but the heat might have took it out of her ... its bloody muggy here tonight ... I didnt even eat dinner saving it till it cools down its way to hot to eat (huggles) love to you and yours darlin ... Jayne x x x

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Back again, lol

The storm did not last long but our clock went skew whiff, and a couple of things went off and on, tv. I cant afford to lose anymore electrics, lol. Hot here too. Your poem is really good, the storm was a good back drop. I know of some things through family ties and the culture is interesting. Anyway, well done on this. Love Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Liz

The rain took a while to start but its not letting up here its pouring down lol ... loving it cooling everything off , it was so hot today lol anyway off to read some poems see whos been doing what lol love and hugs Jayne x x

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Yep all has ceased here

I am off in a minute, over it, tired and still hot, lo. Enjoy. Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

I dont think its done with

I dont think its done with us yet ... I just left a message on your poem lol love and hugs Jayne you get some rest and smile crocodile (huggle)

Nordic cloud

16 years 6 months ago

one drop

This musical percussion of a poem, the word onomatopoeic springs to mind in staccato rhythms sporadic thoughts and ideas that only speak their meaning later on in the cacophony and then wow ozone sprayed mist and black opal clouds ( like my mother-of-pearl-clouds, the ones I saw here in Oslo) And THAT one drop, oh wow it comes down and we can see it coming and coming and then is hits the silence, wonderfully wonderful. But I must first study what is meant by the Nulla Nulla, as that has no meaning at all for me, or should it not have anyway? Oh this is fun I must go see dear Jayne. Yours for now Ann

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

My first comment

at the top of the comments explains the Nulla Nulla Ann dont know if you seen it or not (hugz) love Jayne x x

Nordic cloud

16 years 6 months ago

Native Australins have some wonderful traditions

Oh I didn't even look at the comments I tend to wish not to be influenced by them, that's why. I now see and LOVE it what a lovely name for them too, those native Australians have some wonderful traditions and art don't they? My Aunt and Uncle from Adelaide had a wonderful collection of rock paintings from them and I copied their slides into B&W and still enjoy them, but now we can see on the net. I have always been fascinated by prehistoric arts and even have made a book of the Norwegian rock carvings, wonderful art. Thank you dear Jayne I was blind! We get carried away with our own 'thing' and don't even study the rest? Love as aye Ann

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Ann

I Rarely look at the other comments unless I am in a conversation with regards to helping with a poem suggested changes, I dont like being influenced either though sometimes I go back to look at the comment and think god you wrote that lol ... well if you like Rock art i might be able to supply you with some cave art ... I know someone has quite an extensive range of pictures ... he was a surveyer and would take pictures on his way round the country ... will ask for a few and scan then I am sure he wouldnt mind ... then you can see some art that not many people have ever seem ... there is one I cant remember the name of the cave but its massive in the north of queensland ... hes got pictures and they are simply amazing he took pics in the day and in the night and you wouldnt believe the difference the look of the darkness gave to the art ... surreal is the only word I can think of to be honest ... and your not blind dear lady lol I dont normally put comments on my poems soo it would be natural to miss it (hugs) and love Jayne x x

Nordic cloud

16 years 6 months ago

OOOO excitement rises

Yes rock paintings are wonderful in Australia and would tempt me to visit the country, maybe I will bring 'someone' there with me one day, who knows! I would LOVE to have some photographs of their work and already look forward to the treat of them, yes please do ask him, and maybe get his e mail address so that I could in exchange send some Norwegian ones to him, we even have some of 9000 years old ones and that's quite old as such go, in the North. I have mostly slides so would have to make them digital, but then the quality is good so it can be done. I will send some of me with a site just over the border into Sweden, Bohuslän, which was Norwegian when they were made!! Sh! Molly might not like that. Thank you for understandingme too dearest Jayne in the bush, Ann.

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Ann

I have been lucky enough to see a few caves with aboriginal art ... In my loungeroon I have a painting of a diamond Python snake the gentleman that painted it is aboriginal and a friend and knew I have diamond python, the snakes curled round the outside of eggs in the middle will take a photo of it for you ... and yes I am sure my friend Chook will help you lol yes thats his name not sure how old he is I think around 70 hes retired but hes a good friend of my dads lol so will ask if I can borrow some to scan, I am sure it wont be a problem ... and I will ask about email ... love to you and yours dear Ann .. and your welcome I love being able to share a part of australia most people dont get to see (hugs) Jayne x x

Nordic cloud

16 years 6 months ago

Like it enough for the five

So there Madame thunderstorm in the red sand cut by the gum tree leaves and coloured by the fires of the bush. Love Ann

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Ann

*Big Smile* ... thanks for the stars darlin ... you liking it was enough ... and your description above was priceless make me smile like a loonn lol love and biggest hugs Jayne x x

Gerry

16 years 6 months ago

This poem hits the mark!

Amazing poetic use of words. I've been absent and am happy to find this stunning work. Gerry Beyond agree and disagree there is a field. I will meet you there. Rumi

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Gerry

Am so glad you enjoyed this one ... sorry to be late in answering ...but better late than never lol thanks so much for the compliment its much appreciated love and hugs Jayne x x

Orphani

16 years 6 months ago

I missed this one.Thanks to

I missed this one.Thanks to evolution I spotted it. Blank verse can be a lonely enterprise. You have to streath your mind around the concept and the imagery. and you have done that briliantly in this work. I can't find one weak point in it. It is a perfectly executed poem in blank verse. I assume a red is a deer or similar animal? Is never never an expression signifieing the out back? Two words express this work BEAUTIFLY BRILLIANT.The idea of spotlighting the native people is a great idea. I hope you persue this theme in some of your future works. Barry........o...

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest B

I knew when I took it on that it was lonely lol not everyone likes it but I like writing it .. I am slowly finding my feet in blank verse but it takes time as we both know ... The red is a kangaroo big red kangaroo and they are huge in the outback you get a few big ones round here but outback I have seen one nearly seven foot tall and they are not friendly lol ... and your compliment is very much appreciated lol beautifully brilliant will do me anytime lol ... love and hugs Jayne x x

Tam the Chanter

16 years 6 months ago

the wizard from Oz

Really enjoyed this , Jayne, very atmospheric, could almost feel the static build-up. I assume reds are joeys? ah, well, back to the post dream-time! Regards Ian

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Ian

You just gave me the biggest smile ... yanno that movie is one of my all time favourites lol yep I am the eternal child but I dont mind ... glad you could feel the build up ... I really tried hard to get that feel in it ... hugs and love Jayne x x x

KINGZOMBIE

16 years 6 months ago

As usual, I loved it

Very powerful words, even more powerful is the picture you paint with them.I also love the title, thanks for the five star on mine.Always looking forward to reading more of yours ...ZOMBIE

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Zombie

Big Smile am sooo glad you liked this one ... and I will be reading and seeing what your up to later lol again lol .... love and hugs Jayne x x