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He Wants My Soul

One night I was feeling sorry for myself,
Drinking the night away
It was the night I drowned my brain in rum
And the Devil came to play.
I was bitching about how much I hate my life,
And I was praying hard for death,
When he creeped up slowly behind,
On my neck I could feel his breath.
"My sweet," he crooned, in a charming voice,
"I hate to see you cry."
"I have a way to dry your tears forever,"
"A pact between you and I."
He told me all i had to do,
Is be faithful to his name,
And in return, he promised me,
Fortune,luck, and fame.
"Yes, my dear"  he whispered
"You life will be as perfect as you want it to be,"
"But when you die, you are coming to Hell."
"Your soul belongs to me."
I looked at him with fear in my eyes,
I said,"Yes life you describe, i so do yearn."
"But you ask a heavy price, I do not want to burn,"
He laughed at me  like i was a silly child,
He said " my love that is not what I mean."
"When you come to Hell, you will rule with me,"
"At my side you will be my queen."
Then he kissed on the mouth ,
With such passion and full of lust
This sealed the deal, as i kissed back,
' In him i would always trust.
Then in my hand he placed a locket
Made from the brimstone down below
He kissed me softly and said farewell,
"For now I have to go."
Then when he left I began to panic,
Oh no what did i do?
I don't want to belong to him
Please God don't let it be true.
Then with relief, the next day i woke
Thank the Lord it was just a dream
Then from the corner of my eye,
I saw a most alarming gleam
On my bed, next to my pillow,
Lay the locket that he gave!
I guess it was real,
I had sealed the deal,
I would be his as soon as I hit the grave!




— greeneyes, Nov 11, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Country/Region: Colorado Springs Colorado

Favorite Poets: I love Dr. Suess! He is my favorite, I would love to write for children.

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Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 7 months ago

WOW!

What a skillful,story-telling write! Clever girl! Scary subject too! Loved your "I don't want to burn" That goes for all of us! WEll done Bonita j
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Elizabeth

I have said it before and I say it again ... if you turned your skill at stories to a short story or novel ? girl you got what it takes to sell books ... this ones one of your best ... love and hugs Jayne x x
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 7 months ago

thankyou

Thank you both, jayne you know what your praise means to me. Elizabeth
MD

Mrs Dalloway

16 years 7 months ago

I am in agreement with the

I am in agreement with the other writers. I would love to see this poem as a short story.
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

A Story, yes...

I'm in agreement, too. Where do you come up with such brilliant ideas? Always, Cat
WF

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 7 months ago

OMG................!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

My Dear Green Eyes, My jaw hit the floor when I read this... This is a brilliant tale that should be told to anyone to ward them away from doing business with devil! Superbly constructed, brilliantly rhymed and the flow is so smooth and like honey... the subject is to die, literally! I reckon you could fight the dang devil off with your pen, he be spellbound by the magical wordplay and be so engrossed in what you write you easily make a dash for the door and climb the stairwell to heaven and have a full bowl of cornflakes, 2 cups of tea and a round of toast in St Peter's gateway cafe before he'd even noticed you've gone. Absolutely brilliant my dear! Goes to show that green eyes are the ream emerald gems of the prose write! Dale :)
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 6 months ago

my friends

thank each and every one of you. I love you all so much.haring your comments good and critical, means the world to me. Love, elizabeth
L

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Exciting

thrilling, scary, sad, a real gem. You are a gem. So Great. Love Lyz. XX Well done.
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 6 months ago

thankyou

As always Lyz, your comments bring me happiness. Love, Elizabeth