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TEMPTRESS

You`re my idol
temptress
pawn
all the hours that
shadows fail you
lie in wait tempting
fate.

still i wait i hesitate
and when we meet
you tease me
with your lying eyes
can almost taste
your sweet surprise

You flaunt your wares
but the entanglement
between us i can`t
conceive as you dance
around me , a provocative
weave .

hearts are pounding
with thoughts to leave

So warm and tender
this, our sweet surrender.

— ziggy, Nov 09, 2009

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Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

Back to your best!

This is more like it, raw emotion from the heart. A temptress indeed! Does she really exist? I loved this stanza: you tease me with your lying eyes can almost taste your sweet surprise exquisite rhyming and this one compared to your other poems seems a little out of your comfort zone...and that is what makes this one so risky and yet so right. I think I may have met this girl before too! Superb conclusion too. Sweet surrender indeed. A fantastic write. Is this a new one, or one of those you keep in that cobwebbed closet? HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

ooooooooo

lol , no hood this is a single man day dreaming , a new one lol ,,,,,,,,,,cheers man i had another editer here but i dont know if they want their name mentioned yet ,,,,,,,,ziggy
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

you mean you've sacked me!

So I have been sacked as chief editor...you'll be hearing from my solicitor! lol! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

lol

ha ha your not sacked man your just the wrong sex this time i needed a womens point of view and you look to hairy for the job lol ,,,,,ziggy
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

too hairy!

I haven't been called too hairy for a long time and by the looks of things neither have you! LOL! LMFAO! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Wow! I'm sorry, but I cannot pick favorite lines because they are all so ripe and plump, like plumbs. You have really done it this time. Bravo! Always, Cat
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

lol cheers hun this is v

lol cheers hun this is v different for me i might be turning into a dirty old man lol i love your comment cheers,,,,,,,,ziggy
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Esmerelda

16 years 7 months ago

Really enjoyed reading your

Really enjoyed reading your poem...the tempted male...vixen female. I can almost sense her dance, her tease. It is so much more than physical it seems, a mental stronghold also...'a provocative weave' is my favourite. Thanks for sharing.
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

hi

hello there your a new name for me hi`d good discribsion of yours on this one , your pic you seem to be doing a dance or a weave lol, cheers for the comment i did enjoy this write ,,,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy
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Esmerelda

16 years 7 months ago

Was getting far too excited

Was getting far too excited in the back of a burnt out old van on my way to Glastonbury!
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

hi again

hi there o glastonbury mmmmm never been yet i intend to read your poetry soon chat ya then ,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Throb throb throb.Ziggy!

Throb throb throb. Ziggy! Write more poetry like that and you'll have women throwing themselves at your feet... women fall head o'er heels for poets y' know. Is there something I don't know about the Queen's English? First word is you are.. contraction...you're, no? ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

hi

thats not something i knew about poets ,,lol if you have an alternative first couple of words for it i am all ears, its how it sounds i usually go by as much as anything , i have another thats not to far of this theme i texted it to the female in question an it well did nothing so i am not convinced women go mad for poets not many irish one at least lol ,,,,,,,,,,,,,cheers ,,,zigs
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Ha! As if… HA! Irish

Ha! As if... HA! Irish poets? Zigs, I meant the spelling: *Your*--should be *You're* meaning <>. She probably figures you text that to all the girls. lol. That would be so.... poet-like....;-) ~a "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

Editor

Zigs, see you shouldn't have sacked me as editor, I would have noticed that right away! LOL! HS (aka Zig's ex-editor) ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

hi d

i see what you mean , lol cheers i will amend all what women , if i told any women here that i write poetry they would look at me like i was not well in the head ,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

Do they?

"women fall head o’er heels for poets y’ know" do they...great! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

….add to that mystique a

....add to that mystique a man dressed in black (yum!) , singing with a Brit accent. (num nums!) You just may be as big or bigger than the Beatles, you've heard of them, yes? ~~
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

The Beatles

The Beatles...yes I think I have heard of them, but the real question is...have they heard of the mighty Systema Synthetica? I just hope I don't get shot in the back by some groupie obsessed with men dressed in black, who can rhyme a few words and sing in a Brit accent! LOL! HS ps. I am known at work as Johnny Cash, simply because I only ever wear a black suit and black shirt and tie. I even have a name plate on my office door which simply reads 'Johnny'...I have never taken it down! pss. you inbox is full! ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Finally at the end

Oh lonesome me, lol. Zigs this is really good and you have been doing really well with your writes of late, as I have already told you. This is sensuous and dreamy and us females want some more from you, Irish, so do not let us down. Whether there is spelling mistakes or not, some one will see them and assist but the content and the soft edges of this romantic write has come from the heart. Well done Zigman. Love Lyz. XX
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

lol lyz

cheers lyz and as i said your my bigest fan maybe the only lol i must fix that wee typo i drives some potty but i dont really mind i know i should just to layed back lol chat soon am delighted you like but i knew you did already ,,,zigs
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

o big hug

cos that just got me spot lol its been a while many thanks i fixed the typo cheers zigs
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 7 months ago

whew Ziggy!

after wading through all those comments - I get the feeling I should've just got down to it and told you I LIKED YOUR POEM!!! Nice write! Bonita j
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

hi`d

well hello there, to put it mildly this is a new topic for me lol many thanks for reading this and your kind comment coming from such a fine pen as yourself ..................zigs
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aeron

16 years 6 months ago

mmm, love the enmeshed complexity

As Arthur Dent said "And, um, interesting rhythmic devices which seemed to counterpoint the surrealism of the underlying metaphor of the humanity... of the poet's soul, which contrives through the medium of the verse structure to sublimate, er... ... whatever it was ... ... the poem was about. That was actually a compliment, Aeron
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ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

hi there

hi there aeron ,i dont think our paths crossed before , what an interesting and deep comment thanks for taking the time and the perty stars this was a new topic for me to write on cant belive its back in spot chat to you soon ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy
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odd molly

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Z.The senusal feel in

Dear Z. The sensual feel in your poem is very alluring and is so very well written. I love this kind of writing because of its openness and honesty.. *the eyes to view and wander too a place so fair in front of you*.. Yes.. how wonderful they are those dreams we all carry. love. o molly
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ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

hi there molly

hello there nice to here from you , indeed well said " how wonderfull they are those dreams we all carry " many thanks for taking the time and you vote and kind words cheers ,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Ziggy

First off I thought I left a comment on this one ... I have no clue where it went lol wonderful poem ... congratulations on spotlight well done love and hugs Jayne x x x
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ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

hi jayne

hi this one creept back in what a wonderfull surprise thanks for stopping by and the stars and your kind words as always ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs i have to take another read of your last one what a write ,,,,,,,
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orgami

16 years 6 months ago

Fave Nu Worlds

Lah lah land just woke up on saturday decent rest for once house clean fresh coffee paper paid for and read news on the telly with Lori (we discussed water on the moon) and now here for a read on Neolandupus Zigs an amazing write!!! In my youth (eighties Oh what great music a time of change etc etc) people still dressed differently there is a trend towards track suits and t shirts all which are fine and dandy but I personally prefer the shirts the slacks the dress pants and shoes that give staccato down Mall Halls on short women I have a new interest and she was wearing the most scrumptious black jacket to match her black raven hair (rose mcgowan looks) black pants and white shirt no one seems to have a love of irons anymore my point here the love of the tease the play the attenuation to detail aromatic scents (most good perfumes start at over eighty dollars) this is a good poem I dream all the time here like this My obsessiveness is so dramatic but you know Your poems are well written and I see how important it is that i must seriously start to edit my works and put in the punctuation I keep avoiding they are just as important as words to some anyway I am impressed with your work here man and have had my long say today Cheers!!
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ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

hi there

well well your reply must of been one of the longest i ever got lol and very welcome i am so glad you like this i can`t belive it crept back to the spot yet again i am amazed , ah water on the moon yes a good topic i luv all those space stories in particaluar the fact that we have a black hole at the center of our universe but thats a topic for another day ,, yes my music interest would of started in the eighties also but these days i am a neil young fan seen hom twice live what a man still going at his age his music spanning five decades thus far i can`t see a POP band doing that lol,,,,,,,,,,,, i am so so glad you think my poetry is well written but i think i have neo to thank for that of late i get so much inspiration here its awesome i would love to get published some day but i need a kick in the butt lol , yes i am not great at punctuation either but to much of it can stutter the reader maybe , i have alot to learn yet but i am enjoying the process ,chat soon my good man,,,,,,,,,,,,zigs
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Ziggy

Congratulations on the spotlight... you deserve it! Always, Cat
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ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

hi cat

lol, hi there i can hardly belive this one is still here it goes to show its hard to know what will get folks interest many thanks for your vote and kind words as always ,,,,,zigs
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 6 months ago

Temptress

Ziggy I love this one. But most would relate this to woman but i can relate this to a man who too teases Tempter or temptress it works both ways always blue
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ziggy

16 years 6 months ago

hi there blue

yes AGAIN thank you , i had a bit of fun with this a very different theme for my pen was this but i enjoyed it cheers ,,,,,,ziggy