TEMPTRESS

This is more like it, raw emotion from the heart. A temptress indeed! Does she really exist? I loved this stanza: you tease me with your lying eyes can almost taste your sweet surprise exquisite rhyming and this one compared to your other poems seems a little out of your comfort zone...and that is what makes this one so risky and yet so right. I think I may have met this girl before too! Superb conclusion too. Sweet surrender indeed. A fantastic write. Is this a new one, or one of those you keep in that cobwebbed closet? HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

So I have been sacked as chief editor...you'll be hearing from my solicitor! lol! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Wow! I'm sorry, but I cannot pick favorite lines because they are all so ripe and plump, like plumbs. You have really done it this time. Bravo! Always, Cat

Really enjoyed reading your poem...the tempted male...vixen female. I can almost sense her dance, her tease. It is so much more than physical it seems, a mental stronghold also...'a provocative weave' is my favourite. Thanks for sharing.

Throb throb throb. Ziggy! Write more poetry like that and you'll have women throwing themselves at your feet... women fall head o'er heels for poets y' know. Is there something I don't know about the Queen's English? First word is you are.. contraction...you're, no? ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha

"women fall head o’er heels for poets y’ know" do they...great! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

The Beatles...yes I think I have heard of them, but the real question is...have they heard of the mighty Systema Synthetica? I just hope I don't get shot in the back by some groupie obsessed with men dressed in black, who can rhyme a few words and sing in a Brit accent! LOL! HS ps. I am known at work as Johnny Cash, simply because I only ever wear a black suit and black shirt and tie. I even have a name plate on my office door which simply reads 'Johnny'...I have never taken it down! pss. you inbox is full! ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Oh lonesome me, lol. Zigs this is really good and you have been doing really well with your writes of late, as I have already told you. This is sensuous and dreamy and us females want some more from you, Irish, so do not let us down. Whether there is spelling mistakes or not, some one will see them and assist but the content and the soft edges of this romantic write has come from the heart. Well done Zigman. Love Lyz. XX

Stars, I forgot the stars!!

after wading through all those comments - I get the feeling I should've just got down to it and told you I LIKED YOUR POEM!!! Nice write! Bonita j

As Arthur Dent said "And, um, interesting rhythmic devices which seemed to counterpoint the surrealism of the underlying metaphor of the humanity... of the poet's soul, which contrives through the medium of the verse structure to sublimate, er... ... whatever it was ... ... the poem was about. That was actually a compliment, Aeron

Dear Z. The sensual feel in your poem is very alluring and is so very well written. I love this kind of writing because of its openness and honesty.. *the eyes to view and wander too a place so fair in front of you*.. Yes.. how wonderful they are those dreams we all carry. love. o molly

First off I thought I left a comment on this one ... I have no clue where it went lol wonderful poem ... congratulations on spotlight well done love and hugs Jayne x x x

Lah lah land just woke up on saturday decent rest for once house clean fresh coffee paper paid for and read news on the telly with Lori (we discussed water on the moon) and now here for a read on Neolandupus Zigs an amazing write!!! In my youth (eighties Oh what great music a time of change etc etc) people still dressed differently there is a trend towards track suits and t shirts all which are fine and dandy but I personally prefer the shirts the slacks the dress pants and shoes that give staccato down Mall Halls on short women I have a new interest and she was wearing the most scrumptious black jacket to match her black raven hair (rose mcgowan looks) black pants and white shirt no one seems to have a love of irons anymore my point here the love of the tease the play the attenuation to detail aromatic scents (most good perfumes start at over eighty dollars) this is a good poem I dream all the time here like this My obsessiveness is so dramatic but you know Your poems are well written and I see how important it is that i must seriously start to edit my works and put in the punctuation I keep avoiding they are just as important as words to some anyway I am impressed with your work here man and have had my long say today Cheers!!

Congratulations on the spotlight... you deserve it! Always, Cat

Ziggy I love this one. But most would relate this to woman but i can relate this to a man who too teases Tempter or temptress it works both ways always blue