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Know

Beating euphoria
in its dense mass,
energising to
overcome

cocooning
in the rubble
of remininse,
swallowing gumdrops
that grow bones,
while brokering deals
with a devil

and in a grotto
spinning the prism,
watching
as a kaleidoscope
of life,
glimmers by,
silent pictures
illuminated and
reflected from time,
strafe the walls

While drawing a line
between all pleasures
and agonies,
now run
out of thought,
as dogs of a devil,
snap at coat tails

Centering all belief
on one partical of god,
and released willingly,
this supplication
consuming
every molecule,
of fear

Flowing to believe
on a steepe,
mere heartbeats
into all infinities,
within the now
a knowing

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Anna's version


Euphoria beats
its dense mass,
energized to
overcome

 

In the cocoon
of the rubble,
reminiscence
swallows gumdrops–
bones grow anew,
broker deals
with the devil

 

In a grotto
spinning life’s prism,
is a glimmer of hope
watching a kaleidoscope
of silent pictures
illuminated and reflected
from time to time,

 

Strafes the walls
and draws a line
between all pleasures
and agonies,
now run
out of thought,
like dogs of a devil
snap at coat tails

 

If all belief
centers on
only one particle of god
released willingly,
then this supplication
shall consume
every molecule
of fear

 

Belief is a river
flowing
on a steppe,
mere heartbeats
into all infinities,
within the now,

 

a knowing

— Seren, Nov 07, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 7 months ago

With the now -

A knowing! What a splendid portrayal of faith! such a magnificent write! I don't know how you do it - but they just keep gettin' better~! Well done! Boni
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Boni

The only thing I am not sure about this write is the name, so if you have any suggestions they would be appreciated .. Brian inspired me to write this one with his greats of poetry series .. and you have made me one very happy vegemite tonight lol I am never sure of the freestyle ones I do ... love and hugs Jayne x x
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Jayne

Yes, your faith is very strong. You have become a warrior maiden, with out intent to do so and while you weren't looking. Fight on little sister, fight on! (I hope those gumdrops grow the bones for you. It is my prayer.) Love, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Cat

I do believe ... very much so and if I am wrong whos going to be round to poke fun at me ? they say faith can move mountains ... love you Big Sis Jayneeeeee (hugs)
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Fate is faith with the

Fate is faith with the centering of the *I*. euphoria beats its dense mass, energized to overcome In the caccoon of the rubble, reminiscence swallows gumdrops-- bones grow anew, broker deals with the devil In a grotto spinning life's prism, is a glimmer of hope watching a kaleidoscope of silent pictures illuminated and reflected from time to time, strafes the walls and draws a line between all pleasures and agonies, now run out of thought, like dogs of a devil snap at coat tails If all belief centers on only one particle of god released willingly, then this supplication shall consume every molecule of fear belief is a river flowing on a steppe, mere heartbeats into all infinities, within the now, a knowing... Much Love, Ma
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Ma

Thank you ... I am still learning at freestyle ...(hugs) and biggest smiles ... of love Jayne x x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

"Watching a kaleidoscope of silent pictures"

"In a grotto spinning life’s prism, is a glimmer of hope watching a kaleidoscope of silent pictures illuminated and reflected from time to time," This bit is so beautiful Jayne, like those lights cast from the prism, on the ceilings in our homes, I too have a prism and the rainbows of colours that it produces fascinates. And when the lines become straight they are white, what strong images of sensations these are Jayne; like the reflections of stained glass windows on the stone floors of great Cathedrals, patterning our vision in colour and our hearts in faith, if you like! The silent pictures is also a potently sensitive moment in this poem, and 'from time to time' giving so potently the sense of time. A very particular kind of poem this, and one which deserves second reading to absorb its depth. Love as ever from Ann of Norway. "In the caccoon" cocoon?
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Ann

Yes it was meant to be cocoon ... and I have fixed it ... I thought to put my verison on and then Anna's like cat did recently ... they differ in meaning a little sooo I thought to show the constrast would be helpful .. love and biggest hugs Jayne x x Keep your eye on your emails have some more pictures from the bush lol will send them tonight ... have to resize them before I can send or you will need a telescope to see them they are that big lol
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

Faith is in the knowing...

Having the confidence to say I know what works for me, is all that is required. You guys should do this more often. A deeply moving piece of work, layers upon layers, reading them through makes it what it is. I think I could read it a dozen times and still find something fresh everytime. ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Gee

Faith,Is what each of us makes it into ... it can be a crutch or it can be a tool to use to inspire ... there are so many things that faith can be positive with ... even if I am not right and my belief is pointless ... like I said up there ... lol whos going to be around to laugh at me ?? I added my version on the top now sooo that you can see the contrast between mine and Anna's ... she really amazes me ... always ... love and biggest hug bugs Jayne x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

Truly amazing...

I am so happy that you have done this! I like it very much! I will treasure this one and look to it often. Higgest bugs and lotta love, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Gee

Thought you might like seeing the before and after .. they are both ok but I love Annas ending its so beautiful ... glad you enjoyed it huni love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Jayne

A really good combination. Both writes are done well. A strong piece and there is a barrel full of faith and confidence, which there should be. Love from Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Nana

These are the beginning of a change for me .. I might not post everyday ... just depends if I think the edits are done .. thanks for the read and the comment darlin ... will be round reading tonight when I get five my house has been full all day ... love and hugs Jayne x x x x