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A Black Rose For You

 There is a lady who roams through the night
Picking her victims as the moon shines bright
Her beauty is perfect,she is charming and coy
Looking  for some poor chap, she can use as a toy
With her hair raven black, and lips red and full
They can not resist  her unrelenting pull
She has eyes the color of emeralds, with olive dark skin
A body that screams "I am made just to sin!"
She lurks in the twilight, with her nocturnal creatures at her feet
You will be doomed if she walks down your street
She will smile at you and make you her tool
Now you are  trapped you ridiculous fool
You had the chance to run,but now it is past
Better enjoy your orgasm,cuz it will be your last
She will kiss your lips and make your manhood real hard
She will make you think you are sexy, you fat piece of lard
When she is done, you will be blood spattered from your head to your toes
Next to your head she will place a single black rose
She will laugh herself silly as she slips from your bed
Hope that sex was worth because now you are dead!

— greeneyes, Nov 05, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Country/Region: Colorado Springs Colorado

Favorite Poets: I love Dr. Suess! He is my favorite, I would love to write for children.

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Critiques

Geezer

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

I love the anger...

I feel coming from the site. Maybe it is a good thing to have egotistical assholes telling everyone how great they are, while they push your face in the mud! Hmmmmmm...They maybe can make the people that they work for lots of money, and that may be what counts for them, but... Ahhhh well, I digress! You have gotten my attention, with this, The same old song, told with feeling, is new enough for me! ~ Gee. Oh shit! Now I have done it! Well, maybe i will escape the notice of the great and powerful one. I may not be worthy...
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 7 months ago

wow

Thank you so much for reading my poem, and taking the time to comment! It means alot to me. Love, Greeneyes
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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

I love the title

I love the poem and its a gem. I enjoyed this very much. The black rose, sounds beautiful. Love Lyz. XX
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 7 months ago

Lyz

As always, Im grateful for your comments.Thank you so much. Love, Elizabeth
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 7 months ago

Its just a poem dude about a

Its just a poem dude about a crazy lady who kills her mates, not everything has to have a hidding meaning.i suppose you are one of those people that everything has to have a deep meaning to it. well i was just having fun.
Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

16 years 7 months ago

I beg forgiveness

I sensed the fun in your poem, and i answered in jest. I was wrong, sorry...ps. Jacqueline My wife,has said that i can be an arse sometimes with my wit. This was such a time..
Ravenshakti

Ravenshakti

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Green Eyes...

This poem is splendid! I appreciate the dark humor, and your imagery is sublime... I don't think she's a crazy woman, though.... 'Just versed in different talents; that cook-up a strange brew... Beautiful. Bright weavings, Green Eyes. Raven
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

We are a strange concoction,

We are a strange concoction, a universal blend of majick, mystery and mayhem. Truly woven in a tapestry of *you* and *me*. Keep weaving green eyes! ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
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Dalton

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Greeneyes

I liked the poem I'm only sorry to point out the slight fault in the line: "you will be doomed if she walked down your street" there are some powerful moments in this poem, however it is hampered in places simply for the need to rhyme, this is a shame because this is harmful to your art, and you are an artist. I suggest you experiement a wee bit more with unrhymed verse. I hope you don't think these comments have been too harsh, I wouldn't bother if I didn't think you could learn from them.And after all it's just my oppinion. Take it or leave it,I hope these words inspire you and not dishearten you. Incidently I love dark haired women, and olive skinned, the woman from your poem sounds beautiful. It just needs a few tweeks here and there, that's all. people will probably say I'm talking out my arse. Good luck in all your writing endeavours, Respects Dalton.
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 7 months ago

thank you

Thanks to everyone for their comments. Even you Dalton! LOL, just kidding, i am grateful for your comments.Raven its good to hear from you. Elizabeth