doorman

Nov 03, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Thank you

A ringlet in a glass, paused

Names draw over me,

their faces imagined and real,

and the water clean, unclean

The light glints in

their eyes and mine

And all's good

whether neat and done, or

undone

Olives from an olive

tree in a jar, black, ripe

One's in ink right now

Time has moved by, and

whether my jar full, or empty,

matters not

Fingertips, your eye's wink

will never leave

these evenings

Glide

— doorman, Nov 03, 2009

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Country/Region: NOR

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Electric Blue

16 years 7 months ago

uploads

hello i am trying upload a new picture can you help doesn't work

doorman

16 years 7 months ago

Could you give me a little time, and it'll be my pleasure to help you out. I'm just terribly busy/stressed right now. Tomorrow is a big one, but when that's done with, we'll fix your problem. Alternatively, you could ask someone who changes his/her picture frequently. Cloudthings and Seren have good experience with that stuff. I'll catch up with you later. All the best, Espen.

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Espon

Long time no see. Glad you are back and this poem is written so beautifully. I assume, Mr cryptic man, it is about love, hope so, it reads like one. Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX

doorman

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Lyz

Been very busy, and still am. Thanks for showing up, Lyz. Good to see you. And yes, this is a love poem. I'll devote more time to you and the others when I'm on the other side. Talk soon, Yours, Espen.

ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

thank you

no no thank you espen how is the craic as we irish say lol, your like willow the wisp here one mo gone the next , lol yes a love poem indeed i imagined it as a painting on the first read , hey what other side my good man good write gets five big ones fr0m me

Bonitaj

16 years 6 months ago

Espen!

What a mixed bag of metaphors! "water in a glass" (clean/dirty);then "glint in eyes" then olives to ink! Wow! I see where you got these - over a romantic dinner perhaps? How you manage to hang them all together and "create" such a ingenious write I'll never know! But that is the magic in your art! Splendid! Bonita j

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Espen

aahhhhh this time I dont ask .. I read what I wanted and what I read was a wonderful slices of moments .. maybe?whatever it is its damn good brava Love and hugs Jayne x x x

Nordic cloud

16 years 5 months ago

Fascinating comes to mind as

Fascinating comes to mind as we see reflections and thoughts mixed in this strangely evocative poem. Mr. Doorman Ann of Norway