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One at Last




One at Last
 The lioness is prepared,responding to asentient urge,beyond good an evil;I’m the agile, spotteddeer drinkingwater, listening to you,at one withmy own heart,graciously breaking loosefrom the pack, keenlyfollowedby the sharpnessof your senses;they give me no respite.

In my unconsciouspatterns of fear,I jump at once feeling yourcontractedhopes and joys asever before.I run for dear life,quick and supple withinthe most transparent, pure andsimple universal affinity,for I was lost, andI’ve been found at last.


 My dreams have becomeone and focused;I just think of you, now thatthe pack has dispersedforeverin all directions,like a flock of birdstaking flight.Your hearing is set onmy breath,which excites you.Fleeing is no use, for weare one, however,resonatingin the same sweatof the night, now thatthe stars are falling,and the moon hides fast,impersonal, as the breeze.But my struggleshave been in vain, andyou soon catch up to me;we are not anymorewithin the circlewe used to call freedom.
 


 During the endof this ocean of desperation,the whole universeis sharply integrated, withouta remaining façade:finally at peace withall life, with all death.Bleeding through every poreso you’ll be happy,still and inertto myself and the world,I now rest contentwithin your trembling arms.



 

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Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

Oh sweet Jesus! You have

Oh sweet Jesus! You have married soul to spirit, the hunt and the kill, the hunger and the endless desire for more hunger. Bow. ~Anna Imo, I would separate your poem into parts. 2. beginning with "during the end of this separation. The energy... of part one and the resolution of part 2... "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 6 months ago

My Dear Kailashana:

I was so enthalled and pleased with your comment that I totally forgot to answer to it. Better late than never, eh? I thank you from the bottom of my heart for you generous comment. Sincerely, Hugo
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Hugo

I see the inner change making us so vulnerable, as in these lines: I’m the agile, spotted deer drinking water, listening to you, at one with my own heart, graciously breaking loose from the pack, keenly followed by the sharpness of your senses; and I so long for the whole world to be at peace with the understanding of the whole life cycle. I adore these lines: During the end of this ocean of desperation, the whole universe is sharply integrated, without a remaining façade: finally at peace with all life, with all death. You write beautifully, perhaps it is because you have a beautiful soul. Always, Cat
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you, Cat:

Your comment is deeply appreciated. Yes, we'll have the same spirit within us, so we are all beautiful. Thank you for your kind words; they are really encouraging. Happy Halloween!!! Sincerely, Hugo
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lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Typo 4th stanza 4th row,

Typo 4th stanza 4th row, before I forget, lol.: You soon catch up with me, or caught, fiddle with it. Lol. I am glad to see you back and with such a strong poem to boot. All perspectives covered,The hunted and the hunter. Well done Hugo and I agree with Ann, maybe in two parts as not to sway the reader but I did enjoy this intense read, Love to you and yours Dear Man, Lyz. Xx
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Lyz:

Thank for catching that typo. You and Ann are right, the poem had too many parts. I just left three, just to balance the eye. Thank you for giving that gracious comment on my poem, I enjoyed reading it. Sincerely, Hugo
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 6 months ago

Hugo worth waiting for

This is a great write Hugo, it caught me up and I held my breath, my exhale bore testimony to a great poem. Being picky the lines I run for (dear)life, quick and supple within It comes across as being a play on words from the deer that distracted me from the body of the poem. Try something else and see what you think yourself. Best Wishes Seabhac
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you Seabhac:

I always look forward to your comments. They are always to the point, and still kind and generous. It feels good to know that there is always room for improvement. Your critique is taken into consideration. I will think of something. Thank you, my dear friend. Sincerely, Hugo
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lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Where is ya

Had to reread and if I have to comment again, well, I always thoroughly enjoy your poetry. Love all, Lyz.XX
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 5 months ago

Dearest Lyz:

I'm here, same place, thank you for commenting again. I was without internet security protection in my computer, so I had to let it rest for a while. I was using the computer for short lapses, and then it froze. Anyway, I hope everything is alright! I be back Monday with one of my little and modest poems. Thank you for your visit! Sincerely, Hugo
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lyz

16 years 5 months ago

Hey Hugo

Missed ya, even though I have had a few probs with this as well, glad to hear you will be back Mon. but whats this modest little writes?, lol, you dear gentle man, you write as big as you like, I will always read, lol. You behave and I will catch up soon, I am taking forever but I will do it. Love and welcome back. Lyz. XX
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 5 months ago

Hugo...

I loved your poem, the only thing that caused me to stumble was... beyond good an evil did you mean "and", because if not, then you are saying the hunter is evil... the lion, I doubt if she thinks of herself as evil, just filling the need to survive, no more evil than us picking potatoes, apples, or the ever present deer hunter... that one line cold stopped the read so I could try to figure out what you were saying, then I let it go and finished... really quite excellently done on the ending! giving in to the circle, embracing life with death. enjoyed the read Richard
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 5 months ago

Moonman

I said "beyond good" an evil because there no such thing in this exchange of energies between the deer and the lion; they live in oneness, without any separation, they belong to the circle of life. Thank you Moonman for reading the poem. My computer had no antivirus protection, and as soon as I finished using it for half an hour or so, it froze. But I'm getting a new internet security protection. I'll be back with my poems next week. Best Regards, Hugo
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 5 months ago

Hugo...

well then, shouldn't it be "beyond good and evil" that would make it more clear, and it is the way I thought you meant it anyway... I could see you were talking about the naturalness of prey and hunter... sorry to hear about your computer, durn things are always messing up... Richard
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dearest Hugo

How the hell did I miss this? ... I bow to your pen tonight Hugo brilliant write my friend love and hugs Jayne x x
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 5 months ago

Dearest Jayne:

Thank you for commenting. And thank you for your flattering words; coming from you, the versification Princess, is quite an honor. It's good to hear from you Jayne. How is your health? Feeling a little better? And most importatly: How is your attitude? Sincerely, Hugo
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 5 months ago

Dearest Jayne:

Thank you for commenting. And thank you for your flattering words; coming from you, the versification Princess, is quite an honor. It's good to hear from you Jayne. How is your health? Feeling a little better? And most importantly: How is your attitude? Sincerely, Hugo
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 5 months ago

Dearest Jayne:

Thank you for commenting. And thank you for your flattering words; coming from you, the versification Princess, is quite an honor. It's good to hear from you Jayne. How is your health? Feeling a little better? And most importantly: How is your attitude? Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Hugo

I was thinking about you today and wondering why I hadnt seen anything of yours in stream sooo I came looking ... and found this ... it really is a superb write I must have been sick when you posted this lol its the only reason I can think of to have missed it ... but I am glad I found it ... I am doing ok I am in between treatment at the moment but I feel not too shabby lol and my attitude is still the same spitting fire lol(hugs) good to here from you hun love Jayne x x x
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 5 months ago

Hi Jayne:

Yes I posted this poem a few weeks ago, in the time that you weren't feeling well. I'm glad that you are still spitting fire (lol). Thank you for commenting, I truly appreciate it (hugs). Sincerely, Hugo