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Bonitaj
Bonitaj
Oct 31, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

SIZE MATTERS

Don't overlook the miniscule the finer points, the details...the petulance of plenty once exudedgives  no  recourse to subtlety,'Smallness' - becomes tainted, 'Little' - gets excluded.  Loss of the light touchfeeds the heavy-handed,engorged mouths -leave the hungry feelingabandoned. Yet too little can be as destructive astoo much...deprivation inspires depravity,just as excess - engenders disgust!  BjR  October 31, '09 
— Bonitaj, Oct 31, 2009

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Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

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bjp

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Bonita,

My goodness! Do you have a dramatic infection? Are you having licentious afternoons with some toy lover? This is an exceptionally good poem!!! the petulance of plenty once exuded gives no recourse to subtlety, engorged mouths - leave the hungry feeling abandoned. deprivation inspires depravity, just as excess - engenders disgust! This is a "got them by the throat" poem. And the title does exactly what a title needs to do - demand, no, DEMAND! readers. I cannot fully express just how far you reached this time. Brian
Bonitaj

Bonitaj

16 years 7 months ago

Ah Brian!

Your comment has come just in time to see me off to more pleasant dreams!! Here I was stressing that after much ado with the jinxed layout - none was to call by or comment! THank you so much for your constructive, heartening critique! I penned this earlier today, after reading something petty about "don't overlook the small things"... and VOILA! - Sorry to dampen your imaginative ardour - but no! - no toy boy or such! In fact - a whole bunch of them here getting ready for Halloween today! Teenagers that is! ;) Thanks again! Boni
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Happy Halloween Boni to you

Happy Halloween Boni to you and your *boys*. So many outstanding thoughts, lines here... makes for a balanced meal of subtlety that hits you like a ton of bricks. Love & Light, ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
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R.M.Shanmugam

16 years 7 months ago

too little can be as

too little can be as destructive as too much… deprivation inspires depravity, just as excess - engenders disgust! a great thought in a great style