First Strike

One more excellent poem from my friend Edge; he seems to have his way around justice and back, for he writes so very well, and everything he does he does with flawless impunity. Excellent write, Cat. This court is adjourned! Edge has been found innocent! Happy Halloween, Cat, for you and yours! Sincerely, Hugo

O my. The unanswered question: is vengeance mine? Brava poem! And yet you do so in a poem but in real life? A friend always speaks of the Edge. He should meet you. ;-) ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha

Why shouldn't you be the one to defend them! We certainly are on the Halloween Trail Cat! nice write! Boni

enda, patrick collins. HI Cat i have been looking farward to your halloween post all day what can i say" MOGGYS RULE" lol "i awaited his return to the consious world" that for me is a great line , luv the whole thing tell edge i am impressed , enjoy the rest of your spooky weekend ,,,,,,,,,zigs

I have been waiting all of October for your Halloween poem...and oh my what a sinister and evil one it is too. I loved the story, and was wondering if you would actually set him alight...and you did too!! Perfect, Halloween and the Witches' cat, what more can I ask for? Have a spooky night! HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Dearest Big Sis, Edge will go far my friend as will you ... dont ever stop writing it defines all the best parts of you ... through your writing my darlin you will always find the light in the darkest night (huggles) all my love Jayne x x x x

This is somewhat different from your usual vein and you certainly captured the outrage and violence with your words and their tone, although it is to be frank a little too close to prosaic narrative for my own personal taste. I will of course be even kinder to stray cats from now on however lol. Oh and by the way i think it should be "arsonist" towards the end. Love Keith

Now that got me, lol. No mention of Edge at the top. Wow, what can I say. Halloween Horror Headline, lol. Well done, amazing. Loved it, wow. To you, yours and of course, Edge. Love Lyz. Xx

I have three cats of my own and every time I see a story on the news about the sick tortures by man to animal, I feel like vising the same pain onto them. I totally relate, great read. Forever a friend to the animal race... ZOMBIE

This poem is something of a bridge mix. There are a number of really provocative lines and some that are less agile. For example, the line "his furtiveness dragged me after" does a number of things at once. It contains creative language which both tells a story and suggests a possilbe adverse outcome for the narrator, for s/he may literally be dragged after this thug at a later stage, we do not know. Other lines contain a juxtaposition which keep interest up. For example, the last three lines: I am, somehow, unsatisfied, For I am a cold-hearted killer not this thing of unbridled passion. This has attributes of a prose poem. But we know a little of the motive of only one party: I identify with cats going about their own prowling business. Other lines are cliches packing little punch: Watching from the shadows horror gripped my heart. There is an adage in poetry which goes: "Show; don’t tell." This admonition is a reminder to increase drama. The idea of “showing” seeks to make poems vivid. A somewhat equivalent adage is “seduction not instruction.” Showing and seduction involve the use of such things as colour, shade, odour, taste, temperature, humidity, nuance of passion, perspective, tone, music, and pause, to leave semantic trails of crisp bacon for our reader’s appetites. Here we are told about the gasoline, not its taste or its cooling effect on the skin as it evaporates or its smell (As in Apocalypse Now: "I love the smell of napalm in the morning") or its tendency to induce dopiness upon inhalation. There is much which could be done with gasoline for this poem before and after the burn. The same can be said for flesh. The absence of rhyme indicates seriousness and that is to the good. All in all, you are moving along well toward your goals. Brian

Congrates on Spotlight darlin ... nice to see you here ((((huggles)))) love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x

Wow! This is brilliant! What a vivid imagination you have, almost believed it, it isn't real, is it? J x

This was great! I loved every word of it! You are the best! Love, Elizabeth

You really are a superheroine aren't you? You're catwoman! Stalking the night saving any and all of your feline kin... a were-cat you are! Pyromania at its best if you ask me Cat! Brilliant story that sneaks up on the reader and deliveres a perfect twist to a great tale... or is that tail? You must be swishing it with proud glee after coming up with a write like this! Bravo! Dale :)

an interwsting event interestingly told.shan