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A Vision in the Rain

As the branches fall away
and the night has cast her spell,
as my form is disappearing
and I sink into inkwells

A campfire is burning down
cooling embers warm my mind,
and within this wordless vessel
empty hollows can’t hold rhyme

I wondered what to do
till the fire was my friend,
And then it finally hit me
that I’ll never write again

And all the wordless poems
drifting without names,
now none will ever be written
my passion lost its flame

Those silly little rages
that roared around my head,
snuffed out all my dreams
my visions now lay dead

But when I brushed the stars
as I sometimes did,
I gasped in awe and wonder
as my head was hung and hid

This magic that was shared
and seared within my veins,
will live among my memories
as burning scores to stain

I will miss your gentle missives
sent throughout the night,
I will miss the love and friendship,
that glowed within the lights

And it’s always at the last
my heart does pause in pain,
but with all my being I love you
may we meet inside the rain

Always look for a Tail
that curls around the moon,
know that its my message
and I’m spinning round the room

Adieu and goodbye
are words I cannot say,
maybe I shall save them
until my dying day

Until a magic rainbow
calls me from stalled time,
my word waits in the grotto
I’ve built within my mind…

And now I have to go
with gentleness,no pain,
knowing that I’ll see you
as Rainbows Bloom Again.  
 

— Seren, Oct 31, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Jayne:

Oh, my goodness, I hope you are not saying goobye to Neo. I hope you'll keep writing. As for poems, this one is amazingly delightful. I really love it! Thank you my very dear friend. Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

My Dear Friend Hugo

Through sheets of tears I have to say Yes Hugo ... You have rapped your gentle words around the core of my mind within the beat of your heart lives a Sage of our times for you Gentle Hugo with my Love Jayne x x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

If ever a poem of yours has

If ever a poem of yours has taken me through this empty space from I to you... In the Light, with tears blinding my eyes, Ma "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Ma

As your fingers have reached out and wrapped around my heart, your cocooning it from sorrow in this greatness we will last .. All my Love Jaughter mwa mwa x x x
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Jayne

I'm with Hugo. I hope that you are not saying goodbye to us, here at neopoet. That future is just too bleak to even consider. I loved your wistful poem, and could even relate to it. After my attack a few Fridays ago, I felt like (and greatly feared) I might not ever be able to write again. It is a very cold and empty feeling. I am here if you should need to talk. Love you, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Big Sis

I am afraid I am saying that hun ... its been the hardest decision I have ever had to make ... but yeah I cant say much at the moment darlin ... I will message you tomorrow ... I am in sheets of tears tonight,it had to come but I just had to bite the bullet .. just events of today pushed things ahead quicker than I expected .. Love you I call to the four elements to protect you and keep you, may the light of serendipity always shine on your face Your a wonderful writer my love dont ever stop love and hugs lil sis (huggles)
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Awwww dont cry huni … I

Awwww dont cry huni ... I dont want tears my lovely one, I want smiles thats why this wont be my last poem there will be one more in the next week or so, but that ones special I have worked on it for a month and I want to my last message here to be of hope not tears (huggles) Love and hugs lil sis (huggles)
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 7 months ago

Across the world to you

What a mighty flood of tears will wash their way to you. I so hope having touched your life and having you touch mine so profoundly that when you feel ready you will return. I understand the Avitar now Please accept the gift of Love and welbeing Seabhac
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

My Dear Friend Liz

Let our oceans become one ... You have all touched my life in some way, be it my mind or my heart and in most cases both ... You keep writing my dear girl (huggles) I am going to miss you all :( Love and hugs Jayne Let your words flow within the calm of gentle breeze, and as within our hearts they shall meet across the seas with all my love Jayne x x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

You are an orchestra in my

You are an orchestra in my heart, an aria lifting me to heaven, our love is boundless to the open sea, we merge endless waves ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ starlight never fades... "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

And don’t think you’re

And don't think you're going to be allowed to get past without some scrutiny, Missy! 'tis cast, not caste her spell will live among my memories inside the rain (sounds better than within?) it's my messages (contraction) it's with gentleness see you (when rather than as)? Rainbows bloom again. There, now you still need to learn a thing or two, so hurry up and get well, I've got a shitload of people praying with you. Love and Light, Mama "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Ma

Thanks for the help with the edit I couldnt see those little things through the haze last night and its back Of the tears that line my face everyone is dripped for you, right down to each atom our love will live on through Jaughter x x x with all my love (huggles)
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

Help!

You have touched my life, and I will forever feel the emptiness that you will leave when you are gone. I only hope that I will have the strength and grace that you have shown. I will grieve! But I will also be most grateful for the presence of you that I know will be with me forever. I have lost much in the past few weeks. I do not know how I will bear this loss. I will... But know this! My heart is full to bursting! There is no greater feeling of accomplishment, than to have made a friend such as you! Forever and Always, Sir Gee.
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Gee

My lil New York Digger ... you are our honoury Aussie in the big Apple we love you like family ... and I hope you got my message there are no ties being cut my friend just have to contact me through my email which I can get on my phone ... you take care huni been a sad day ... feels like dark veils have fallen over me :( going to miss you my friend (huggles)
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Ann

You have my email I can still receive those and I will keep in contact through there ...you take care darlin you and my darling friend Joe have become like another family to me and I will miss your poetry and I miss miss both of you shining out the screen at me (hugs) and all my love Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Hey Aunty Jayne

You put the ink in all the tears shed and i think this write was a brave sad one to have to do. I will be there with and for you. As I said, rid me now, not. I will talk to you later and love to you and yours. love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Nana

I dont have any tears left ... huni I just dont know what to say tonight ... I am near to speachless people have been trying to get me to talk all day lol (huggles) love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Empress O f the Pen

Titled at last, lol. I will miss your poetry and all those funny comments but I can still talk to you one way or another, today on here. You gotta get the land line on, lol. I will say that you have had so much thrown at you in such a short time and I feel all, I know all too, so you be a strong Empress and my ugly mutt will see you soon and until then I will haunt you, okay. All my love to you, Snake, the kids and dad. Do not forget, there is going to be a few parties and I want you there. Love, hugs, kisses and best wishes to all. A dear friend, fellow writer, my grandchilds and girls Aunty Jayne, Seren. Wow, a lot of ties here. Lol. Take care and I will talk later hun. Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Empress of the Pen

I will be down there in the next 13 days will get Jade to let you know what date I will arrive there ... its been a shitty day I just got reduced to tears again ... and heres me thinking I had none left ... fucking gonna miss you all (huggles) mwah Love and biggest hugs Jayne x x
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

I will bring the tissues

You will need a diaper after I get through with ya, you will pysl. No more tears lovely, give us a smile, tickle tickle, thats it, just a little wider, come on now, you can do better. I will have to tell Jade to give you a big bear hug if she sees you before tomorrow, she is back home then. Love yas lots, and yes, I will see you soon but in the meantime I will chatter on. Lyz, nana, friend, fan and anymore I cant think of yet, Dear Empress of the Pen. XXXXXXX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

LOL … unfortunately I am

LOL ... unfortunately I am shattered huni ... cannot explain here ... but its all goooooooood ... I will pull my empress Pants up and get on with life ... love you darlin just chatting to you girl actually love you Jayne x x x ....Missy sad ass of the pen today ..... lol (huggles)
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Well I hate to say

but I have so much of a good feeling when I am talking to you even though I know the sadness is taking over., but good is coming your way. Wish I could do something to pick you up, even for a little while. I just was talking to Jade while the kids called in at yours, Nicky is bringing her home tomorrow. Well my dear Empress, have a better night and love to ya missy sad ass of the pen, lol. Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Nana

I am smiling tonight so its all good a little change of mood ... had some retail therapy LOL gotta love spending money and I rarely do it ...I brought movies and thongs hahaha and dinner couldnt be assed cooking ... mwah mwah smile ... I am trying to lmao ;) love and biggest hugs Jayne x x xx
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Yay

Retail therapy, the only pick me up for any Empress, lol. I hope you explain that the thongs are made of rubber and go on your feet. lol. Not the silky sort, lol. Cheeky,lol. Luv ya much, Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

LMFAOOOOOOOOO…. so if I

LMFAOOOOOOOOO.... so if I said they were the silky kind ??? lmao nnnnnaaaa they was the rubber kind but I hzve to point something out .... you know they make 'thongs' in rubber .... hahahahahahahaha and I dont mean the ones for your feet ... he he he evil evil bitch I am ... love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x Btw the thongs are hot hahahahaha got peace symbols all over them and they say Ma on the soul ... made me think of Anna ... Ma on my soul and in it ;) Love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x x
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Well Well

My Dear Aunt Empress, What did I do to deserve this laugh this morn. Funny. And I hope Anna appreciates being on your sole, lol, and how in the hell would anyone be able to stand wearing a rubber thong, stinky, sweaty, shall I go on, not, lol. At least you gave me a smile today, is it not I that has to give the Empress a smile? You dirty girl, peace signs on thongs and all,lol. Peace and Ma be with you dear Aunt Empress of the pen. Love from me. XX
H

hardcorechick28

16 years 7 months ago

i stink

at saying goodbye, so I wont. You were one of the first people I met when I joined the site and have enjoyed your poetry since. I still think you have one of the most beautiful names I have ever heard and when i hear either, i will think of you. Take care, Jayne. I am going to miss you.
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

I dont do goodbye darlin …

I dont do goodbye darlin ... but i know there is that ulimate goodbye and then I shall say hooroo ... HOO ROO is an aussism ... means goodbye ... thanks for your kind message it is a sad time for me this place has become such a second home,and its a wrench to leave ... love to you and yours hun Jayne x x x
greeneyes

greeneyes

16 years 7 months ago

I cant believe it.........

Beautiful poem, but my heart is sad I do not want you to go, I will miss you terribly. Love, greeneyes aka elizabeth
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Fingers crossed the news is

Fingers crossed the news is good hun sooo ... I wait and hope ... thanks for your kind words (hugs) much love Jayne x x
TU

Tony Udo

16 years 7 months ago

Rain

Overwhelming melancholy,and clever allegory.
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Tony

Thanks so much for the read and the comment its appreciated kind regards love Jayne