hard won embraces

and I love the way you come
over all the distances,
catching me by surprise
with the little girl
in your voice,
how I catch myself
reaching out,
with feelings long abandoned.

I want you through mornings
extended evenings,
at the edges
and the depths,
the velvet warmth
the coldest places,
these tender moments
and hardest won embraces.

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Comments

professor

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Craig

dont know why your poem managed to miss out any comments so far. It flows very well and has an easy style. I imagine it was deliberate making it sound as if these two verses were in the middle of something more extensive...although it does make the reader what had gone on before. The one slight issue for me is that your repeat in/into far too many times in the second verse and it has something of the effect of a dripping tap such that it breaks your concentration on the rest of what you are saying. I would suggest trying to lose a fe of them if you can. With best wishes Keith

Craig Norris

16 years 6 months ago

cheers Keith

thanks for the comments, I've been in pruning and removed the offenders, runs leaner and cleaner I think. regards Craig