Who wins in the Dark?

You asked for it.. *LOL* Seriously, I like this, but you know how I am about tuning one up. *G* Here we go working on the rhythm. Spooky nights and even weirder days, all the screwed and f**ked up ways, I scan the left and see the black spider,(delete black-throws off the rhythm) it’s sticky webs with fly’s beside her. I spin to the right, while I jump in fright, only a zombie stumbling through the night. ------------------------------------------------ Oh dear Lord in the heavens far above. (delete far-rhythm again) this would be a good time to see your love. for I am lost in the dark forest all alone,(Delete dark) left here to stumble quite far from my home.(delete quite or my) A bright light against the frightening night, would surely reassure me of all your might. ----------------------------------------------------------------------- I waited for a long time to be able to see,(delete for) I should of have known it would be left to me, (delete of) God helps those who help themselves, we don’t have time for shirker’s with bells. So pick up your boots and tye your laces,(delete So--tye=tie) it high time to be put through your paces.(it=it's...delete high) ---------------------------------------------------------------------- It’s only dark and a touch scary out here,(delete only) nothing much is left for us to truly fear.(delete is and truly) Find the markers that you came here for,(delete here) then bust your ass to make it out the door.(replace make with get, delete it) It may truthfully be easier said then done,(delete truthfully) but when it’s all over we will know who won.(delete all, change we will to we'll) ---------------------------------------------------------------------- As always, just suggestions to take or leave as you want. I like it. Respectfully, Rett: "You can fool some of the people all of the time, all of the people some of the time, but you can't fool all the people all the time" Abraham Lincoln..Now, if our government would really learn that.

Good that someone listens to him. The rest of us don't! ROFL. I get such a bite outta Halloween poems. Must be the vampire in me. ~A "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha

I love halloween cause thats my dads birtday ... and well I love this one ... I think I have come after the edit yes ? bloody scared the shit outta me lol love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

"all the screwed and f**ked up ways,..for one moment I thought you were referring to Guy Fawkes!" Lovely this bit like a nonsense rhythm:-"I scan the left and see the looming spider,  it’s sticky webs with fly’s beside her." " all your might".......oh what might? ...its time to put you through your paces ...maybe better rhythm? I am slightly puzzled by the meaning although have received BIG hints and this is ALMOST a nonsense rhyme and could well be made into one, or another one made out of it that would be highly entertaining,. Well that's what I think. Great potentiality this DD with love Ann