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Calling the Black

As the curtain
falls to pool,
a silent reverie
falls to ground

Amputated in
thralls hold,
the bereft
wandered
in Netherlands,
subsisting
on remembered be-fores,
spotlights and sweat-ed
applause

'Break a leg'
is what they say
but diminished spirits
from crushing critics
ever smashing
to review,
all hope,
dashed
and newspapers
flutter on fences,
cruel proclamations
and opinions
now today's
garbage,
remembering
ones discontent

Ringing from cords
while lungs grasp for air,
and in the rapture
of feeling
is the glamour,
of one string
feathering to vibrate,
all dimensions
of time

In claps of applause
are leads of rapture,
now connected,
the universes
symphony
starts transmitting

Black curtains
in time,
opened to infinity
and applause
reverberated,
in One
kettle
drum

— Seren, Oct 27, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Critiques

Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Ma

Thanks for the comment hugs... how are from your concert ? come back to earth yet ... I am still insanely jealous LOL love you biggest hugs Jaughter
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Jayne:

I know this is a sad poem; expectations fill the soul, but they don't nourish. I've just learned to be what I'm best at being, who is me, my-self, with all the pettiness and the grandeur it involves in a single bundle. By the same token, for me, you are a great, a magnificent poet, who is at her best, no matter what! Another great work! Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Hugo

thank you for your kind accolades I am still trying to find my way in freeform its coming along but I am getting there slowly slowly love and hugs Jayne x x
Pamela A. Lamppa

Pamela A. Lamppa

16 years 7 months ago

Very good

Black is such a final color and the perfect color to use for this write. It is sad, deflating, and sorrow for dreams that have not come to fruition. Your imagery is stellar in this work. Your title captured me - your poem kept me. I enjoyed this very much. Thank you. ~Pamela
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Pamela

First off I saw that you where new to Neopoet ... Welcome !! I hope you enjoy your time here ... thank you for your kind comment ... you read was spot on .. kind regards Jayne
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Jayne

Oh such sadness here. The sense of something missing from the moment. The applause is fleeting and can hold you only for such a very short time and with its going there is a feeling of cold which sets into your very soul. My favorite lines are: Amputated in thralls hold, the bereft wandered in Netherlands, subsisting on remembered be-fores, spotlights and sweat-ed applause Love and hugs, Cat
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Big Sis

This ones sort of about my missing my music and combining a few other thoughts together ... and this was what came out ... I need to do a small edit but will wait till tomorrow ... I missed a line when I posted it lol oppps love you hun I am off to bed Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Aunt Jayne

This does feel sad but also I feel that there is a wanting or rather a seeking undertone. It is a brilliant write as always but I am not to sure about this one so I will wait and see, revisit when you have added and edited. MMmmmm, nosy again, Lol. Love lyz, XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Nana ,Your daughter

Dearest Nana , Your daughter is standing next to me as I type lol I am just about to edit shortly and get that dang line in LOL its the last line I missed it when i posted and was too tired by the time I picked it up lol love and hugs Jayne x x waves to mum LOL love from Jadey
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Aunty

Tell Jade, wheres my phone call and she has heaps of mail. I think you may have already edited so I will reread in a sec. There is a few that has not been on for a while, hope all is okay with them. any way how is you?. All that end are fine I hope?. I will get to reading now, love from me. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

read messgae under this one

read messgae under this one huni LOL bbl ... :| how do you get rid of housefulls of people LMAO ... btw I just gave ya girl her message ... she looks heaps better than last time love and hugs Jayne x x
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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

There you are

I give you the nom and extra stars but there is no change that I can see. Or I have missed something. I'll be back, she writes in a deep voice, lol. This machine is about to fly, lol. Love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Lyz Sorry it took so

Dearest Lyz Sorry it took so long to get back to you, I just found out our dear friend Gee is in hospital with a pneunomia ... I was so shocked I hope hes ok ... I havent had a chance to edit I have had a housefull of visitors all day ... will do it laters huni love and biggest hugs Jayne x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Oh, biggest hugs of healing

Oh, biggest hugs of healing love for Gee, I do so adore the man. Please give him our best. Hugs of love to you Jaughter, to All, Ma "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Ma

I am doing a get well message for him I dont have his email but I am going to post it on his profile ... I was only at his profile the other day wondering where he was and left him a message and sent a PM ... least now I know where he is and hes going to be ok they are hoping that he will come hom from hospital tomorrow soooo I am going to leave something for him to find when he logs in here .. LOL which I am sure will be one of the first things he does when he gets home our darlin Knight would be having withdrawals from Neopoet ... love and higgest bugs Jaughter (huggles) check you emaill in about 6 hours I am going to send some pictures love love