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Hyperbolic Hell

When every anal flagellant
has crept forth from his cell
to elegize the Devil's eyes
and wish emissions well

When all the dancing deviants
who idolize the fire
kiss and tell of innocence
corrupted by desire

Erotic fools will justify
the parting of their knees
by rotting demons as they clutch
the touch of lust's disease

Adoringly they'll speak in tongues
that tittilate their King
and sanctify his rigidness
with every song they sing

While unpenned verses testify
that wholesomeness is dead
the paragon of Purgatory
lifts his horned head

and all the vibrant virgins
who now pretend disgust
will soon devour greedily
the potion of his lust

C.  Lon  R.  Bruso
— Lonnie, Oct 27, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: New England, originally, now, Macon, N.C., USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, Bob Dylan

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Critiques

hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 7 months ago

Hello, Lonnie:

Your strong point of view is quite focused on the theme, and you have developed it in an excellent manner. Great and rich use of the language! The title, superb! Great work! Sincerely, Hugo
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Hello

I loved the title and the pacing is great. The beginning and end are wonderful, written by a master wordsmith. And what fills the in between is brilliant! Great subject matter. Always, Cat
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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

Many Thanks, Cat!

I kinda got back to my Darker side with this piece! It seems I always wind up returning there!
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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Lonnie

A very brilliant write indeed and I thoroughly enjoyed this gem. Much talent you have and I am glad to be able to share this wonderful raed. Love to all, Lyz. XX
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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

Thanks Lyz!

Glad you liked my journey back to my darker side! I'll probably do more of these!
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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

Many thanks dear Lady!

These kinds of poems always seem to come easier for me than any others! Guess it's just my Evil twin peeking through! LOL!!!
Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

Devilishly good!

I thought I would search for you within Neo and what a dark little corner you have. This piece is right out of your left top pocket. A rhyming masterpiece with a dark topic to boot. This oozes energy, pace and an evil lust. Good job my friend. HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

Thank you!

I appreciate your thoughts on this, and am happy that you found it an enjoyable read!
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 7 months ago

Lonnie...

the title is so good and promising... and of course, the smooth of your pen and content... well, damn! I wonder if you stumble any on "horned head", I did on the initial read, but then not... so I went back, it seems to need another syllable there... I was thinking "bicorned head", maybe not... just a thought anyway, really enjoyed the read man! Richard
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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

Thanks so much, Richard!

As always, I greatly appreciate your feedback and kind words! So glad that you read this and enjoyed it!
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poewriter58

16 years 7 months ago

Bear

What can I say that hasn't already been said. This is one I did not see before posting. Very powerful words you ha written here. Me
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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

Thank you, Love!

As I've said before, it's always your opinion that I value and trust the most! Your approval means so much!
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onemorning85

16 years 6 months ago

A good and bad comment

You make writing poetry look easy with this poem! My only critique is for the last two stanzas. They lose pacing. For the second to last line of the second to last stanza, I suggest this, "will lift his horned head". And as far as the last stanza, the last line just isn't as powerful as I would like it to be.
Seren

Seren

16 years 5 months ago

Dear Lonnie

As your own dear lady said what can I say for this one? brilliantly written I am fast chasing yours and chrys's writes down you entertain and enthrall me everytime ... btw congrates on evolution :) love and hugs Jayne
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orgami

16 years 3 months ago

the classic verse

Great handling of the theme here Lonnie just getting around to commenting these days Thank You