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Picking up the Pieces

                     Clouds gathering dark and Smokey Grey
                     the lightning speeding to the ground,
                     heavy raindrops hitting like stones
                     the sound of thunder rolls around

                     The storm has settled in up above
                     the radio man says to stay inside,
                     the storm's the worst his ever seen
                     eleven people have already died
                    
                     Flash floods have ravished the streets
                     and destroyed what stood in it's path,
                     the destruction that it has left behind
                     looked like the holocaust aftermath

                     Cars were carried from parking lots
                     people swept away amidst the rage,
                     houses lay where they once stood
                     like a book that has lost every page

— CyberSpace, Oct 27, 2009

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Picking Up The Pieces

Greatly descriptive of a killer storm. The imagery brings this piece to life. In this line there is a typo: the storm’s the worst his(he's) ever seen Always, Cat
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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Brilliant

Very vivid poem and account of what a flash flood does. It is devastation at its worst. Brilliant write. Thanks. Lyz. Xx
Mark

Mark

16 years 4 months ago

Hi, Mark here.. your

Your writing gave me a bit of a racing pulse. Kind of like freaking mad writing polished. Cat is true with that typo I believe worst {he's} ever seen Later and thanks for the reading, Mark "some things change, some things do not"
xena465

xena465

16 years 3 months ago

Well described...

We can't run away from nature and the devastation it leaves behind. I read your comment to seren, and decided to read one of your poems. You don't seem to have posted for a while. I posted a poem recently called `Colossal Wave`, which is similar to this one, so I feel what you write. I like it very much. Rosina xena465
Seren

Seren

16 years 3 months ago

I should be whipped drawn

I should be whipped drawn and quartered I am sorry my love forgot to comment ... better late than never love you big time wifey x x x x x
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

15 years 11 months ago

Picking Up the Pieces

Snake I know more than most about picking up the pieces even now Jay-cee will fill you in. A storm chaser I would love to be. I love to be out in the elements when calm but love the wild. Running the rapids being out in the thunderstorm full of electricity Of course the beauty of the storm has its down side. Love the imagery Electric Blue