Labial Blueprints

Oh oh oh mustard tears are you the mustard fairy, but its Halloween not Midsummer dreaming. My Proprietress I must confess your use of words is out of my league, you have probably been a good, and are a good scholar at learning the English language. Labial means nothing to me, I must go and look it up and as its the title of your work it must be something important. My imagination, my usual dictionary, has failed me totally here, it cannot stand on its head to let enough blood into itself and give me a plausible answer. I fall through spaces and solids my parachute getting tangled up. It suddenly reminds me of a Jean Luc Godard film, where the woman has a scaffolding-like cage fixed to her head, and this has to be puzzled out and opened up before the seduction, the woman quietly standing there while the man gets frustrated, well that's how I remember it!! Its that absurd quality that is manifested here... mustard tears, stratospheres, catastrophes, eclipses, lilac hazes, utilitarian colouration, and disenchanted zygotes and WHAT? I will perhaps add to this absurdity of a comment when I have consulted the dictionary. Until then I have decided to stay bewildered. Love in mustard admiration from your Ann of Norway

I will be honest on the title,I would change it ... I instantly thought female organs LOL ... but Liquid blueprints thats a keeper ... and I have some suggestions for this one I am going to copy it and do it in the morning its 4am I am half asleep lol brilliant write though and I think I know what you saying will have a good look this one has me intrigued love Jayne x x

Easily a wonderful poem. There is very little confusion here Margaret Ann. Not keen to contrast with Jayne-Chloe either, but the title does the job with zest. I can add more adjectives if you prefer, Proprietress of Crimson Hearts, but the telling is in the poem itself. Very impressive. Did you write it in English or translate? Machts Nicht. Wunderschön. Just curious. Brian

Kata it is such a pleasure to find you here again on a lightening visit to Neo. This is so wonderful.. you have the most sensuous relationship with words. I know it isn't meant to be a sensual poem, I just mean in general you really do, it almost bleeds through every line, that sensuality you wield. I enjoyed this a great deal, beautiful to see you writing again. I wont be around for a while, I need to devote more time to my music (& my child my love & my health), but I hope there is more from you next visit. Cheers & great admiration, I love this work of yours! Anni~ "When we feel love and kindness toward others, it not only makes others feel loved and cared for, but it helps us also to develop inner happiness and peace". H.H. the Dalai Lama

Labial is a wonderfully evocative word (not necessarily of female organs), I think. This one is awesome, my fav line was "they anagram my symphony". A nice surprise to find a new poem by you upon coming back. Love, ~Nina

Not the Title, not a line, nary a word! You have written a marvelous symphony of thoughts here, and my poetic soul cherishes each and every one! This is truly a winner! Bravo, my dear!

at first I was like OMG then I read your poem and its so appropriate to the title "Blueprint" not "Handbook" in this graphic day and age as the world slips more to the armageddon Im pleasantly amused that we are still startled at correct terminologies The poets of the past in their exhuberance and youth, (along with the coming of the end of civilization. 1950's Rock and Roll and that Pelvis shaking young man named Elvis) Today the end is in the form of the internet.. they would be quite proud of this poem I was tickled by the title and wanted immediately to read and be amazed and that I was And went and threw out my mental poem about mush and replaced it with a similar word pattern you have used and somewhat theme too however yours is first and more original!! but You on this day have Inspired me with this wonderful creation Just had to read it again Magnificent my freind!!! thank you

I admit that at the start I didn't fathom the sublety of this poem, I am slow when it comes to this kind of language, it isn't easy at a first glance, and I think Jayne felt the same as me? Now its sunk in I see it in other ways its very special, I so enjoy the sound and associations. You are so accomplished my proprietress love from Ann of Norway

Like Ann above, your word usage blows me away but it isn't out of my league. I savoured every word, like soaking up rain drops on my tongue, dear Kata, your poems are always so magnificently woven into intricacy and beauty. As for the "controversial word"....we're poets for goodness sake, what's a little shocking word here and there? It obviously attracted readers. I say keep the title and the entire poem as is. It is a stunning piece that stands on it's own. Delightful to see you back Kata, your poetry is missed when you're gone. Peace n love Katie

Thirteen hours later, I found time to have a look at your poem and I have to say I must have been a touch addled last night what I would have changed last night ... I would hesitate to this afternoon ... this really is a wonderful poem and I cannot put my editors pen to this one ... I feel it may sully whats already a brilliant work and it is ... these are my favourite words ... you could have writen them for me, I identify so strongly with them ... I roam them they anagram my symphony while you speak defiantly of dysfunctional fusions and our modern day catastrophe- Love Jayne x x And Brian LOL @ your comment .. you would win kind sir LOL everytime

enda, patrick collins. this would blow me away if i could understand every word you truly are a wordsmith in every sence , this is out of my league my dear , lol i need to bring out a big dictionary before i could comment and do this wonderous poem any justice but wow will have to do for now ,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,,ziggy

I adore the sensual intelligence of this, the title in all its connotations, don't be shy! Be labially proud! Go grrl! I can not imagine any improvements, Aeron

hi again this is still great good good ,,,zigs

very forceful and powerful a poem you made here. chumfin