Ernest D Douglas ( A seed of Truth )

In heart of lossYou sought to fillEmptiness of soulThat sense of demiseI see as I look at lifeThrough your empty grey eyesDeath shadowed youIn your furtive searchSentient life in a mergenceOf plant and manBrilliance and InsanityCrossed in deliberanceYou were lost, forgottenDead to memoryA chance find gave your words lifeTreasures of the pastUnknowingly gifted to the futureOur presentExperiments in tactile textiles
Your written words
Resurrected

— seabhac, Oct 25, 2009

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Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Seabac

I love the whole poem ... but I have one suggestion the last line ...I think maybe dont ask me why but this came to mind Your writen word breathed again or something like that just to give it a little more of the profound because this poem certainly has depths that I loved Liz you hit a home run in my opinion ... i got lost in it had to read it three times I only do that when I really like something ... Brilliant write I am sure others will have thoughts but thats all I can think of to improve it ... plus its nearly 4am lol love and hugs Jayne x x x

seabhac

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Jayne...please get sleep

Thank you for the suggestion and I am sure it is possibly only the first of many changes...your comment made me think along the lines of breathe and resurrect seemed exactly what we were trying to do here. 4am and you can still function so well...wow. Thnaks Jayne that was really helpful Hugs Seabhac

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Liz

An excellent write and read. I will leave the assistance to the experts. Lyz. Xx

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

I came back for a reread and

I came back for a reread and that is just perfect, Resurrected ... Yup I cannot see anything I would change Liz, thats not to say someone else may not suggest something lol love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

hugo la rosa

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Seabhac:

I think your poem is beautiful, it mention someone who has been resurrected, whose words have come back to life, something new from the old. Nevertheless, to become an inspiration for an exhibition of textiles, you need to mention certain key words, like knit, design, colors, texture, weave, drawing, finery, etc, etc. So far you have a nice poem going in the right direction. Good work! Sincerely, Hugo

seabhac

16 years 7 months ago

Hello Hugo

Thank you Hugo for coming to visit this poem. The poem Ernest is just one of many for the exhibition and yes you are right if it was a stand alone piece it would not be rich enough to portray the image of textiles. It is an overview of the botanist who inspired the textile work. If you get an opportunity have a read of a new one I have put up for the same show and this goes a bit further in the textile descriptive side...different style for me and I am not too sure if it works so would appreciate your feedback...each of the poems are intended to be placed beside the textile piece and are an extension of the thought in it. Very Best Wishes Seabhac