Waiting For Snow

Great imagery! I see the same thing this time of year. Try keeping it going, it's got fantastic momentum.

I love a poem that conveys so much with so few words. As hard as I try, I can never get my message across without 4 verses and two choruses!!...even then I need a bridge. How do you do it my friend? Great piece, short and full of imagery. HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

This is a brief little cameo one from you and enjoyable as always. I think if it was me i would have been tempted to use "bruised" as opposed to "brushed" in the first line since winter skies appear heavy at times abd brushed implies a light touch. In the last line i was expecting the bones to be dancing on a hangman's gibbet rather than in an grave but i guess i'm just a little more macabre lol. Love Keith

MY darling this ... in so few lines have painted a picture in words ... and I have to say I agree with the brushed to bruise that Keith has offered ... but still its wonderful ... btw while I write this .. I am in the middle of one of the biggest storms we have had here for an eon and I cant even hear my fingers typing on the laptop ... yep its that loud lmao love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

I have always suffered mild depression when winter threatens, your words have captured the essence of that hollow feeling. ken

Wow Cat, this is wonderful! You did show us a great image in few words... I think it is different than your other writes. Loved these lines the most; "where the barren trees genuflect to the raw winds as the rattling leaves dance like dried bones in a plundered grave" Sincerely, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~

I always enjoy your winter writes, it is pleasing to see this one pop up. Very dreamy. Thanks, Love Lyz. XX

Holy smoly Cat! Now you really have gone and done it! What a fantastic descriptive piece that lays out the scene, scenery, attitude, aptitude and atmosphere all in one roll... a swiss roll at that, how yummy this poetry is when devoured, first the soft grey sponge of clouds, then the red jammie leaves finished with white rattling wind cream bones... all I need now is some custard and I am in heaven! You have superbly delivered this gloomy, storm beckoning write and have vividly painted the chilled grey scenario... all I am doing now is sitting waiting sheepishly for those precious flakes of snow to come dancing down, slanting and sleeting across the skyline the bury me deep under a white sheet of an unflavoured slush puppy machine... courtesy of those clouds and your maginificent pen! Bravo Cat! Dale :)

enda, patrick collins. hi cat my fav line is the third i really like that one of the hardest things to do in a write i find is to put alot of meaning into fewer words i have tryed this before with "lead head, i think you pulled that off quite well indeed and a piece like this needs the right title which i feel is also well chosen nice write cat yours ziggyyyyyyy

I just reread and I still think this is wonderful. I love your wintery writes. It will not let me nom again so I have to give this one extra stars. Your winter writes are so vivid. Loved This. Thanks. Love to you and yours. Lyz. XX

one of my tutors describes poetry as "exquisite compression of meaning". Which places this as perfect poetry. Adore the line where the barren trees genuflect Actually I adore all the lines, Aeron

Just wanted to congratulate you on a well deserved spotlight (hugs) love you gooodnightttt lol I am exhausted Jayne x x x

enda, patrick collins. congrats on spot again

Congrats on Spotlight! As one of the previous posters mentioned, this well captured the ho-hum glumness of winter. Is it just me, or does everyone seem a little more cranky during the winter? I know I get agitated a little faster now. The lazy and burnt out in me appreciated the conciseness of the write. You packed a lot into that wee bitty write! (chin scratchies for Beau!) ~Jess K. ----------------------- "There was no promise made, the part you played, the chance you took. There's no way out of here, when you come in you're in for good." - David Gilmour

Cat, I loved this one! It brought me right into pre-winter. Beautiful piece~ ____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

I can't believe I've missed this little beauty - glad it made spotlight and thereby hit me in the face :) I can't even pick a fav line, I'd have to copy all of it. It's short, to the point and full of imaginative imagery. Congrats! Yours, ~Nina

Cat I am so disappointed by this poem. After I read what I supposed was the intro, I eagerly looked for the next five or so stanzas -- no luck! The five lines are such a master class of descriptive writing, my only crit. would be on a personal level -- MORE PLEASE. My most sincere congrats. on a faberge egg of a poem Kindest Regards Ian T

An absolute beauty! I like the way you describe a wintry scene, especially when touching Halloween. You love Halloween, no question about it. Now I know why your pseudonym is Candlewitch. I like this poem very much! Sincerely, Hugo

An enduring spotlight is even better well done huni this ones really wonderful .. love and hugs Jayne x x

waiting with hesitant breath excellent form and write!