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Back door note.

Take a plume

and paint your poemAutumn colours' heresweep the paths

and show the roots of treesthen let breezes

send the leaves

on wafted waving windsto land on lakes and stonesand decorate the foam of waterfalls

and grey back doors and dream.
Looking out at the view
there they were loaded,
all the birches,
those fairy-like trees
standing upright
in their myriads of golden yellows,
greens,
and so I took up my pen
and wrote this note, 
the leaves inspired me,
swept and wafted onto lakes and stones
and foam
and waterfalls
to end up
on your back door
for you to receive
and dream.
Yes you.....all. 
yes you.







— Nordic cloud, Oct 24, 2009

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Ann

Thank you for your beautiful Diaphonous note .... Ann I simply got lost in these words reminded me of notes my mother used to leave behind for me in the morning ... she would go to work at the hospital before the sun came up and dad usually got me ready for school and ... these are my favourite words wafted waving winds to land on lakes and stones and decorate the foam of waterfalls and grey back doors and dream. awwww you always float me away with your words and never more so today love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

Yes it was just a note, how

Yes it was just a note, how lovely that your mother did that, she too was a poetic mind, my grandmother left the uneaten cakes at the door to be used up!! They disappeared 'miraculously' when Jean, Maisie, Marjorie and Scott came home from school!!! Thank you for enjoying that was the idea, Love to dear you Ann.
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 7 months ago

Ann...

I can see you sitting there smiling at the thought of the journey of the falling leaf, caught by the wind to go... who knows!
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

Thank you too Moonman

Richard, yes, just sitting watching something like that is like a kind of meditation, with the mantra in movement and the sound of the river's continuity of life, giving one a peaceful feeling of being a part of the whole of nature, the whole of what exists and loving the unknown beyond the grasp of our mind. Just BEING. Takk from Ann
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Proprietress o…

16 years 7 months ago

decorate the foam of waterfalls

such a lovely expression, Ann I can just see you roaming the woods a little paintbrush in your hand dabbing color here and there, creating fall and spring and summer and winter stopping only to exchange your brush with a pen and a piece of paper to paint our site with words your Proprietress
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

It would be fun to ride on a leaf.

Dear Proprietress, I have photographs for much of what I write or paint too. The foam was in a corner of a river's sloping tumble of water, and eddies stilled by a stone in the way, and those lovely gatherings of little sticks and other natural debris, with one beautiful big bubble forming on this magic pond, like an eye, and slowly circling with the rest of the foam as a frame or eye socket, then the bubble would suddenly burst and a new one take its place- the leaves adding the decor in their greens and oranges like slices of tangerine and apple and one bright red berry. Yes I stood still and saw this a while, then I had to hurry on as E had gone far ahead!!! If I paint with water colours its perhaps dabs or washes, if with oil the leaves would tumble down with a bold sound, as they sometimes do in nature, landing beside you making you jump with surprise. It would be fun to ride on a leaf. Yesterday there was one, in the still air of Autumn that 'dayled'( my word) down, it was undecided as to where to land, as if it had any choice, and it swung from side to side in a most beautiful slow motion quite breathtakingly arresting, I watched and as I did even only for that short moment, I too was dayling with its ride on the air down, down, and sideways it slid itself onto a boulder and came to rest there. Dayling its closer to the Norwegian 'dvale' down and I like that sound for it. Thank you Kata of the observant eyes, you do a nice comment for a tiny moment of existence. Love from you Ann of Norway. (Its raining today all colours shine)
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Proprietress o…

16 years 7 months ago

slices

my dear Ann, you wrote the leaves, adding the decor in their greens and oranges like slices of tangerine and apple and one bright red berry this projects such a vivid (and juicy) picture on the screen of my mind I would love to see you process it into a poem or better yet to add it onto this one I think that it is so lovely that it would be a shame just to see it in a comment, Ann of the Wonderful Mind :)
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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Ann

Thank you. This is so colorful and I love seeing the world through your eyes. It is very windy here today and there is more than leaves floating around. I loved this picture of perfection you have shared. Love Lyz. XX
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paparazii

16 years 7 months ago

Lovely

You have a divine way of bringing nature's elements into writing, this is too good, could see myself with a pencil n notebook, right in this forest and writing it all down.
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

You are such a sensitive poet yourself.

Thank you for your comment Papi, I love you coming in and saying something, you are such a sensitive poet yourself. Today I took a whole lot of notes in the woods on my walk, and had to keep walking carefully as the damp ground was frozen a little from last nights frost and it was treacherous in places,specially on twigs and stones, but I managed to make fourteen notes. I must tell you as it was so exciting I found a bower, a little wattle house in the woods, it reminded me of a story Karen Blixen wrote in her "Gothic Tales" (published under the name of Isak Dinesen, as it was infra dig for a woman to be a writer in those days!!!!) There it was this little twig woven building of branches with their leaves still on, as well as fir tree fronds, having been used, then there was a little beautifully woven round window on one side and a square one on another, I thought it might be a bears den, but on going closer saw its dark interior was a haven to hide in, perhaps someone uses it as a bird-watching post. Hansel and Gretel almost appeared to me too it was all so like a fairy tale. I expect there are foxes or badgers that like to spend a few hours dozing in there too. The lily pads on the lakes were so beautiful in their dark ice rectangular crystal patterned waters and the sunshine made their green colours stand out against the background. Later we went along a roe deer path narrow like that of a sheep, no people go along there much it twisted and went round trees and zig zagged its way into wild forest. Each time I walk its like an adventure, I don't need to read those books any more I live them instead. Well I expect you too have adventures! Thank you again and love from Ann of Norway
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Idlemindwondering

16 years 7 months ago

very, very sweet

to capture so much of a moment in private and yet see its affect played out upon your thoughts of another; and to then walk the distance shared to place it on their back door - Very, very sweet.
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ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

enda, patrick collins. hi

enda, patrick collins. hi there i dont think our paths have crossed before i really could put image to your words as i was reading this you really set the imagery well , nicely done , ziggy
DawningDaytripper

DawningDaytripper

16 years 7 months ago

Ann I loved it.

I imagine that I sit with you as you draw these wonderful images to mind... Always a wonderful journey. Julie D.D.
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bjp

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Margaret Ann,

If one compares, it is easy to note the degree of experimentation you are doing. Bravo sweet Margaret Ann! It is the challenge, past the catch in the throat, with you proceeding indomitable, such wet ground as is, broken by the Wellingtons I am enamoured of the opening, "Take a plume/ and paint your poem/ Autumn colours’...". And the, "wafted waving winds". Five stars for your engagement in all the pushing of oneself. Brian