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Rock Salt Angel (for Jim Carroll) *rough draft*

Rock Salt Angel

 (For Jim Carroll)

 

August 1, 1949

September 11, 2009

               

"My voice has a quiver.  That's where you store the arrows before you shoot."  Jim Carroll

 

                                When  your 

                   lash of red hair

                struck the desk, 

                a crop of echoes

                stirred in the

                 littering

          reeds of Upper Manhattan.

    

      A quiet evening army of

  glowing orchards

    began to fizz, and

pimples burst

    dribbling stars

   on the smooth

    foreheads of junkies

                already so old

they  bum

                 cigarettes

later

                each

 morning.

 

                       2.

 There is a paddle blowing

                up young  arms,

a bamboo boat

                is stirring down

                   a grid,

                      and,

                 King Arthur

                of these boroughs,

you  sweep  with

                antiseptic grace

through the city's

                sewage scape.

 

       3.

       

                     A man

                skins a basketball

   on the George Washington Bridge.

                He is drunk   

   having accidentally

                killed his wife

while performing

   a Ghost Dance

he learned from Sitting Bull

  also known as

   J. Carroll!

  Naish

                in 1954.

 

His voice quivers,

    he sobs,

                 then the arrows

shoot.

 

Page after page,

      leather,

   curved and bent

back

  fly into

   the river

                  blossoming

           like Venus Indian Scalps

              into

         genus  flowers  

                all over the Hudson.

                  4.

 

 

A  Spaulding Outdoor

 

worn, fingered,  

 

                thick with pigskin

 

whistles in

    

smooth

                passage 

through

                the net's 

hoop                    

         skirt   

                of

white 

                diamonds.

 

                   5.

 

                A   man

          who has forgotten

     her name

 in Grand Central

         preps

                 his girl's pale

    arm for

                vain designs.

               

                6.

She falls asleep

 

                in the bathtub,

               

  her eyes growing varicose.

      

A poet

                on the nod

 

near  St. Mark's

 

                 dreams  of

 

fucking  Ophelia,

                                and the painting

                changes.

 

         Her eyes  open

 

                as yours' close,

                in  Innsmouth,

home

         and yet

                so far away.

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Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear GB

I really loved this tribute but the broken up lines where sending my mind silly .. I think it would read much smoother if you lost the breaks but its still a solid write ..well done Kind regards love Jayne
Q

Quillsvein1

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you

Jayne! I normally don't like such extravagant line breaks, but this is the way Carroll himself wrote, along with the entirety of the New York School (Frank O' Hara, Ted Berrigan, Anne Waldman, etc.) This is a very rough draft. GB
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear GB

I am sorry to say I have never read any of his poetry but now I come back to it a little fresher its fine... ignore my earlier remark .. an awesome write ... and I understand wanting to write it in his own style Love Jayne x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

You, sir, are a poet’s

You, sir, are a poet's poet. Bow. ~A There are no strangers in Paradise.
kaligantsaros

kaligantsaros

16 years 6 months ago

If this is rough then ..

Then what will the finished product be like . Loved it .Sang all the way through. Background of Tom Waites foreground of grey New York streets. Beautiful imagery mixed like a candy box of Woolworths choicest penny dips. Language that was tough and soft , surf and turf, concrete and candy floss. Strong write sir. drew on the best of the school and filled me with a feeling of the lost 70's. Shame they're almost all gone. K
Q

Quillsvein1

16 years 6 months ago

Thank you

all! I suspect this will be the first and last time I am compared to Lou Reed, so I will sit here and cherish the moment. :-) GB