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Life Prescription (Stay Sober, And Scream)

Doctor,
You say it's issues with self esteem,
You say I gotta let off some steam,
Stay sober,
And scream,
Before it's over,
You say, I gotta let it all out,
You say, learn what it's about,
Empty out those bags,
Stored in my mind,
Without drugs or fags,
And leave the past behind.

Doctor,
It's easy for you to say,
Live your life this way or that way,
I'd love to, don't you think?
So, send me to another shrink,
Even they won't be able to stand the stink,
Of foul smelling hurt and pain,
Inside the darkest depths of my brain,
It's black,
And cold,
And damp,
It'll hold them in a clamp,
And squeeze them,
And squish them,
'Til they can't stand it no more,
Like what it did to me.
— Poetree, Oct 23, 2009

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Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Poetree, Catchy name

Dear Poetree, Catchy name btw lol ...Welcome to Neopoet ... this first post is very solid ... lol the title ? not yet titled ? he he cheeky .. good write though I look forward to your next ... kind regards Jayne x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Prescription Life for a

Prescription Life for a title, your first word gave me the idea and just a suggestion I am sure you ahve your own ideas lol take care Love Jayne x
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Poetree

16 years 7 months ago

Hi Jayne,I really liked your

Hi Jayne, I really liked your idea of "Prescription Life" as a title of my poem, I am gettig ideas at the moment and I thought that maybe "Life Prescription" fits too! I will change the name soon, as thanks to your comments and others I have ideas buzzing around in my head now. Thank you again for taking the time to read and comment, Joel x
Nordic cloud

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

Stay sober, And scream,

This swings along with a good lilt Poetree man. And welcome to our party, hope you enjoy it here. "Stay sober, And scream," I like this bit specially Not sure the end has the inpact it should to give it its sqeeze squish bang! Yours Ann of Norway
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Poetree

16 years 7 months ago

Hello Ann,Thank you ever so

Hello Ann, Thank you ever so much for your comment. I never thought of using that for a title, a great idea! I will definately consider it, I think that probably will be it, I just want to see if I get anymore ideas though! I know what you mean about the ending, I think that writing this took a lot out of me as it was and when I got to the end I felt satisfied that what I needed to get out of me, was out. I will definately try to make the endings of my poems more dramatic, I am just experimenting with different techniques etc and what you have said I believe will really help me. Thank you once again for taking the time to read my poem and comment! Take care, Joel x
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

hello

I think that this is a good therapeutic write. I just saw my shrink yesterday afternoon. I gave him a copy of my first published book, of all dark poetry. A suggestion: read and comment on other poet's work. That way you will get to know some of the other poets here and they will know that you are here and possibly come by to read your work. Welcome to the site. Always, Cat