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My bad poem

 

A  jabberwock a blabber mouth

now don't you get uncouth

its time to stop before you jot

some words regretted

mother fretted

dad 

looked on askance

while you did your dance

my dear young thing

my daughter

you shouldn't do things you didn't oughta

now look what you've done

seemingly for fun

tut-tut, fy-fy and hope to die

a death without much pain

and try to stay insane

is all I cry

 

don't hold the ball too long

just join in with the throng

and tow the rope up the slippery slope

of life

and make someone

an ever loving wife.


 


— Nordic cloud, Oct 22, 2009

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Region, Country: Oslo and Flatdal, Norway., NOR

Favorite Poets: Too daunting this.

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Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

Doesn't look bad to me, Ann!

I think it's quite charming myself! You tell a simple story with candor, wry humor, and a touch of whimsy! Very good indeed!
Rett

Rett

16 years 7 months ago

Ann

I like it! I did have a little problem in one spot... dad looked on askance (to me it begs to be "looked on in askance") Other than that, not bad at all. We all have a bit of devilment in us. *LOL* Love it! Respectfully, Rett: Come and join in for Neo Night, October 27, 2009 at 8:00 to 8:45 PM Eastern time. Meet and talk with the AEC chair, Andrew!
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Ohhhh Ann I am working on

Ohhhh Ann I am working on my'bad' entry for the october contest LOL my first competion hahaha it was worst I thought I might stand a chance ... this is really good hun, I dont know that I could call this mixed up nonsense cause it made sense to me LOL Love and hugs Jayne x x
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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Lol

It is funny, I can understand if it is for a comp, but i liked it, lol. Love lyz, Xx
Proprietress of Crimson Hearts

Proprietress o…

16 years 7 months ago

fy-fy what?!

and try to stay insane... what better advice to give to a child! I will have to remember that for my own children. even in a poem, intentionally bad, do you give such splendid advice :) I love you and your poetry, my Snow Queen! your Proprietress