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surrender

set him free, insidious demons

here I am, willing

leave no trace of your poison

crawl eagerly to new flesh

 

haunt me, you vicious fiends!

as his arms seek and surround me

from his shoulders, find mine

 

devour me, heartless pestilence

let peace find its way to those tormented eyes

my soul is strong

 

curse me, callous despots

as you probe the hidden corners of my mind

I will shelter his fragile heart

 

feed on me, voracious plague

as my lips brush his, pass through them and away

over my tongue, deep into the void

 

I will do battle, you merciless tyrants

my love will form his shield

my sacrifice, his salvation

 

and you will not return.


 



— bunnymug, Oct 22, 2009

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

hello

All for love sacrificed. Good title. I'm not sure if you need to repeat the last line twice. Good work. Always, Cat
Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

=0)

I think it is better now. Always, Cat
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bunnymug

16 years 7 months ago

Thanks, Cat!

I agree...Didn't like the last line repeated twice either. Appreciated the feedback!