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Stuart Reiss
Oct 21, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

My Roses for you

Mid winter found my garden bed
Awoke one day with sleapy head
Trod to my garden and looked around
Not a precious flower to be found

All there were, a tangle of thorns
Bit like my life, my body mourns
I slashed and cut my whole way through
Mirroring my life long search for you

I tendered the ground and prayed for rain
In forever hope of seeing you again
Here comes the spring with budded leaf
I pray to god, please deal no grief

My lonely heart it cannot take
More thorns of winter, spell must I break
Red chargers of hope grow unabated
These roses know how long I've waited

Those thorns I will not ever forget
But pain must come before heaven's sent

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lyz

16 years 6 months ago

Hi Stuart

Spell check, ta da.lol. 2nd stanza, 2nd line, mourn, not morn, last word, and I faltered a little on 2nd last stanza, spell must I break. apart from that bud, no pun intended, this is a great write. Read the part that I faltered and see if u do the same. Very good read, sad though. Well done love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Stuart

I see Lyz has already pointed out the typos ... and saw your messages and think its a great idea what you suggested we all do, I do I have already co-writen poetry before with Jess you would have heard of him through Fleur baby ... and Brian and Olya and Arrow and I are yet to finish our poems but not far away ... I love writing with other people I find it stimulates for your own writes and freshens the mind ... anyhooo beautiful poem I loved it and I know the typos wont be hard to fix so I am starring you up now LOL in case I forget its been one of those days love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 6 months ago

Hello Stuart

I like the theme of this poem My favourite stanza was All there were, a tangle of thorns Bit like my life, my body mourns I slashed and cut my whole way through Mirroring my life long search for you There is a touch of Sufi in this verse. I am curious the later reference to god was in lower case ...was this intentional? Best Wishes Seabhac
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Stuart Reiss

16 years 6 months ago

Hi Seabhac, to be totally

Hi Seabhac, to be totally honest I used the word God as a metaphor....I didnt actually pray....although I do believe. Now, to answer your question....I didnt give it a thought, but if I had of I would have used lower case (everything happens for a reason - just proven! ) Very best regards Stuart