Janice Pearce

Oct 21, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Laden Wings

Purple fuchsia
led the chorus,
and awoke the
summer's morn.

It wept sweet nectar
from its womb,
for the ruby throated
hummingbird.

Hypnotic tunes
in auburn skies,
endure, until late
summer sighs.

Then fuchsia fades
to abandoned tunes,
on hummingbirds
laden wings . . .

— Janice Pearce, Oct 21, 2009

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Critiques

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Janice,How beautiful is

Dear Janice, How beautiful is this ? I only have one suggestion and thats the second last line Then fuchsia fades to abandoned tunes, of hummingbirds --- ON hummingbirds ? dont know its just a suggestion laden wings … Loved this one it felt peaceful ... kind regards love Jayne x x

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

Laden Wings

Jayne, Thank you for pointing that out to me, makes perfect sense. I appreciate the feedback from you! _________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

I dont know what it was hun

I dont know what it was hun but ON sounded like it should have been there .. and your always welcome hun the pleasure was mine in the reading ... love and hugs Jayne x x

hugo la rosa

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Janice:

It seems that you awoke today to read or to feel the morning's special poetry. I also believe that colors are a great inspiration for poets, and this poem does justice to your angel- hummingbird who practically wrote this beautiful poem for you. 5 stars and a well deserved nomination. Sincerely, Hugo

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

Laden Wings

Hugo, Thank you for commenting on this poem. I truly appreciate your thoughts. Colors truly make the world a special place. I appreciate the nomination also! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Beautiful

I love the feel of it, the fuchsias remind me of my nans gardens, with the hummingbirds an added bonus. Colorful vivid and a treat to read. Fresh. A true Gem. Thank you, love to you and yours, Lyz. XX

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

Laden Wings

Lyz, Thank you for you thoughts. I am glad it brought you somewhere,[your nans garden] where you probably love to be~ ___________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

odd molly

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Janice.Beautifully

Dear Janice. Beautifully written poetry that makes warmth and all those beautiful shades of colours with the small jewels of the air hummming and singing is just so wonderful. I loved to step into your colours this morning and they made life so much brighter and so much more beautiful . ( We are having rain today and it is very cold and dark ) Thank You. Love. o molly

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

Laden Wings

Molly, If I made your morning brighter, I am pleased, for your poetry makes me feel that way also. Thanks for commenting. I appreciate the feedback~ _____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

greeneyes

16 years 7 months ago

wow

One word Beautiful

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

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One word Thanks!! ___________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Ink Dragon

16 years 7 months ago

Janice,

you have painted beautiful images of the seasons here. I stumbled a little over your use of tenses in this one, it seems to be alternating between present and past, which I found mildly irritating. Do you think you could do something about that? Yours, ~Nina

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

Laden Wings

Nina, Thanks for your input here. Could you give me an example? Be glad to improve it, give me your thoughts! _____________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Ink Dragon

16 years 7 months ago

Of course I can, Janice,

Purple fuchsia lead the chorus, and awoke the summer’s morn. should either be Purple fuchsia led the chorus, and awoke the summer’s morn. or Purple fuchsia lead the chorus, and awake the summer’s morn. Hope that's enough of an example. Yours, ~Nina

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

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Nina, the first example for a change is exactly as it is written. So I guess I am being dense here. _________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Ink Dragon

16 years 7 months ago

Janice,

it happens to the best of us, no worries. It is lead (present tense) vs. led (past tense). I once had a superfluous "s" that escaped my notice, though several people tried to point it out to me. Funny how spelling can lie in the eye of the beholder ;) Yours, ~Nina

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

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I am not awake this a.m. thanks soooo much Nina, appreciate it! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Proprietress o…

16 years 7 months ago

gorgeous, honey

this poem oozes the things I love hummingbirds, nectar, auburn skies, all of it this gorgeous poem is so very easy on the eyes love to you and thank you for posting this little wonder! your Proprietress

Janice Pearce

16 years 7 months ago

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Proprietress, Thanks for you comment, I appreciate you stopping by! _________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous

Mark

16 years 3 months ago

Hi Janicefuchia

The fuchia is one of my favorite plants. Is in not odd how those most remarkable present themselves anuals. (the cineraria is another) Dazzling writing of the hummingbird sipping from the fuchia beginings and endings ;) Regards, Mark "I do not walk the earth and eat out of dumpsters, I'm not a bum, I'm beat."

Janice Pearce

16 years 1 month ago

Laden Wings

Mark, first of all, please accept my appoligies for not responding to you comment until this very late date.I appreciate your feedback! ______________________________________________________ Income-tax forms should be more realistic by allowing the taxpayer to list "Uncle Sam" as a dependent Anonymous