Candlewitch

Oct 21, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The Beckoning

It was a black-hearted,

Satanic, matrimonial ceremony,

Not to be confused with

A Pagan Handfasting.

Though many of the ignorant masses

Wouldn't know the difference

The bride wore a long, black, satin gown,

a train of black, flowing lace

Covered her long, dark, silken mane of hair.

Her pale skin glowed

in the onyx candle-lit church

Of "Our Father Of The Original Sin."

She walked down the aisle to take

The hand of her intended.

Both bride and groom to be

Knelt at the alter of

"The Prince of Lies."

They took the razor blade

and, palm up, each, in turn,

Made a small slice in their wrists.

Three drops of blood

dripped into the chalice

From which each took a sip

And the Priest from Hell

Cursed their souls, each in turn...

— Candlewitch, Oct 21, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more., Candlewitch

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Critiques

Lonnie

16 years 7 months ago

A Dark Feast for Poetic Eyes!

Awesome Cat! Your picture of a Blasphemous Union is poetically superb! Shivering imagery, lusciously seductive word usage, and all in all, a pure delight! I am humbled by your expertise!

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Hey Lonnie!

Thank you for the read and the stars! It's great to see you again. Give my love to Chrys! and a big *HUG for the both of you. Always, Cat

Rett

16 years 7 months ago

Glad I wasn't at that ceremony! What did you think of my title? I liked it. It drew me in. How was my language use? The language use was very good. What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing? It read really good out loud. How does this theme appeal to you? Although, I am not much normally for dark poetry, I tend to get in dark moods and enjoy both reading and writing it as I did this one! How was the beginning/ending of the poem? The beginning/ending was good. I especially liked the ending since it left it up to imagination. Well done Cat. Respectfully, Rett: Come and join in for Neonight, October 27, 2009 at 8:00 to 8:45 PM Eastern time. Meet and talk with the AEC chair, Andrew!

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Hello

Welcome to my poem, Rett. My Mother's Father was named Everett. He was the black sheep Grandfather who got an early divorce. He was still a very good guy. I'm glad you liked my dark poem and the ending was cut short to leave it up to the imagination of the reader, you picked that up, you clever man. Come by anytime and you will always be welcome. I'm posting these dark ones in honor of the month of Halloween. Always, Cat

Worldwide Freeride

16 years 7 months ago

Scene setting....

Cat, after I plucked up the courage to come out from behind the settee and write this review... I was transfixed upon the page, you've hoodooed the poem itself haven't you? Spellbinding us all with wonderful wordsmithing, you set the scene so well with awesome descriptives and a shudder inducing surroubdings and there you place the seed of fear and unholiness in us all... I have one complaint Cat... why does it end there? Keep going we don't want ceremonies like this to end... how do they celebrate their union? Grenade juggling perhaps? Adds a great red polka dot motif to the walls that one does... Please, please, please expand on this as it is so good gets going and then stops suddenly... I want more! More I tell you... I'm like oliver twist with his bowl... all you got to do is fill it up with more gore! lol! Brilliant Cat! Dale :)

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Dale

I suppose I could have had them speaking in tongues and handling snakes like the Christian Pentecostal's do, but that is even too frightening for me. I'm scared to death of snakes! LOL! Always, Cat

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Yes Yes Yes

You never disappoint. Thank u Cat. Typo in line 13, ooh, aisle or is it meant to be isle. Thought I would get that out of the way before I forgot. Lol. Amazing and beautiful, just perfection. I loved this dark wedding write, and as I said, you never disappoint. What a wedding, you have done it again. Excellent. Love to you and yours. Lyz, xx.

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

=0)

Thanks for reading, Lyz and for catching that typo! I took care of it :) Glad you enjoyed my dark poem. Always, Cat

hugo la rosa

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Cat:

I've never heard of something like that could be possible in real life. It's horribly mysterious, spooky and injurious; you must have been apprehensive and nervous. Did you really witness such a blasphemous act of hell? I'm curious! Sincerely, Hugo

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Hugo

Nope, I didn't see it, I just made the whole thing up according to what I perceive the average person to believe on that subject. Always, Cat

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Cat

you know how much I love your edge writes this one is simply delicious . . Your a witch genius lol love this and you big sis . . Woot i can comment rate and nom on my phone now lol . . Love and big healing hugz Jayne xxx

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest One

How are you doing? I was just thinking of you. I was wondering if you are well and at home. I've got two Dr.'s appointments back to back, this afternoon. One is my check-up on the episode Friday, and the other to see if I'm still crazy, LOL! BTW, I very much like your new picture. Love, Cat

ziggy

16 years 7 months ago

hi cat

enda, patrick collins. hi cat i really love the title which adds that bit more to the theme you do write these dark ones with such ease a union of blood cursed souls and all , great theme for time of year with many good lines well protrayed loving it well done of coures as always , its great to be back to neo chat soon ,,,,,zig

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

ZIGGY!!!

How great to have you back! I was just thinking about you yesterday. Thanks for the feedback! I'll be stopping by your page soon. Always, Cat

Hooded Stranger

16 years 7 months ago

Cat

Cat, I just found this gem of a dark ritual. Nice and dark, satanic and evil...this is your writing at its best. Loved the finale: And the Priest from Hell Cursed their souls, each in turn… I would not have been out of place at this ceremony in my hood. Great write and the subject matter that comes so naturally for you. regards, HS ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

LOL!

Thanks, Dan. I just let my imagination carry me away. Sometimes it gets me into terrible trouble, though. I'm glad you liked it! Always, Cat

Bonitaj

16 years 7 months ago

Cat!

You're such a dark horse, oops - writer! Let's just say as Jayne did - you LOVE THE EDGE! Go girl!"Boni

Candlewitch

16 years 6 months ago

Hi Boni

yes I love to walk the edge, lol, or should that be, I love to walk with Edge? Thanks for reading and commenting. Always, Cat