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Atonement in the Fire

A thimble full of joys
 is all that It will take,
  to carry me through a fire
   unto a new days wake

As Pandora's box was opened
 a curious creature looked within,
  her mother always warning
   that her downfall would be sin

But here within this moment
 of discovery past the veils,
  it was the killer of the cat
   that made this spirit fail

With no regrets in pockets
 I fill them up with hope,
  the love and gentle messages
   are the lifelines used to cope

When pain is carving his name
 in the marrow of my bones,
  a joy of the world fires me
   this mind turns to atone

Building with no blocks
 till loving hands assist,
  in glowing lights all over
   my will to live persists

And when I start to pale
 as I sometimes do,
  turn to look inside me
   and I open up the flue

Once the blaze is lit
 that no man can extinguish,
  a spirit sits beside me
   in time I'll not be vanquished

And reaching for the end
 singing peace to all my days,
  I will soldier on beside him
   beneath my wake does blaze

— Seren, Oct 18, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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seabhac

seabhac

16 years 7 months ago

Poetry is certainly the voice of the soul

To voice your innermost fears so eloquently, to expose the secret of your very personal coping mechanism is a brave thing Jayne but that openness takes the sharing and the kindling of your fire across the whole world and touches lives and strengthens those who take the time to share your words. In return I send to you an orb of flame to keep within for when your need is greatest. Thank you for sharing Liz
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Liz

I had started this one a while back and had to walk away from it a few times ... incredibely hard to write ... finding the words took awhile ... but it was one I wanted to finish before I go away sooo I sat myself down and made myself finish it yesterday otherwise it may still be in the unfinished folder Thanks huni I near cried at your message (huggles) I will still be round every few days while I am away I can comment on my phone but I cannot vote or submit ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

Starbright, starlight

Burning bright. You have no clue How inspiring your words are... do you? Higgest bugs and love, ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Sir Gee

I find this one hard to read ... thank you so much for your kind words they are the gentle messages that have burned themselves into my mind, its you all who give me the burn to fight ... and its a burn have no doubt ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
Kailashana

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

I’m having a difficult

I'm having a difficult time to read this past a *thimble full of joys*. My eyes are too blurry. Momanna ~A Many years ago I read atonement as at one ment. In the fire I am the fire. There are no strangers in Paradise.
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Annamom

That thimble full of joys is a nod to my dads parents Nana was a seamstress and Pa called me his thimble full of joy , they are long gone but I have never forgotten the influence they had on my life ... and the joy in the thimble I wondered if you might pick up on that line ... I am even finding this one hard to read it was even harder to write (huggles) love and higgest bug hugs Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

You Go Girl

Strong in voice, mind, write, and a bloody brilliant, sad, heart and soulful write at that. Keep up that fighting spirit and dont stop, you go girl. And I will be in touch soon, love to all and pleasant thoughts. Love from Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Lyz,This is one of

Dearest Lyz, This is one of the hardest writes I have ever writen ... it all becomes more real not that it wasnt, but yeah I dont know what to say ... except thank you (huggles) love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Thank you Dark … I

Thank you Dark ... I appreciate you taking the time to read this one ... was like pulling teeth to write (hugs) love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
press

press

16 years 7 months ago

JC

Hey JC U know I give details in my comments . Ive have tried to refrain from those words like ? this is one of your best. So I will say this ? your poem is a new achievement that you wrote that day. I think it's close to perfect and will mark you as a great poet at lease for one day LOV2U PRESS
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Press

A poet for a day ? that will do me huni,I have no illusions of glory but the pleasure of my friends in the readings? is better in my eyes ;) ... thank you for your beautiful comment ... it made my afternoon big hugs of love from down under Jayne x x x(hug)