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Gazing to Water

Beneath the scratches
spanning this page,
random thoughts
have been paved

I have no substance
in the world at large,
but this beat of life
regroups to charge

From battle songs
to old lang syne,
until death does turn
the page of time

The industrial world
means nothing to me,
its the ones who love
I trust to set sight free

If I cling to a breath
that a burn cant free,
I'll look to the water
for the release I seek

All through life
in times of need,
no call of help
was ignored by creed

Following your trail
through the paths of hell,
I'll spit into the depths
of the devils well

Somewhere I read
that the pain we feel,
is the mirror of joy
no love can conceal

On the racetrack of life
I ride in my mind,
flashing past memory
I ache into the devine

Past the horrors and pain
I dont close my eyes,
as the panavision carved
it serratured my spine

In the beauty and rapture
of the purest peace,
all the pain is forgotton
and I find my release

Acceptance of fate
was a bargain I struck
But all bets are off
and I dont give a fuck

— Seren, Oct 17, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Geezer

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

Thinking....

Still thinking...Not usually at a loss for words, but....Higgest of all bugs,~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Gee..Not often I am

Dear Gee.. Not often I am either but todays one of them (huggles) much love and higgest bug hugs from down under Jayneeee x x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Stuart

You have made me smile,those words of yours are truer than you know my friend and I dont even know where it come from ... thanks so much for your kind comment and nomination though I cant see this one getting to spotlight its a little bit of fluff but I actually like it ... (huggles) love and higgest bugs Jayne x x
Fleur MacDonald

Fleur MacDonald

16 years 7 months ago

No way is this a bit of fluff

The language you use reads like a war poem, that's all I could feel, felt like a lonely solider yearning for home. Well done, this is brilliant and definately not fluff!!! xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx:)fleur
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Fleur

I am going to have to watch what I write with you LOL your starting to know me too well ... I wrote this last night drunk and pissed off at fate LOL ... and saying sorta bring it on ... another battle cry ... sorry but I aint ready to lay down yet and I am mentally preparing myself for the next little while ... and my writing helps ... thanks for reading this one darlin (huggles) and I never thought anyone would pick up on the untone it does have one I know lol ... love and higgest bug hugs Jayne x x x
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Jayne:

Superb poem! Well crafted, with a delightful use of words, a glimpse upon your life, the hero you've become for those whose love you, it's all that matters. It's going to sound funny, but I like the last lines! Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Hugo

I am no hero lol not in my mind anyway ... I am tackling my present situation in the same way I have most things in my life and thats head on ... I ahve mongol blood in me so I guess I have a touch of warrior in me ... but its good its keeps the blood flowing and the fire burning ... LOL I kinda like those last words they say it all ... really do eh ? lol love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
seabhac

seabhac

16 years 7 months ago

is there Scots blood there as well as Mongolian?

With the Ould Lang and the burn there are hints of highland clearances. You stumped me with the word serratured, I have not come across this before and the curiousity to know is needing fed. Should the line 'burn cant free,'read can't? As other comments I do so love the last verse...kick ass girl... Much love to you across the world Liz
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Liz

Yes I was married to a scot ... My kids last names are Campbell lol and when I got married I was bagpiped into the church we had the Campbell Tartan for bow ties etc ... And I also have blood ties through my fathers side of the family ... the word Serrature is a very old word means .... A notching in the edge of anything,like a saw, serration ... hope that fed the curiousity lol (huggles) and your right it should be can't I missed it first time round LOL thanks for the comment glad you like that last verse LOL I rather like it myself love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Hey Aunty

I am pleased to see you reneged on your bet, Lol. My, my, you all have been busy these past couple of days. Writing this beautifully worded poem with a touch of fire and over thoughts. You are a special lady and you have many energies igniting your way, something like Ians poem where we stand on the grass. I do love how you say you had been drinking for this one, drink more often. Lol. You take care and I will catch u later. so all our love to you and yours. Love Lyz, XX, beautiful strong and heartfelt poem.
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Ello Nan …Big smileThanks

Ello Nan ...Big smile Thanks huni for your kind comment ... I was naughty and thought no chemo I feel ok and I dont get to party this xmas so I celebrated early with the hubby ... and wrote this :O hahaha take care where have you been I missed you heaps on the weekend LOL love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Hey Aunty

You will be celebrating again and again, I see that and maybe, who knows, I may be right along side, celebrating with you and we can say, do whatever and piss everybody off, lol. Yeah, lets, it will be cool, lol. When I was sick, I also missed out on xmas, it was hard but I have since made up for it, and so will you. I expect you and Bethany to be apart of this babies life and that includes the shower next year, so we may wet the babies head early and get the party started, lol. Keep pumpin these beauty writes out dear aunt Jayne. Love lyz, XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

LMAO I am all for annoying

LMAO I am all for annoying the world one person at a time as our Jonathon says ... and me and Bethany dont get cuddles of that baby? it will be on woman !!!! hahaha I helped raise her/hims daddy so I feel I have a lot of love invested there , and yeah huni I cannot wait to get together have a few drinks and piss the whole world off celebrating life :) ... hahahahaha ... thanks for your message it brought a big old smile to a whiten face today I look like an albino with two different coloured eyes lmfao not a good look my love love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Hello, Hello, Hello

You albino you, lol. I think you should get lots of hugs and cuddles, no worries there. And as I said, plenty of time to rage, woohoo !! I want to now. LOL. sick of being cooped up at the mo but I am going to have a coffee in the sun, beautiful weather last couple of days. Even 10 minutes will do. Lots of love and I am not sure if Jade told Trent Happy 21st from us so let him Know we did. Happy 21st Trent. And no you are not old. Love to all. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Lyz

I just noticed this message didnt get a email for it, anyhooo hows you? lol .... dont tease me with the sun I am not allowed in the sun at the moment they suck LOL I will let trent know when I see him next that you sent B-day wishes for him thanks heaps hun ... you take care i am going to try and wrangle a shower before the water monster eats it all LMAO love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
L

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Was it a Full moon last night

I am laughing still at our comments etc. Seen this and thought, aha, Jayne better tell Trent or else, Lol. Love the pic, you must have been up for ages and I did get a little southerly breeze, thank you. Love Lyz. XX
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Lyz LOL !!

I am just about to go reread our comments how scary are they ?? I was a little mental last night and NO moon last night trust me I always notice LOL ...will definately tell trent ...glad you got that breeze last night it was so beautiful ... Love and hugs Jayne x x x
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

not sure if its good or bad

not sure if its good or bad by your comment but thank you for the read and the comment its always nice to see you around Shan kind regards Jayne x x