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Gazing to Water
Beneath the scratches
spanning this page,
random thoughts
have been paved
I have no substance
in the world at large,
but this beat of life
regroups to charge
From battle songs
to old lang syne,
until death does turn
the page of time
The industrial world
means nothing to me,
its the ones who love
I trust to set sight free
If I cling to a breath
that a burn cant free,
I'll look to the water
for the release I seek
All through life
in times of need,
no call of help
was ignored by creed
Following your trail
through the paths of hell,
I'll spit into the depths
of the devils well
Somewhere I read
that the pain we feel,
is the mirror of joy
no love can conceal
On the racetrack of life
I ride in my mind,
flashing past memory
I ache into the devine
Past the horrors and pain
I dont close my eyes,
as the panavision carved
it serratured my spine
In the beauty and rapture
of the purest peace,
all the pain is forgotton
and I find my release
Acceptance of fate
was a bargain I struck
But all bets are off
and I dont give a fuck
Critiques
Geezer
16 years 7 months ago
Thinking....
Seren
16 years 7 months ago
Dear Gee..Not often I am
Stuart Reiss
16 years 7 months ago
This is a very lovely write ....and I loved it
Seren
16 years 7 months ago
Dear Stuart
Fleur MacDonald
16 years 7 months ago
No way is this a bit of fluff
Seren
16 years 7 months ago
Dearest Fleur
hugo la rosa
16 years 7 months ago
Dearest Jayne:
Seren
16 years 7 months ago
Dearest Hugo
seabhac
16 years 7 months ago
is there Scots blood there as well as Mongolian?
Seren
16 years 7 months ago
Dearest Liz
lyz
16 years 7 months ago
Hey Aunty
Seren
16 years 7 months ago
Ello Nan …Big smileThanks
lyz
16 years 7 months ago
Hey Aunty
Seren
16 years 7 months ago
LMAO I am all for annoying
lyz
16 years 7 months ago
Hello, Hello, Hello
Seren
16 years 7 months ago
Dearest Lyz
lyz
16 years 7 months ago
Was it a Full moon last night
Seren
16 years 7 months ago
Dear Lyz LOL !!
R.M.Shanmugam
16 years 7 months ago
the last stranza is ringing
Seren
16 years 7 months ago
not sure if its good or bad