hugo la rosa

Oct 16, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Fall News

Brittle sense without,

the world at night,

inanimate,

unperturbed by the lack

of love.

Fall has brought

its brilliance

upon the lurking,

senseless endeavors,

overlapping,

the sweat of the poor.

News on TV,

fast facts,

on which the collars

pale upon

the easy money

in a rush of

sound images.

In the letters and

words,

a semblance of fresh

blood

upon the innocence

of children,

whose pictures squint

the mind,

heads go sideways

in pity

at the corner restaurant,

absent the indicators

of compassion.

Next day,

at the breakfast table,

the rich man yells

at his wife,

while the

kids keep growing,

like trees, cold

and bereft,

believing the world

has turned the right way

once more.

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Comments

seabhac

16 years 6 months ago

Its like seeing soul rationalising

What a different approach to subject matter can make. This is a much more focused poem for you Hugo , I do miss the ethereal mood you create in the totality of this but I find glimpses of it in lines like Brittle sense without, the world at night, This is a sad poem also and affects because it has a semblance of fresh truth in it. I am watching you grow from strength to strength as a poet and I am so appreciative that I can share your journey and learn from your blossoming.

hugo la rosa

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Seabhac:

We are all growing, that's what most desirable of poetry, the going deep within, seeking, changing, and always trusting there is a force in the world that wants to make good, in spite of what we see. Yes we're here as poets, together in a supernatural journey. It is supernatural...; it was pushed aside by the natural order of things in the world. (For many, Poetry is a waste of time.) Nevertheless, off the beaten path are the gems and jewels we so appreciate finding. They are our treasures, our understanding of things we so much value. Best Regards, Hugo

lyz

16 years 6 months ago

As always

You put my mind in a whirl, it is a sad type poem, but you always write with an air of compassion and beauty, this is really good, Hugo. I enjoyed reading this very much and I agree with Liz, you are growing strength to strength. A beautiful talented poet is our Hugo. Love Lyz. XX

hugo la rosa

16 years 6 months ago

My Dearest Lyz:

Thank you for the compliment. I really like the way you commented, my poem. Yes this is a sad poem, a theme in which I have so much to say. I'm really happy that you liked it. I know it is morning for you there, so I will say: Have a beautiful day! Sincerely, Hugo

Seren

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Hugo

I agree with Liz you are growing as a poet and are going from strength to strength ... Its and honour and a privelage to witness as we all do with each other ... I did also miss that ethereal feel but we all have to write truths and in truth the veils drops and the stark honesty shines though and creates its own light ... beautifully sad poem ... Love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

hugo la rosa

16 years 6 months ago

Dearest Jayne:

You have said it perfectly, we are creatures of change and contradiction, but as you and others here at the site, we all have our truths that we better say it, because truth has also its own beauty. Thank you my dear friend for your kind comment, and the nice words of encouragement. See you later. Always eager to read your next poem, Sincerely, Hugo

bjp

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Hugo,

This poem is much clearer in communicating its message. It uses the news as something to link the ideas. It also stays closer to the generalizing adage, "seduction not instruction". Thus, the values of this poem are more inferential than the last, and, ironically, that typically leads to more influence. There are many very good lines here. I pick some demonstratively: fast facts, on which the collars pale upon the easy money ... In the letters and words, a semblance of fresh blood ... whose pictures squint the mind, ... cold and bereft, believing the world has turned the right way once more. The improvements are very significant. Excellent work. Five stars for the great change and a good poem. Brian

hugo la rosa

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Brian:

Thank you for your comment and recommendations. Yes, I wrote this poem trying to be a little less abstract, and it seems that I've reached the desired outcome. And thank you for your encouragement. Sincerely, Hugo