Seren

Oct 16, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Flints of Fire

Until the battle recedes
no more
and the earth has tilted
beyond its axis,
when the wind
gusts to appall
as in ancient
history,
forgotten

I shall remember,

As a muniment
of minutes
broke,
the sheath of silk
covering my id,
unveiled the majesty
and wonder,
ambrosia
energy flowing
in neon tubes

Revealed
in the pain
and suffering
an atom of joy,

You

— Seren, Oct 16, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

My Beloved Jayne, I said

My Beloved Jayne, I said ohhhhhh out loud, absolutely devastated by your poem, and then I read *for Annamom..... What can I ever say except that I love you? Momanna ~A There are no strangers in Paradise.

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

My dearest Anna, (huggles) I

My dearest Anna, (huggles) I love you more ... Love and higgest bugs Jaughter x x x x x

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Now, now child… mother has

Now, now child... mother has the last word: I love you more. I stretch my spirit arms across land, mountain. skyscraper, desert and sea to give you the biggest healing hugs to take with you to the hospital; I hold you in my heart of hearts. Tears and laughter, miles of smiles reaching from I to thee. Momanna There are no strangers in Paradise.

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

………………………

................................................................................................................................................................................................last word is yours mum (huggles) ...................................still love ya though pmsl .................................................................................................................................................................................................................................

hugo la rosa

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Jayne:

It seems a poem from a warrior woman in love with an ideal. I like this poem, it has something I cannot grasp, but it is beautifully sad. Once more, an excellent work. I guess the theme goes well with the woman you've become, strong and practical, but crowned with a --not yet totally revealed-- great spirituality. Sincerely, Hugo

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Hugo

Your wonderful compliment has left me gobsmacked I dont know what to say theres a first for the day ... LOL ... plua I slept in my brain isnt working yet lol with love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

Stunning sound of a tin whistle

This is a very special poem Jayne. You have made the sound of love's awakening so silky and sweeeeeeeet- I only used that word for the sound of it, couldn't think of another to fit just now, bother. Perhaps my title has its poignancy of ecstasies scream of joy. You can see what I am trying to get at and making a clumsy job of it. Terrific poem Jayne, I rode its sensations as one does the searing of a plane across the vast blue of the sky. Yes as Hugo says you have almost reached .......? Love from Ann of Norway.

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Ann, I wrote this in

Dearest Ann, I wrote this in tribute to Anna with much love, she has been so good to me and sometimes wonder how I would be without you all, but dont like thinking on that too much ... Y'all dont realise, how much inspiration you all are to me ... the depths you share with us enrich us all ... when times get tough ... I log in here and find a Anna Rant or something beautiful you have writen ... I have a few people that inspire me with their words ... its my way of centering myself and moving forward ... I am so honoured by your comment Ann ... coming from you that means the world to me *big smile* made my morning you all have LOL with all my love and higgest bugs jayne x x x

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Hi

Beautiful wording and a lovely poem for a friend, well done. I hope she keeps you energized every day. Beautiful. Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Lyz, I wasn’t sure

Dearest Lyz, I wasn't sure if I had edited this one enough to be honest ... but will wait and see if anyone else thinks it needs work ... thanks huni she inspires me all the time and I wanted her to know just how much , there are never enough words and I never feel I say what I want but I tried to...(huggles) With all my love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Lyn

Awwww ... thank you nearly made me cry ya buggar (hug)What a beautiful compliment ... this one was a hard but I decided to stop playing with it and let it go and see what had to be done ... the stars sometimes feel like I live in them somedays lol (huggles) dream sweet and talk soon love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

seabhac

16 years 7 months ago

Beautiful poem,awesome sentiment

Intent is everything and this poem is just so focused with love and compassion it positivly has a neon glow. Jayne a little different for you. I felt without the confines of rhyme this became free in expression and somehow all the more profound because of that. I love this poem, you have shared many positive things within its words Keep writing, keep searching, keep loving. Great big hugs Liz

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Liz

what can i say to that ... I guess with all thats happening in my life things will change even my writing i am feeling a huge shift in my writing and I guess its time to say the things i have been meaning to say ... ya know just in case LMAO sorry I am a little overcome at your comment ... hubby is sitting here and read your comment he said big Mwah and keep smiling and keep writing hes started reading and making more comments ... takes some time hes a a little shy .. but he loves all of yours that I have read him ... with all our love Jayne and the Snake ... Mwah(huggles)

Bosscombat

16 years 7 months ago

:)

shibby shibby cocoanut love it. thought it was great :) new sty-lee for you strong ending <3 ♣

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

dearest Matty … My darlin

dearest Matty ... My darlin brother .. I am drunk ... Opps sorry last call before the hospital train leaves the station ... anyhooo this one is different depending on what I have to say, is how it gets writen, sometimes it comes out rhyme sometimes it comes out freestyle most times it comes out shit and I flush it lmao oh god shut up Jay-knee lmfao Snake sends his love and he said to tell you " fuck australian Idol you and Robb are his Idols" ... guess what I wrote a drunken mastered poem .... ooooooo I am having fun tonight ... and wooooooooooot look flying pink pigs lmfao ... love and higgest bugs Jay-knee 2bums mwah mwah

deelilah

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Jayne

I don't really know what the hospital train is about. I do wish you all the best in whatever you are facing---and from reading the comments, it must be no small thing. I can tell, you are much loved here. In the short time I've been talking to you and reading your poetry, I've come to love you as well, the 'higgest bugs', the flying pigs and all of that. On the poem: it is lovely---has an eternal quality. It reads very well, even before knowing it is a tribute to a friend. 'an atom of joy' marvelous 'the sheath of silk covering my id, unveiled the majesty and wonder, ambrosia energy flowing in neon tubes' these words are awesome. Is the sheath of silk a hospital gown? I think maybe so. If the ambrosia energy flowing in neon tubes is anesthetic, then do enjoy the trip---one of the few benefits. by the way, do they have a different vocabulary in Australia? What a wonderful word: 'gobsmacked.' Always, Deelilah

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Deelilah

I answered this last night well thought I had but I must not have pushed submit so sorry hun ... The whole time i have been here I have been having treatment for leukemia in the beginning I wasn't that sick and just the last few months things have changed I will be away from Neopoet for a little while about 7-8 weeks Though !! now I have worked out how to read neopoet on my phone I will be able to read and comment every few days but thee wont be anything submitted unless snake and the kids come down to the hospital and do it for me ... Awwww Dee I think the world of all my friends here you included its the messages of support and love thats kept me sane-ish lol .... btw we do have a slightly different way of speaking here, and me more so I have a very mixed hertiage lol ... and gobsmacked I dont know where I read that word but I was small and I cant remember where i read it first but its a great word I say it all the time, thanks so much for your kind compliment ... make me smile (huggles) Sending bug hugs and love from down under Jayne x x x x x

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

What you give...

Is what you get! You got so much, I can't begin to measure it! You give your all to us, and all of us give it right back! Maybe someone at the hospital will let you use a lap-top or you could bribe a nurse to let you use something there. Like late at night, when there is no one using it. I hate the thought of not seeing anything from you almost daily. Whatever happens, just keep writing! I'll send you paper! and Pens, and pencils and....well, you get the picture. Higgest of all, gentlest, too...BUGS! ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Gee

Thats so true ... you get what you give ... everyone here says I am a giver and I rarely take and never ask for help ... lol stubborn me ... but I will be able to post every now and then I have Bosscombat living right near the hospital and when he visits I can give him my poems and he can post them for me ... and of course when Snake and the kids are there but where I am going to be in hospital? I am 2 hours away from home,so it will be when they can get there with school and work commitments ... I dont know how to do it on my phone ? or I would ... maybe get Boss to show me I know he sometimes submits from his phone LOL ... thanks for the read and comment Gee this ones one of my favourites and it was for a very special woman who doesnt realise the affect shes had on my life and my writing ... as have you .. always being my spell checker when I forgot in the beginning ... you people are just the best and I cannot thank you enough ... LOL btw I ahve a poem for you not finished yet but thought I might tease you a little LOL I know you HATE waiting hahaha *big smile* love to you and Wendy love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

I am proud...

to be considered a dear friend, you too, have given me much! You have shared with me and all, as much as I have with you. I love having my very own favorite Aussie friends. I brag alla time that I am on a poetry site and have friends all over the world. I now have the world-time on my cell-phone set for Sidney, Australia. Now I can see when you are. LOL You Tease! Big, big, higgest bugs, and love, ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Lyn

Awwwwwwww Lyn Ya buggar (huggles) ya made me cry ... LOL ... yeah I am formidable and I will battle till my last ... but its the people in my life that have given me the drive ... and it is a drive now,I have done nothing but mentally prepare myself for the next 2 months, like anything you dont go in unprepared, though I am travelling unfamiliar waters and there is that element of the unknown that you cannot prepare for ... and thats what a lot of the next couple of months is going to be about ... thanks for the support and love my friend ... its been a rough year and I just hope that the new year brings with it a small amount of luck and maybe a little wonder ... a new life ahead is tempting me but I cannot think of that until ... the battles been waged ... And I will be back I would miss my neofamily too much love and higgest bugs Jayne btw I have watched the blue angels fly on telly ... amazing arent they ? my nephew is a fighter pilot in the Australian air force, yeah and we even have a captain of a destroyer my cousins husband,with my fighting family its no wonder I am a warrior woman LOL huggles ...

adjei agyei-baah

16 years 7 months ago

thou art creative

Thou art creative Seren, have always enjoyed reading from you.Will be keeping track of your pieces.Stay bless, no stress.

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Sinbadd

That is a wonderful comment, thank you ... blessed be you and yours my friend ... I am honoured you enjoy my scribbles (hugs) love and hugs Jayne x x

Bonitaj

16 years 7 months ago

FLINTS OF FIRE

Spark our imagination endlessly, whatever you write Jayne! Go slowly, come back quickly and may God's speed be with you!!! I embrace thee from afar - you splendid woman you! Bonita j

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Boni

awwww huni thank you so much ... its not long now and I will be away for a while not posting but still commenting when i can get on ... just want to say thank you because you have been an inspiration to me ... your strive for excellence in words is palapable ..so I am not the only one who inspires ... you always have done for me Love and biggest hugs Jayne x x x