Kailashana

Oct 15, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

if suck is a four-letter word, can I still get on the bus with you?

You could call the Lover in your dreams
a Succubus
you could say she's a demon and needs
to be expunged,
you could practice celibacy and 1001 austerities
to extricate yourself from the burning
in your loins,
or you could say:
"Welcome, my darling, I've been waiting
for you."
You could say, but you won't.

— Kailashana, Oct 15, 2009

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Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Mommy Dearest (huggles)

this is hot hot hot like the night we are having its getting warm here and we got the windows open the air is crisp and spring feels like its finally making an appearance and shes a succubus this year already heating us up and your poem felt like the weather ... wonderful write and that ending is a killer love it !!! love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

We had a late Spring that

We had a late Spring that was actually early June, Jayne. ;-) And now it's been raining cold for several weeks. Not much of an *Indian* summer, although who knows, judging from recent history we may have it in December. Brrr. It's strange to think there are some folks world over who have never seen a snowflake (or felt a succubus). Hahahaha. ~A There are no strangers in Paradise.

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Wow! Are you bragging or

Wow! Are you bragging or complaining? ;-) Truth is you can't tell one from the other, eh? ~A There are no strangers in Paradise.

Rett

16 years 7 months ago

I won't

No way. uh uh, *LOL* Always something to make the mind consider implications Anna. Well done. Respectfully, Rett: "Telling me Illegal Immigrants have a right to be here is like saying the burglar that breaks into your home, now has the right to live there with you." Rett

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Well, Ah do daclare! If it

Well, Ah do daclare! If it isn't Mr. R(h)ett!! Anna batting her eyelashes, now considering using that stuff that Brooke Shields is using. Sheesh. Will they ever have authentic folks for truth in advertising???? Now about my implications....thank you sir. ~A There are no strangers in Paradise.

bjp

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Anna,

deleted duplicate comment.

bjp

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Anna,

suspicious wets the celibate hand of impotencies owner. where empties then this urge verging cath- arctic serge? what unwarming hell ends compulsive pulsings necessary sooth? celibate has none of any answer. Brian P.S. Consider a change to the title, which does injustice to the quality of the poem for the reason that it is too common for the poem's content, and therefore under sells the poem.

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

I adore your poetic

I adore your poetic responses Brian, what an immense *reply*! Perhaps you could help with a suitable title, as I am perplexed. I used the simplicity of it to drive home the ending. Much like an orgasm, eh? ;-) ~A There are no strangers in Paradise.

bjp

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Anna,

Perhaps: Suck is a four letter word. Brian

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Ha! by george, thank you & I

Ha! by george, thank you & I think I *got it*! ~A p.s. thank you ;-) p.p.s. what you think? too much? p.p.p.s. just kidding! There are no strangers in Paradise.

bjp

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Anna,

It works. Brian

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Anna

I would rather that I were visited by an Incubus, but then... would I really? LOL. Where do you come up with the ideas for your poems? You have a very fertile imagination! Always, Cat

Ziggi Elizabet…

16 years 7 months ago

beautiful. I agree that the

beautiful. I agree that the title should be changed but the emotion captured in such a small piece shows wondeful talent. I'm new to the community I would love your helpful criticism as well. Take Care, Zig

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Hi Ziggi (another ziggy I

Hi Ziggi (another ziggy I love was the (one of many) persona of David Bowie, Ziggy Startdust! Perhaps you could lend a hand with an alternate title, Zig? Thanks! ~Anna There are no strangers in Paradise.

loved

16 years 7 months ago

FRIENDS

We are all new to this world going around since million of years but then we get used to it once we have learned to give in Will you like to befriend me and my poetry ?

loved

16 years 7 months ago

just an additional comment if u permit

Your eye takes away my eye I wish to contain it In my folded palms If you permit it

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Lol! Fertile imagination

Lol! Fertile imagination indeed! Seeds are always being sown. (And the truth being told, does one ever know who these nightly visitors are, should we be so aware, of course.) Smile This poem was written in response to a poet cum adversary who is quite misguidedly religiously patriarchal, at least in my opinion. Thank you always Cat. (Ayyyy. Just noticed I forgot to *submit*.. er.. was that an omen? ;-) ~A There are no strangers in Paradise.

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Much enjoyed

You have written a beauty again. The last few of your poems have been excellent and this one is no exception. Well done. Loved it, Lyz. XX

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

lol. Thank you for

lol. Thank you for noticing. hugs, Anna There are no strangers in Paradise.

Cloudthings

16 years 7 months ago

so fantastic to see you more often in spotlight, I am very happy

Aye Anna, & what that lad is missing out on huh? Loved this of course, so fantastic to see you more often in spotlight, I am very happy, your work is so very inspiring (of deeper thought & soul searching, such a good pastime) not the least moving & bloody satisfying... need a ciggy now! (kidding of course, ptehh, cough, splutter, can't bare them around me in truth). Cheers Anni~ "When we feel love and kindness toward others, it not only makes others feel loved and cared for, but it helps us also to develop inner happiness and peace". H.H. the Dalai Lama

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Thanks for reading dear

Thanks for reading dear Anni, I've been on the spotlight often enough, but then who's counting? ;-) One of the criteria I would have with a partner, is non-smoker. Incubus tendencies while I was awake or asleep would be another. Smile. ~A There are no strangers in Paradise.

Quillsvein1

16 years 7 months ago

Anna

I may be misguided, but I am a fan of your poetry. I hope that's enough. Great poem and hilarious ending. GB

loved

16 years 7 months ago

friends

If you befriend me you will also love, oh not me, my poetry will u befriend me?

loved

16 years 7 months ago

comments

If you permit me Then I will comment here Or come over My dear. Good four letter words. Once I was left high and dry and I just uttered ''oh fucks....'' and the other person stopped the car and I got in Thats the power of words four plus IF THAT was at the back of your mind

Kailashana

16 years 6 months ago

dear loved, how could I have

dear loved, how could I have missed all this *loved*? Afghanistan? That's where I came from originally on Neo. ~A p.s. thanks Anni, QV, all for reading. "...when it agrees with reason and it will benefit one and all, then accept it and live by it." ~ Buddha

loved

16 years 1 month ago

i did not know

I was searching for my comments I didn't know oh fucks I had already commented glad u gave me the consent ere I’d lamented Gr888888888 four letter words the one we love most we seldom say Fucks??? No…. L O V E Isn’t it a four? hope u all do and know LOVE[D]