Seren

Oct 14, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Scavenging for Bones(Edit)

A buzzard dancing
in a field,
bone in claw
clicking,
picking further
cannot be real,
in foaming masks
of blood
he basks

A death of beauty
as ether flies,
the buzzards watch
as spirit denies,
a lasting breath
right to last,
and his appetite
grows vast

All to survive
watching
the weak,
awaiting
their date,
death is fleeting but
supper is made,
magnolia leaves
are floating to bay,
this conundrum of dreams
but who's to say

A Native with
the lancing spear
wreathed in snakes,
bead to eye
now buzzards in
some dinner make,
reflex-ed out
in bone to ground,
oozing to
not breathe a sound,
as death did greet
old friends eyes,
they smiled and said
'You took awhile'

— Seren, Oct 14, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

Critiques

Bosscombat

16 years 7 months ago

noo blah hippity hoo haa

POSTED IT!!! Never thought dancing birds could be so.....sexy :p Nah seriously goooood poedizzle 5 stars two thumbs up and a pile of brando jenkins alowishuses wormy poo ♣

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Matty

LMAO At wormy poo .... ewwwwwwwwwwwww shit jokes again .... its sooo hard answering you when you are sitting next to me in the same room ... bizarre ... lmfao thanks for reading this for me and I wasn't sure if it was any good lol as I said I wrote it ages ago ... after watching a doco lol love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Boss you are a riot of

Boss you are a riot of buzzards. (like murder of crows) Jayne, did you know that every Ides of March the buzzards return to Hinckley, Ohio like clockwork? Sometimes there are folks from world over in attendance. There's a pancake breakfast afterwards. Once I had 4 buzzards come from the 4 directions to judge me worthy. They're waiting, patiently. Magnolia leaves indeed, that's when my white magnolia bush is bursting with buds, sometimes a killing frost turns them to rust, sadly. Here I am, hijacked by your poem, see what you do to me? lol. Love, momanna

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Anna …He is

Dearest Anna ... He is sitting here next to me they are on tour with their band and they are staying here for the night before the travel onto the next gig tomorrow night lol ... And my dog had pups five weeks ago and I wormed them again today and well matts making dogshit jokes lmfao ,,, mad bastard omg I didnt know that, where I grew up my mother had Magnolias all round the house and in when they flowered the smell was just incredible .... one of my favourites, and the buzzards where on a David Attenborough Doco and I just thought when they were jigging round their kill with their wings out it looked like they were dancing ... and well thats how I wrote this one ... ok better go entertain LOL I got matty to read this one I wasnt sure if it was any good LMAO I never am ... love and higgest bugs Jaughter x x I just made that word up so if it means something weird in another language I dont wanna know lmfao !!! Huggles

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Hey Jaughter, wish I were

Hey Jaughter, wish I were there. Could you please send me some info on the band, where I could buy some of their, your music? Some links please! And do tell me about your puppies. Love, Mum There are no strangers in Paradise.

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

mum , im in bed on my phone

mum , im in bed on my phone lol . . Email your address i have a few copies of the boys first album . . When i wake up ill email you links to the boys website lol will include a cd of me singing in a cantata i was soloist a few yearz back was some of my best stuff . . Going to sleep well try to snakes away till saurday lol im a big sook i miss the hell outa him x x love and higgest bugz jaughter mwah x x

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Hey Little Sis

I love the thought of Buzzards dancing. Do they sing, too? LOL! Now I've got this image in my head of a chorus line of Buzzards on a stage entertaining an audience of snooty people in top hats and tails and their wives in evening gowns. I'm having a little trouble with these lines, and it might just be me, but I'm hoping for enlightenment from you: With lancing poles wreathed in snakes, now buzzards in some dinner make, reflex-ed out in bone to ground, oozing to not breathe a sound, Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Cat

Two for one tonight lol

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Cat

Can explain those lines lol yay ! .... with lancing poles is tribesmen (was being a little obscure maybe too much so) and the snakes wreathing the poles are some tribal emblems I saw in the same doco and the buzzards become their dinner ... reflexed out in bone to ground as they die and oozing to not breath a sound as they bubble and cook lol ... hope that made sense its 3 am lol love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

Thanks Huni

That makes a lot more sense... I think my head is full of gravel today, lol! Love, Cat

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Cat

Well mines full of gravel most days LOL and wasnt sure if I needed to expand on that last verse I might play around with it in a couple of days I need to breath from it LOL played with it too much I think love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Orphani

16 years 7 months ago

the material struggle of

the material struggle of life and death .The paradox of death feeding life, and the ultimate question of the spirit, are all cooked up and seasoned beautifly. bon-appetit. ..........o

Kailashana

16 years 7 months ago

Bon appetit. indeed.~AThere

Bon appetit. indeed. ~A There are no strangers in Paradise.

hugo la rosa

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Serene:

A scavenger's grim love of death, waiting for its partner who took a while for the feast! Death is the empty hall where life will take place again, isn't it? Just a few strokes of editing, and the poem will be in tip-top shape! I did the same with one of my poems today, you know, "Drizzling Rainbows". Sincerely, Hugo

Pumpkin123s

16 years 7 months ago

wow

wow loved your poem!! It's so cool i really enjoyed it. Thank you

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Pumpkin

Dont ask me how but when I answered comments earlier I missed yours so I apologise lol I am having a blonde day ... thanks so much for the read and the comment its always nice knowing when people enjoy them :) will be round having a read of you later tonight ... dinner time here, down under lol love Jayne x x

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

Dancing for their dinner...

I had a little trouble with those same lines. While you made it plainer with your explanation, I think it was a little obscure. I think maybe you can tweak them to make them more palatable. Ha, ha... couldn't resist! I used to have a t-shirt with a graphic that had two buzzards sitting side-by-side on a branch, and one says to the other:" Patience my ass... I'm gonna kill something." They really do look like they could, Ya' know? I guess that I was reminded of that shirt by your last line:" You took awhile" Higgest hug bugs, ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Gee

Trust me to be obscure and confuse everybody .... LMAO @ the buzzard shirt ... That last line was meant to be .... 'you took awhile' as in buzzards and death face each other all the time soooo buzzards are close to death all their lives and do take awhile to meet something they are constantly around hahahha ... love and higgest bug hugs Jayne x x x

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Hi Aunty Seren, Lol.

Well done. I love it and the title is as awesome as this very vivid poem. I envisioned in color, not wise, lol. And buzzards, how original yet cool, lol. This is really good and as usual, I am glad I waited, Hope now that the household is full of men that dinner is going to be served, lol. Say Hi to all and well done with this beauty. Love from Lyz. XX

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Lyz

LOL funnily enough I am alone for the next two days Snake was packed up and shipped out this morning with his brother .. he got invited out to see his other brother and his wife performing and wasnt going to go(because of me) butttt I told him if he didnt go I would make his life hell for the next two days lmfao !! he needs a break from all this ... And now I am trying to work out what to do with myself ... thanks for the read and the comment this ones a little raggety Ann sooo I will fix it up and edit later .... Love and higgest bug hugs Jayne x x x

hugo la rosa

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Jayne:

Excellent!!! I love the new edition of the poem. And I like the end, especially. Sincerely, Hugo

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dearest Hugo

Thank you hugo I just thought I might try that and see what everyone suggests ... ok? or still needs some work still not sure of this one lol its been the bane of my life for nearly two months ... thanks for taking the time to come back and read ...(huggles) with love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x