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Rub Salt in an Open Wound (and You Shall Feel Human)

I am a vacant shell
stationary in the grasps of time
overlooking the significance
in mountains left to climb

I feel nothing, nobody
numb, null and void
tied up in the woven string
of a marionette long destroyed.

I am a hollow mask
forgotten, and cast to one side
I've walked to the edge of the earth
and where I knelt, I've etched a line.

I feel tattered, damaged
frayed, drained and tired
expelling a bleak atmosphere
undeserving of all I've desired.

I am fire, I am water and I am stone
I am oxygen, I am pharmaceuticals and I am smoke
I am alcohol, I am open wounds and I am salt
I am blood, sweat and tears

and I feel human
— Bosscombat, Oct 13, 2009

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lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Wonderful

I hope you really do not feel this way, forlorn. You are my last read and I am glad that your last stanza and line cleared that up for me. Lol. You are a terrific writer Boss, and I loved this and I really love the title. This is Grand. Love Lyz. XX
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

You write...

What you feel. I am always astounded at the feeling that you put into your work. You profess not to feel, but then go on to prove yourself wrong. Your isolation is not something you can help. I think I understand that now. You are human! And you touch me with every write! Great work, friend. ~ Gee
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

My Darlin Matty I adore this

My Darlin Matty I adore this write my brother ... but touched a hot blade to an open wound soooo I will just say fucking well done ... another one blew my mind first anna now you with all my love and higgest bugs of love Jay-knee 2bums mwah x x x
Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 7 months ago

Damn Good,

Work on the rhyme of the third stanza, it detracts from the rest. Maybe "divide"? Dunno. Love that last line....SMACK!!!! Heehee Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
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vinton

16 years 5 months ago

WOW! Thats about all I can

WOW! Thats about all I can say when I read peotry one Neopoet...but that is one of the best I have read in a while (and I've been reading a lot of Bukowski)I celebrate your genius.