Brown hair blue eyes

She has brown hair

That makes me stare

Her eyes are like blue

Like I see the blue sea

She looks so fair

And does at me glare

And then as she stares

She shakens my hair

I have very little in any case

I will not mind

If she pulls the rest

— loved, Oct 12, 2009

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Country/Region: ROU

Critiques

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

hello

These lines are a bit rough: Her eyes are like blue Like I see the blue sea and She shakens my hair (I think shakens should be shakes) The poem is a very good start, but needs a little work. Always, Cat

loved

16 years 7 months ago

thanx

i create newer words hence shakens thanx for ur encouragement