Stuart Reiss

Oct 11, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Redemption

Please hand me now you darkest book
My Jasper eyes do yearn to look
To understand its darkened pages
Unlock the secrets of the ages

I fear no book, no relic, no spear
I see the truth, the answer is near
One body in time, a force of one
Dark riddle or rhyme can be undone

From darkest book to horrid fable
I can undo and turn the table
Dark book is gone, its power broken
One tender kiss and soft word spoken

So find your wings, they are quite real
To soar once more, to live and feel
You are alive again once more
To you the one I do adore

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Country/Region: AUS

Comments

lyz

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Stuart

This is really good, I enjoyed reading. Last stanza, first line, 3rd word, you left out the r on your. I am glad the dark book is gone, lol, Great mystical write. Love to you and yours. Love Lyz. xx

Stuart Reiss

16 years 7 months ago

very nice pick up....

Thanks for the pick up. I love this one and kind of feel that I gave birth to it...born from a long time lost. .....thanks very much Liz...love the avatar regards Stuart

Cloudthings

16 years 7 months ago

You are clear & the poetry is sweet... Lovely.

Hi Stuart, it's funny it has just become clear to me that often when people rhyme in this fashion, it seems to me to come across as trying too hard many times, I think it is a challenge, but you have managed it really smoothly & this is not only a pleasure to read, but interesting & a good naration as well. You are clear & the poetry is sweet... Lovely. Cheers Anni~ "When we feel love and kindness toward others, it not only makes others feel loved and cared for, but it helps us also to develop inner happiness and peace". H.H. the Dalai Lama

Stuart Reiss

16 years 7 months ago

your dead right....

Your soo right, it was a challenge and I agree. You've got to be careful of the ryhming thing. I have quite a few poems that ryhme and I hope I have it covered..Got quite a few on love strangely...but I have been forged of Iron so I dont really care if people think they're mushy....but I do like constructive feedback Really happy to have shown this poem to Neopoet and its loyal ones as it gave me much pleasure to show it for the first time. Best regards Stuart P.S - Really like to thank Fleur MacDonald .....THANKS!!!

seabhac

16 years 7 months ago

It caught my interest

The title and the first verse is often all that appears on Neo stream and there are so many good poets and poems out there but I was glad i found this one and it didn't disappoint me, it could be taken to mean many things, so appeal to many readers. Well done I will return to see what you post in future Best Wishes Seabhac

Stuart Reiss

16 years 7 months ago

just really happy to be here .....

This is one of my favourites, I am really glad you liked it. I think this was one of those that I wrote at 4am with a few lines already in my head....so I grabbed the laptop. One of the hardest times in my life to be honest (Jun - Aug 09) Well all I can say is...... Thanks so very much Seabhac best regards Stuart

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Dear Stuart

I can see you love rhyme ... so do I ... this is just wonderful ... makes my scribbles look like scraps .... but these lines Please hand me now you darkest book My Jasper eyes do yearn to look To understand its darkened pages Unlock the secrets of the ages this was nearly like a spell, a wizards spell drew me in and I couldnt NOT read ... awesome work ... well done, glad Fleur talked you into joining you are an asset to the site love and hugz Jayne x x

Stuart Reiss

16 years 7 months ago

Thats fantastic

Thanks Jane, I was blown away by your comment as most of my poems have only been read by people who are not poets or have little interest so it has been kinda like feeding your pearls to the pigs..... Really glad you liked it....there are more coming but I cant promise you that you will like them as much as this one...Redemption is a fav of mine. best regards Stuart

Candlewitch

16 years 7 months ago

hello

Great title and it really fits the work. You rhyme well and the poem is inspirational without feeling preachy. I really loved the lines that Jayne picked out and felt the same way as she did about them. Always, Cat

Ravenshakti

16 years 6 months ago

Dear Stuart

This is a very beautiful poem; as you've already heard above. I just want to add my thoughts too... and all I can say is this: It's a glorious poem...and I love it. I believe we all have wings; we just have to learn to fly. A remembering process. Thank you for sharing this beauty. Gentle regards, Raven