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Hope in the Clouds(Edit)

Peeking through clouds
watching earth move,
from way up here
it looks real smooth

Those little specks
that move on the ground,
are wandering madly
all about town

A sudden explosion
takes my surprise,
pulling the clouds back
I look through the skies

Seeing the earth
on fire and destroyed,
maybe they'll learn
once all missiles deploy

Fighting goes on
across a worlds face,
and they wonder?
why man looses faith

I worry for worlds
that I'll never see,
hoping my grand-kids
will grow and be free

So I do my small bit
in word and in life,
hoping for something
to shed a new light

And once all is done
with nothing left to do,
I'll kick up my heals
and dream and hope too

— Seren, Oct 10, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Beyond the Black Stump..Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, P.K.Page, W.H.Auden, to many and various to include them all ...

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Hooded Stranger

Hooded Stranger

16 years 8 months ago

Angelic

I can visualise you as an angel looking down on a world in a midst of confusion, war and corruption. Great perspective, but yet sad that so much of what you wrote it true. Great emotional piece. HS ps. typo? why man starts (too) loose faith - to? ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- "With all that I am and all that I could be, I walk this earth and yet nobody sees me".
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear HS

Do they have rock Angels other than the Brats dolls lol cause I am no angel except maybe of music ... love music and I have always been the wild child me lol ... but as I have gotten older I calmed down thankfully ... So glad you liked this one its just a whim i was looking at the pictures and could picture I guess angels looking down wondering wtf we are doing to each other ... sad but true and thanks for picking up the typo that words gone now have done a full edit ... last night it wouldnt save weird thing Love and huggest bugs Jayne x x x x
Geezer

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

You have quite...

an eye for the details. I wish that everyone thought like you. Maybe all our weather and ecological problems would disappear. I know, let's develop a new bug that will eat polluters! LOL That could be our small part. I can't send higgest bugs today, they are all mating. So I guess I will send you a whole bunch of higger bugs. The hug bugs are all busy hugging, and I think that soon we will have enough for everyone on earth, wether they like it or not.LOL ~ Gee ~ P.S. Wendy says you have very good taste in men.
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Gee

Where I grew up? in a house full of adults even my sister and brother where left home and married I was alone a lot when I was little, and I get told ALOT adults are talking be shhhhhhhh soooo I became a quieter around the adults and I guess I pay more attention to the small details because its become ingrained in me .... I have left a message on two of my other poems about the hug bugs I got an idea for them lmao Love and higgest hugbugs Jayne x x x
W

Wafi

16 years 8 months ago

Hope In The Clouds

"I worry for worlds that I’ll never see, I want future grand-kids to grow and be free So I do my small bit in word and in life, hoping for something to shed a new light" Great you are dear Jayne, with your great thoughts! Hope this hope in the clouds rains on us and shed a new light of love and peace, soothing the wounds of humanity... Hugs, Wafi "Culture, location and beliefs; All vanish with love!" ~Afzal Shauq~
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Wafi

Awwwww thank you so much for your beautiful compliment this one was very rough and when I tried to edit it last night I wouldnt let me lol sooooo I have done a small edit I feel like it flows a little better now ... (huggles) thank you so much for taking the time to read and comment love and hug bugs Jayne x x x x x
L

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Wonderful write dear Jayne

Exciting words born from a satelite sight, well done. Great content, and Gee told me to contribute to the breeding cycle, so many hig bugs and hug bugs back to you. lol. Love to all , Lyz. xx
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dearest Lyz

Thanks huni this one was rough as guts lol its a little better now:) I got the flow moving a little smoother ... hopefully that will do it ... LOL I am making a picture for the hug bugs since I gave birth to them I decided to give the poor little buggars form sooooo will send you a copy through Jades email when they are done will take a couple more days I am going to animate him lmao love and higgest bug hugs Jayne x x x
themoonman

themoonman

16 years 8 months ago

Jayne...

peeking through the clouds... sometimes it is a hard vision to shake... where our world could end up if the missile's deploy, I hope they never do! loved this write Jayne. Richard
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Richard

I hope they dont deploy EVER ... upsetting to think of but its a reality the world faces even if most dont acknowledge it ... thanks for the read and the comment hun nice to see you ... love and hugz Jayne x x
hugo la rosa

hugo la rosa

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Jayne:

Beautiful poem! I like poems that extol the graces of our earth. Especially poems that defend her, and do what you just did to raise the consciousness of its inhabitants. You've done a great work! As usual, the versification is impecable. Sincerely, Hugo
Seren

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Hugo

Thank you for the wonderful compliment ... means a lot this piece was writen out of nowhere .... you gave me a big smile thank you love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x
Electric Blue

Electric Blue

16 years 7 months ago

hope

Jayne Hope ............Is there such a thing? Mine seems to have run out........................................... As a child full of day dreams is the place i long to be. As dreams are all I have left or memories of dreams You break my dreams with this reality so back to dreams I go. Always Electric blue lonesome blue
Seren

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Awwwwww Magz huni (huggles)

Awwwwww Magz huni (huggles) this ones a tad real isnt it ... sometimes I have to ground myself in reality to really enjoy my fantasy writes ... and take myself away ... I have one I am putting on tomorrow night I know you will love and I hope at the end you'll be smiling ;) higgles love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x