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Rejuvenated

 

Rejuvenated

Once more my love

You seem to be
in a quandary

Why to do you appear
to be  so dazed?


you seem to be worried

Each hour

Each moment

Tell me
What can be done

To assure you
As always.

 

I have for ever contributed  my best
I know to that
you now too also confess
but the whirling’s in your mind

I find are changing,
fast,

Every time


Your worry is my gravest concern

This fact I hope you do discern

My love come back

To your original strain

Surely  you will soon be
like before
once again...


 


— loved, Oct 09, 2009

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lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Lovely

Quite good, enjoyed reading and I love the way it reads like you are speaking to someone. Well done, Love from Lyz. XX
loved

loved

16 years 8 months ago

thanks

thanks dear Lyx rgds xx
weirdelf

weirdelf

16 years 2 months ago

A shared intimacy, well written

the lines- I have always done my best That you too do confess feel a bit awkward,perhaps- I have always done my best I know that you confess also This fact [I] hope you do discern is an awkward inversion for the rhyme, perhaps- This fact I hope you can discern Cheers, Jess, “The political arena leaves one no alternative, one must either be a dunce or a rogue.” Emma Goldman
loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

Thank u very much

I shall make the necessary advised amendments thanks sir. loved
loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

Thank u very much

I shall make the necessary advised amendments thanks sir. loved
Ladderwords

Ladderwords

16 years 2 months ago

I agree with Jess about the

I agree with Jess about the two lines. I find myself wondering with the subject about what is behind the lover's troubled eyes. I find myself tripped up with the last two lines, "A real unit of love/ we will form regain". This poem resonated with me, as I am sure it has with anyone who has had a love, after all we've all thought, "What are they really thinking?"
loved

loved

16 years 2 months ago

thanks

advice well taken rgds too urs loved
loved

loved

16 years ago

thanks

the neopoet Its an honour to have two poems as EVOLUTION at any one time for a non-poet like me . I thank thee I thank thee I thank thee who soever the deciding factor ye be