This Heart of Mine

Wish I could unplug
This broken heart of mine
And cease it from this incessant throb of pain

Wish I could take my heart back to God for repairs
And keep it away from the eyes of lustful women
Who had many times stolen it away

Wish I could trade this tortured heart of mine for a baby’s
This heart now loaded with thorns and broken glass
Giving nothing but endless piercing and bleeding

Wish I could mend this devastated heart of mine
And make all the once broken cords vibrate again
And have a heart filled with true love, laughter and a little lie.

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Comments

Jesse.D

16 years 7 months ago

poem

this poem is direct and makes sense....i wish these things too, so i can identify with the theme...your imagery is vague, but clear...i like the last 3 words...a little lie...interesting antonyms to your point...i can't criticize it...i'm not one to ruin someones work...i like it, so keep writing

adjei agyei-baah

16 years 6 months ago

thanks for comment

Thanks for your frank comment.I become moved and touch when another creative friend comments on my work.By coincidence, the last line also happens to be my favorite "........love, laughter and little lie".You know, it very heart-breaking to tell the truth for it to be taken as lies.Will be writing more.So keep watching!

adjei agyei-baah

16 years 6 months ago

thanks for comment

Seren

16 years 7 months ago

Welcome to neopoet like

Welcome to neopoet like Jesse has said your imagery is vague ... but clear on the other hand I look forward to your next write I feel you have an ability once you grasp a theme and stay with it ... Kind regards Jayne-Chloe

adjei agyei-baah

16 years 6 months ago

thoughtful of you

Thanks for this warm welcome.Hope your inspiration will sustain me to contribute my quota to the development of Noepoetry.Watch out for more.Thanks again for your frank comment.

Nordic cloud

16 years 6 months ago

Welcome to you too you with the difficult name.

Well it probably sounds so beautiful when pronounced by your self, how could it not be, it sounds beautiful when I have a go at sounding it too, its two A's and then the B very musical in its rhythm. I like this, its perhaps because of your handsome look that the girls fall for you. No? If this is indeed a personal poem which I feel it is as you have expressed it with vigour. I think I would start the poem- I wish- as immendiately we are with you, the I in the poem. The unplug has some odd connotations its electricity you are talking about, perhap? But it is other things one thinks of in a poem about love, one cannot help it! Untwist, unwind, unravel, mend....? "And cease it from this incessant throb of pain"...'And cease its incessant throb of pain'.... is the straight forward way here, but...and would its pain did cease...tormenting me... just thinking around it Adjei !!! Its also all right as it is. Yes it is. Would that "I could take my heart back to God for repairs" (what a lovely idea) And hide it there from eyes of lustful women so many times they stole it right away....no......as you had it? broken glass" thus/So pierced and bleeding so many a time they leave no peace behind Wish I could ´mend my devastated heart and cause the broken chords to sing again and filling it with love so true, with laughter and a little lie! (Not sure I like the little lie!!!!!!) I know what you mean but I wouldn't want to blow this up in importance at the very end of a poem so that that is what one finishes the thought with, hanging there? Oh my its not easy to keep to your version and at the same time think up others, but I have done some thinking around it and you could do a little here and there, but the overall idea I like and it would be worth the effort. I had a go at it others might help too? Love to you from Ann of Norway.