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The Big Yellow Bus

The big yellow bus flies ‘round the corner,
Brakes’ scraping autumn’s cerulean air,
Intent on picking up the sojourner,                        
Young girl with velvet ribbons in her hair.
It’s the first day of school.

Plaid dress, white lace, by loving fingers sewn,
Hemmed to proper length well below the knee,
She stands pigeon-toed and shy, blonde curls blown;
Reading, writing ‘rithmetic, that’s the key.
It’s the first day of school.

Sturdy brown shoes, Daddy tied the laces;
She stares down at her feet, afraid to look
At bouncing heads, strange and grinning faces,
Each clutching to heart the critical book.
It’s the first day of school.

The big yellow bus at last comes to land;
Six years of waiting—now a little fear—
Reluctant to let go of mother’s hand,
The young girl says goodbye with smiling tear.
It’s the first day of school.

— deelilah, Oct 07, 2009

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Region, Country: Northwest USA, USA

Favorite Poets: E.E. Cummings, Robert W. Service, Emily Dickenson

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Race_9togo

Race_9togo

16 years 8 months ago

Hey

This is wonderful. One thing, maybe replace "the young girl" with "she" in the second to last line, I think: we already know who she is from the rest of the poem, and the flow would also be better, maybe. MAYbe! Respectfully Jim "Laws and rules don't kill freedom: narrow-minded intolerance does" : Race
deelilah

deelilah

16 years 8 months ago

Hi Jim

Thank you for reading, enjoying, and taking the time to comment. I'll have to ponder a change where you suggested. I have restricted myself to 10 foot metered lines, so I need 3 beats, 2 more with she. I know it can be done, I just have to think about it. Thanks for the suggestion, I think you're right. Deelilah