Geezer

Oct 07, 2009 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Wounded Mind

In Palo Alto, they was three to one

Our hearts and guns were blazin'

Across the 'Rio' they went on the run

The boys were down right amazin'

We set the Californians free in 1846

Them Mexi's glad to see them go

Us Texans up to our ole tricks

Remember The Alamo!

Thunderous hooves of calvary

Swords flashing, and banners wave

Muzzle flashes a sight to see

Sending many a man to his grave

We fought the land of rocks and sand

The mountains and the hills

Soldiers making final stands

Battles...Tests of wills

Let us draw some lines in the sand

Keep what we have won

We have fought and died for this land

At the point of sword and gun

Cannon fire, thundering blasts

Gouge gaping holes in the forts

Men get the lines breached at last

Using swords as last resort

At Bueno Vista, ole man Taylor

Yelled "Give 'em more grape, Captain Bragg"

The General had seen them waver

Seen it was in the bag

The Castle took some poundin'

Troops of Scott's got hit back too

Pretty boys fought like demons pouncing

Just cadets, just kids... way too few

Peace now to Mexicalis

Leave the hate behind

I'll retire to good ole Nogali

Too many deaths stored in my mind

— Geezer, Oct 07, 2009

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Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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Critiques

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Whoa

This must be one of those writes you were working on about the wars. This is excellent, very well done and I am learning in the bargain. I think this maybe one of your best. Flowed well and I felt I was reading a book. Dear Gee, you have outdid yourself with this marvelous write. Well done. Love to all, Lyz. XX

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

Must be a sign...

While I was writing this one I just happened to be listening to a two hour segment of Mexican music performed by a Mexican Symphony. I listen to classical music while I work, and it was just by chance I caught this. I am always surprised to hear from you and all the Aussies so soon after I post something, but I guess I shouldn't be. After all, when I am posting it is usually after midnight and sometimes later, like today. I was having a hard time sleeping, so I sat down to write about 2 am. I do have a sense that this is some of my best work. I have fueled my work with the wonderful comments that you have all made, and tried hard to make them worth your attention, by making them as factual as I can. I look up pertinet facts, and try to make it seem as though it was written by someone who was there. I am so glad that I seem to be doing a fair enough job at it. Thank you so much for your encouragment. My cannon salute fires love bombs to all, ~ Gee

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Gee

Wow ...Gee thats amazing lol and I learnt something I didnt know before ... your writing just keeps getting better and better ... sorry for short comments am tired tonight .. you take care of you and yours love and higgest bugs Jayne x x

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

I Too...

Am learning, about the people and places that have suffered war. Trying to make it personal, is what drives me to look up facts and put them in the minds of my soldiers. Thinking about the things that make men go to war, the things they see, like those Mexican cadets at what was called the Castle. It was said that they fought like demons. The Texans were impressed with their courage, despaired by their youth. [ They were between the ages of 10 and 18 yrs. old.] I am glad I have undertaken this quest. Maybe I can make at least one person see, that men are the same the world over, that we all want the same things in life. A family, security, the right to persue life, liberty, and happiness, [so long as it does not interfere with those same rights of others.] I think many people forget that last part. [Especially the so-called Moral Majority] Thank you so much for reading and commenting, no matter how short. I don't mind that you make them short. I want you to get all the rest you need, so that you can come back soon, and give us more of your beautiful poems and mind. ~ Higgest of all bugs, Gee

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Gee

I just had to come back and read your comment and poem again ... I didnt know this story and its made me curious and given me something to do for the afternoon ... the winds are howling here today we cant go outside its funny august used to be our windy month and the last two years its been september we have gotten them ... I am going to do a little research out of curiousity lol you ahve got my interest with the story of those couragous young men ... courage and bravery isnt just for the old is it ? but the line between bravery and foolish tomfoolery blurs with young men of today lol but I love all my boys even though they are a bunch of rouges lol but then I think they maybe like their mum a little ... take care huni and thanks for the explanation on this one I love learning new history and this war poem is just wonderful ... love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x x

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

History lessons...

I am glad that I have piqued your interest. That is exactly what I had intended. Not just for you, but anyone who reads these poems. I want to draw them in and give them something to think about. Yes, the young men of today, sometimes have skewed ideas of what bravery is. A lot of them think that sticking up for their gang and killing over slights such as " You looked at my girlfriend wrong or You owe me $20 for a bag of dope," is bravery. We as parents and elders must teach them that this is not bravery and courage. It is foolishness. I'm sure that your boys are fine young men, if they are anything like their mother. I hope that you have fun, and find some fascinating facts. Stay out of the weather, and feed those higgest bugs some of the love and hugs I send. ~ Gee P.S. Now that i know what to feed them, you can send some of them back. I don't want to overburden you with them. ~

hardcorechick28

16 years 8 months ago

very nice

I like all your war stuff but this one did flow very well. You have done an amazing job with both the war series and "killer", keeping them both separate and unique in their own way. i am interested to see what would happen if "killer" should ever join the war....all my best....

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

I think I will stay the course...

I have flirted with Killer joining up. One of those I have written, has the opportunity by the throat,[so to speak] but, I think it best for now, that I stick to my original idea, and not try to insert another factor. They are both doing well on their own, and there will be ample time and occasion for Killer to examine what at first glance seems to be the perfect career. [I mean after all, legalized murder and mayhem?] Thank you, and chin-up... Gee

DloganB

16 years 8 months ago

Wow

This was great, I love tales and stories of war. I also love using the battle words and just going off with shots and booms blasts and crashes Always a good read when done right

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

Battle sounds...

Hearing being the second most important sense we possess, I think it important to have the sounds of the battles. I am so glad to hear that you think I am doing it right. As I said: I have tried to use correct facts and real people to make it interesting and informitive. Thank you for your comments, ~ Geezer "Youth and ideals make excellent partners and formidable opponents" I like to think that this was something that a statesman like Davy Crockett would have said. [Maybe he did, the quote just came to me out of the blue]

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

Geezer

I would like to compliment you on this wonderful war/history poem. It kept me glued to the screen until the very last line. Excellent work! Always, Cat

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

Thank you...

I am glad that you like it. It makes me feel like I did what I set out to do, which is, to make people understand that there are people involved in these wars, they are not just things that shoot and kill, but flesh and blood human-beings. Men who never get over having to kill or be killed. Thanks again, ~ Gee

Kailashana

16 years 8 months ago

(((((Gee)))))People have

(((((Gee))))) People have become statistics. Worldwide statistics. Casualties. Thank you for this poem my friend. ~A p.s. Check out my new blog. THe other side of why.

Geezer

16 years 8 months ago

People have...

You are right people have become just statistics, I want to show that there are people, real flesh and blood people, not just numbers you read about. Not just a number, [4,956] or whatever it is now that have been killed in a conflict. Somewhere there is a mother, father, siblings, wife, and/or children, who miss that person. Someone whose life is changed forever. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my work. I will continue to try and make it as factual and real as possible. ~ Gee

Nordic cloud

16 years 7 months ago

En garde!

Have you studied military strategy or have you always been so taken up with battles? Remember the red haired chap in the film: "Dr. In the House?" He was telling us about a battle, as many do with all the soldiers represented b the salt cellar, the jam jar etc: My mother's great friend had a collection of tin soldiers beautifully authentic and we, my sister and I, used to set them up in formations for fun, some kneeling others on horseback all so correctly made with the right uniforms. That was the only kind of 'killing' we didn't do in my childhood, now everything is killing, all the games on the net++. No wonder humanity goes on doing it in real life. Later I have fenced for my county, but that was never killing, in fact it is a sport with very few accidents. It was more like a strategic dance than a fight. I liked the movement, attack, called the fleche-arrow. as it was just that where one took off from the back foot and sailed through the air hitting your opponent with the bendy foil, on his chest as one passed, that was beautiful whenever one could do it. I didn't fence when hey used electric cords, we were free. just like the rock climbing then free style no fixed bolts in the rocks and no magnesium for the fingers, its all changed. En garde, are you ready Sir Geezer? Yours Q Ann of Norway. Title: Not so rumbustious as the poem Language use: mixed with things like Mexi's Pacing: good Theme: not especially Begin/end: fine Logic: okay

Geezer

16 years 7 months ago

No... never studied strategy

I am trying to present the wars from the combatant's point of view. These poems are supposed to read something like a diary. I thought that maybe if I used facts as the background, it would lend some authenticity. I used Wounded Mind as a fractured title from the Wounded Knee, story of American Indians, who were the indigenous people, as were the Mexicans to Texas, the ones we pushed out. I guess that war isn't exactly your cuppa tea. I hope to redeem myself tomorrow with a post that doesn't feature killing of any kind. Is the next move En point? ~ Sir Gee