MY LOVER, MY CONTAINER

"Be my reservoir store me up hold my excess be my cup touch the rim - with dignity sup drink from the source let it fill you up. Shield my exuberance, stem its flow: where the residue goes nobody knows.... be the conduit between my hopes and fears let the laughter drown out these tears. A wanton waste this overflow can never be - as its abundance flows between you and me. Channel these rivers with passion I implore around islands of our being let them flow - forever pure.

BjR 6 October, '09

— Bonitaj, Oct 06, 2009

About This Poem

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

emogothgirl

16 years 8 months ago

nice

that was a very good job. i thought the rhthym didn`t make much sense though, it didnt flow too easily. kind regards, maggie

Bonitaj

16 years 8 months ago

Thanks Maggie!

I'm so delighted that my poem made sense to you - since we come from such different worlds! Delighted that you took the time to stop by! lol Bonita j

Bonitaj

16 years 8 months ago

Hi K!

Trust you to take it that literally! lol But seriously - I was looking more at the idea of 'containment' and how huge bodies of water/like people's emotions are difficult to do just that with! What inspired this was my blog of the previous day... Thanks for stopping by! Boni

Seren

16 years 8 months ago

Dear Boni

Sip from the cup of life .... dont ask me why I thought that ... BUT Boni I really hope that this one sees spotlight its just wonderful and the metephor useage like Kal said is just wonderful ... loved this hun !! love and higgest bugs Jayne x x x

Bonitaj

16 years 8 months ago

Jayne dearest!

From one who "lives" in the spotlight - that is a real compliment! It may not happen this time... but someday, some magical day! lol Thanks for your ongoing support! Boni

lyz

16 years 8 months ago

Hi

This was well done and interesting to read. I will be honest and say the title led me to believe this was a love poem. How wrong I was. Love from Lyz. XX

Michael Anthony

16 years 7 months ago

Hey B!

Great effort here. Contrary to lyz's comments, I felt this was a very eloquent love poem. At least that's how it struck me. Where does the overflow of love's initial exuberance go? This is one of my favorite pieces of your work - very good expression. This is more an issue of taste than a crit, but I would have liked this even more without the rhyming. Still, I really enjoyed this one. Best Mike