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Where were you dear

Where were you  dear

 

Where were you

When the lights went out,

I was waiting for you

I liked the way

You pushed me about

Like the way

You always used to

 

But the kissing was just great

As ever before

Like ‘twas the night before

Where were you

When the lights were out

 

I was in the wash room

My dear

Were you afraid of the dark?

She looked from the corner of her eye

Saw Jack smile

She smiled back

No my dear

I knew you were near.

 

 

 

— loved, Oct 05, 2009

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

16 years 8 months ago

hello loved

It makes things a bit confusing when you go from "I" to "she"... and who is Jack? You have a good start here, and I think it can be salvaged with some cleaning up and polishing. Always, Cat
loved

loved

16 years 7 months ago

thanks

thanks for you comments
loved

loved

16 years 6 months ago

thanks

jack was her youth time bf lover